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14 Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

Nowadays, there is a debate over whether college students should be required to attend class or not. Some people claim that universities should require students to attend classes, while others believe that going to class should optional for students.(it is a good idea to write in your own words: some people claim that students have obligation to attend classes, while others believe that students have rights to choose.) As a matter of fact, this issue is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different views due to their distinct backgrounds. Therefore, there is not a universal answer to this question, and whether one choice takes precedence over another depend(s) on the specific situation. The decision, nevertheless, is not an easy one to make. Actually, the final judgment should rely on a case-by-case analysis. As far as I concerned, however, I agree that university students should be required to attend the class.

First of all, people attend university since they want to learn something to improve themselves. (,)And, people can get information through the class. Furthermore,(here need a sentence that can link between self-study and no participation in classes; otherwise it is a little surpprising) although people could learn knowledge by self-studying. Professor will not only teach people some knowledge, but also let them know how to use and develop it,(.) which the learning process might be more important.

Secondly, joining classes can provide the opportunity to communicate with others. In the class, professors always give some topics for students to discuss. In the discussion, people will be surprised that so many fresh ideas his classmates have. students can get the fresh ideas that they never know if they lose the classes.People could contribute and share knowledge with each other and learn from others. In my opinion, that is a more efficiency way to learn.

Admittedly, there are several disadvantages to attend classes. Some people such as John criticize that classes would destroy their original thinking ability, such as John. Nash. And still, some classes are really boring for students.

In conclusion, According to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to generate an integrate whole and thus become more convincing than any single one of them. (there is no subject in this sentence.)We could safely conclude that university student should be required to classes unless you are a genius.   

Nowadays, there is a debate over whether college students should be required to attend class or not. Some people claim that students have obligation to attend classes, while others believed that students have rights to choose. As a matter of fact, this issue is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different views due to their distinct backgrounds. In my opinion, whether one choice takes precedence over another depends on the specific situation. Actually, the final judgment should rely on a case-by-case analysis, but in general, I have the tendency to agree that university students should be required to attend classes.  模板的痕迹较重，关键是有些显罗嗦。

First of all, people （全文最好统一用students）attend university since they want to learn something to improve themselves, which classes can provide.需要至少再用一句话说明take classes的好处，可以考虑将下面的划线部分提前 On the other hand, although people could learn knowledge by self-studying, in the class, Professor will not only teach people some knowledge, but also let them know how to use and develop it. Honestly to say 这个表达好像不对吧，有查过吗？, it is difficult for people to understand this process merely through self-studying.  

Secondly, joining classes can provide 这里最好有一个明确的对象 provide students with  the opportunity to communicate with others. In the class, professors always give some topics for students to discuss. In the discussion, people 前文一直在说students, 现在又突然变成了people?will be surprised that so many fresh thoughts are pushing to you from your classmates and they are free. Unfortunately, people will miss the opportunity to learn from the others if they absent the class.

Admittedly, there are several disadvantages to attend  attending classes. Some people such as John·Nash criticize 时态？that classes would destroy their original thinking ability. Besides, some classes are really boring for students.

In conclusion, despite the fact that there are some disadvantages in attending classes, the advantages of joining classes are far more outweigh ？. As the reasons mentioned above, we could suggest that attend classes, unless you are a genius.

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