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[作文互改] issue72 每天1篇,报个到吧

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发表于 2012-5-7 18:59:23 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
72. Governments should not fund any scientific research whose consequences are unclear.


Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.


提纲:1、对不确定前景和结果的科学研究,政府采取谨慎的态度是必要的
2但是,如果因为科学研究的结果可能有风险而不支持,那么该项科学研究所可能带来的巨大福利也会被放弃,人类的思维能力是有限的,不可能对所有的consequenceclear,不能因为有风险而放弃研究,如此只会阻碍人类文明的进步和技术的发展。
3、在面对风险的研究时,政府要考虑的是如何在这种研究上减少风险对人们的伤害,而不是该不该投资
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With the explosive development of science and technology, scientific research is playing a more and more important role in the promotion of the national strength. In such a situation, government should attach great attention to the consequence of the research. However, government should not stop funding because of the unclear consequence.

Admittedly, it is necessary for the government to take a prudential attitude to the consequences of the scientific research. Government should consider the benefit of all the people in the nation and irrational fund of scientific research would have an great harmful influence on people. Research activities with medical and ethic risks, such as the clone, must be careful to conduct. In some situations, the products of clone would cure the lesions of organs while others would lead to ethic problems. If the government has no direction to these research, it would have a tremendous impact on the society, even a turmoil.


However, governments should not quit funding because of the unclear consequences. The abandonment of risks also means giving up all the possible benefits coming with the risks. The information we human could get is so limited that we cannot have a clear anticipation for all scientific research. If we abandon all the noncommittal research, the nation wouldn’t have any innovative achievements and the civilization would come to a standstill. Such as playing poker, if you intend to know all the cards of the adversary, then you have known the results of the game and it make no sense for playing poker.


Actually, when it comes to research with unclear consequences, governments ought to consider how to reduce the risks and have less harmful influence on the society, but not whether the research should be funded or not. For instance, the research of nuclear energy would inevitably produce the nuclear radiation, so building nuclear power plant has an unclear consequence. However, the energy produced by the nuclear fission is enormous, supporting the human life and production. What governments should do is to seek new and reliable ways to reduce the negative impact of nuclear power plant instead of abandoning it.


In summary, to some extent I agree with the policy that governments should take prudential attitude to the noncommittal research, but not quit funding for the research. What urge governments is to minimize the risk of the research so as to have less harmful effect on the society.

现在对issue心灰意冷,真不知道接下来20天该怎么办,还是坚持每天写1篇吧
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沙发
发表于 2012-5-7 23:07:05 | 只看该作者
很好的提纲
板凳
发表于 2012-5-7 23:08:58 | 只看该作者
单觉得第一段对立场的论述可以改改,可以写得更清楚鲜明
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-8 08:20:41 | 只看该作者
单觉得第一段对立场的论述可以改改,可以写得更清楚鲜明
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/5/7 23:08:58)

谢普渡哥指点,issue很迷茫。。。。
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发表于 2012-5-8 10:35:51 | 只看该作者
你现在的提纲是自己临时想的还是怎么的?如果能临时想出来的话,我觉得你的思路和内容上不会有什么问题,就要从提升语言的组织等方面提高了
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-8 11:15:49 | 只看该作者
你现在的提纲是自己临时想的还是怎么的?如果能临时想出来的话,我觉得你的思路和内容上不会有什么问题,就要从提升语言的组织等方面提高了
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/5/8 10:35:51)

提纲还没单独列,写的时候临时写的,想完会参考5.5
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发表于 2012-5-17 23:12:25 | 只看该作者
With the explosive development of science and technology, scientific research is playing a more and more important role in the promotion of the national strength.(我建议你可以换换句式,越来越重要,用with great importance,还有就是用现在完成时更好一些,贴切一些,你觉得呢) In such a situation, government should attach great attention to the consequence of the research. However, government should not stop funding because of the unclear consequence.(

Admittedly, it is necessary for the government to take a prudential attitude to the consequences of the scientific research.(
这里不要犹抱琵琶半遮面啊,一定要写出原因,老外的思维是直接说出自己的想法,直接写出为什么是必须的呢?) Government should consider the benefit of all the people in the nation and irrational fund of scientific research would have an great harmful influence on people. Research activities with medical and ethic risks, such as the clone, must be careful to conduct. In some situations, the products of clone would cure the lesions of organs while others would lead to ethic problems. If the government has no direction to these research, it would have a tremendous impact on the society, even a turmoil.
(
这段句子和句子直接的连接词呢?没有linking words句式也单一,加油吧)
However, governments should not quit funding because of the unclear consequences. The abandonment of risks also means giving up all the possible benefits coming with the risks. The information we human could get is so limited that we cannot have a clear anticipation for all scientific research. If we abandon all the noncommittal research, the nation wouldn’t have any innovative achievements and the civilization would come to a standstill. Such as playing poker, if you intend to know all the cards of the adversary, then you have known the results of the game and it make no sense for playing poker.


Actually, when it comes to research with unclear consequences, governments ought to consider how to reduce the risks and have less harmful influence on the society, but not whether the research should be funded or not. For instance, the research of nuclear energy would inevitably produce the nuclear radiation, so building nuclear power plant has an unclear consequence. However, the energy produced by the nuclear fission is enormous, supporting the human life and production. What governments should do is to seek new and reliable ways to reduce the negative impact of nuclear power plant instead of abandoning it.


In summary, to some extent I agree with the policy that governments should take prudential attitude to the noncommittal research, but not quit funding for the research. What urge governments is to minimize the risk of the research so as to have less harmful effect on the society.

你的思维很好,论据也很有说服力,表达上再加油,一定进步很快。你很棒!
8#
发表于 2012-5-18 10:03:18 | 只看该作者
I think your ariticle is very good. I like your first para.

One suggestion

"Actually, when it comes to research with unclear consequences, governments ought to consider how to reduce the risks and have less harmful influence on the society, but not whether the research should be funded or not"

一般我们but结构时,都是说 not. . , but. . . 而不是. . . , but not.

I hope it makes sense to you.

Therefore, you may say: "governments ought not to , but . . .  "
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