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[作文互改] issue 10 文化传统那篇~求拍吖拍~!!!

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发表于 2012-5-1 14:43:43 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式

求拍~感谢了~!!!
claim
Government must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
reason
It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
[Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claims is based.]

As Edward Glaeser, a professor of Harvard University, once said, “city-our greatest invention-makes us richer, smarter, greener, healthier, and happier”, it is true that cities, especically those major cities, are the principle force when it comes to a nation’s development. As the energies of the nation’s economy, the prosperity of cities directly accelerates the progress of the nation. Moreover, cities can hardly mantian their prosperity merely by their own tax revenue.Thus, cities need fund form government to support their convenient facilities and improve dwelling environmrnt. Form this point of view, I agree with the claim that our government should ensure major cities receive the financial support in order to thrive. However, is it necessary for our government to subsidize major cities due to preserve nation’s cultural traditionsI think it depends on how we define "major cities".


Firstly, if we consider these “major cities” as the capitals or biggest cities with long and fascinating history, like Beijing, Roma, London and so on, almost born with the nation, those cities have kept the distinct cultural traditions of their country, especially in their historical sites: such as the Forbidden City in beijing, the leaning tower of Pisa in Roma or the Buckingham Palace in London, those major cities are biggest center of cultural traditions of the nation.therefore, government concerned about the protaction of cultural traditions should subsidize this kind of cities.



On the other hander, if we consider these “major cities” as New York, "the big apple “or Hong Kong, one of the "four Asian tigers “, we can hardly find the pure traditional culture of its nation. Not only because they are “young” compared with those historic cities but also because their mixture culture. With the advanced economy and variety of opportunities, these cities attract people all over the world,bringing differentnationalities, religions, languages and culture. People celebrate Chinese New Year (spring festival) in New York, while citizens in Hong Kong enjoy the Charismas Day. Therefore, in this globalization era, the primitive cultural traditions get blurred in those cosmopolis. One may argue that modern urban culture generated and developed in these cosmopolitan cities. However, facing so similar skyscrapers, business centers, Mcdonals or even the same rhythm of the citizen’s life, we may assert this modern urban culture has nothing to do with our cultural tradition. In this situation, protecting nation's distinct cultural traditions should not be the main reason for government to subsidize this kind of city.


Untouched by the wind of globalization, modernization or the assimilation of cultural group, however, we may find, the speaker unfortunately neglects, many rural areas like small cities, or countries which equally contribute to nation's cultural traditions as those cities are the places where nation traditions are better preserved. Thus, Form the point of protecting cultural traditions; these places deserve more concern form government than major cities. For one thing, only in these rural areas, due to the poor connection from the outside modernized world, can people still keep their traditional life style inherited form last generation ,such as clothing, eating habits, etc. and the unchanged life style keeps cultural tradition more integrate and intact. For another thing, unlike big cities, attracting funds or talents is usually with great difficulties for those areas. since protecting cultural tradition is a money-consuming task, rural areas need more financial support form government.


To sum up, it is where nation’s cultural tradition truely generated and preserved in that our government should figure out before subsidizing rather than whether it is a major city.

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沙发
发表于 2012-5-1 20:55:20 | 只看该作者
Major city就那么几个吧。作者英文水平很高,但围绕major city的定义来写有点不利。你问一个美国人美国的major cities,他可以给你全列举出来。major cities不是象我们那样定义的,已经被历史定义好了。
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-1 21:07:19 | 只看该作者
Major city就那么几个吧。作者英文水平很高,但围绕major city的定义来写有点不利。你问一个美国人美国的major cities,他可以给你全列举出来。major cities不是象我们那样定义的,已经被历史定义好了。
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/5/1 20:55:20)



额~我是想说即使是major cities 也要分类型,是这个意思。这样子站不住脚嘛?
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-1 21:08:48 | 只看该作者
啊~忘了感谢了,第一次发作文,能被普度歌拍好激动~!!!
5#
发表于 2012-5-1 22:11:17 | 只看该作者
先说下,作者的写作水平很不错的,语言表达上不成问题的,内容上多加练习会进步很快的,加油,明天再细看
6#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-1 22:36:55 | 只看该作者
先说下,作者的写作水平很不错的,语言表达上不成问题的,内容上多加练习会进步很快的,加油,明天再细看
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/5/1 22:11:17)


嗯嗯~先谢谢啦~这是我第一次写,忐忑忐忑。
7#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-2 21:38:50 | 只看该作者
求拍啊求拍~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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发表于 2012-5-4 10:09:05 | 只看该作者
关于这个题,我觉得首先要说明的reason是否成立,reason是否必然导致claim,最后就是claim的目的是否一定达到
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-4 12:15:43 | 只看该作者
关于这个题,我觉得首先要说明的reason是否成立,reason是否必然导致claim,最后就是claim的目的是否一定达到
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/5/4 10:09:05)


嗯~我差不多也是这么想的,所以论证文化传统是否在大城市就是论证reason。
我也在想是不是应该加一些政府不可能也没有能力支持所以的城市。但发现字数已经太多了。
10#
发表于 2012-5-4 16:50:02 | 只看该作者
关于这个题,我觉得首先要说明的reason是否成立,reason是否必然导致claim,最后就是claim的目的是否一定达到
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/5/4 10:09:05)



嗯~我差不多也是这么想的,所以论证文化传统是否在大城市就是论证reason。
我也在想是不是应该加一些政府不可能也没有能力支持所以的城市。但发现字数已经太多了。
-- by 会员 cherrytt (2012/5/4 12:15:43)

选择自己觉得重要的必须的写就好,不一定要求全
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