In this editorial , the author recommends that the school board of Nova High School spend a greater portion of the available funds on buying more computers, and that any other schools in the district adopt interactive computer instruction. To support this recommendation, the arguer provides two reasons: first , the decrease in the dropout rate of Nova
                                    High School occurred after the addition of interactive computer instruction in three academic subjects. In addition, last year’s graduates made some impressive achievements in college. The line of reasoning, however, is unconvincing with oversimplified and unwarranted claims.

Firstly, the author commits a fallacy of causal oversimplification. The line of the reasoning is that because the adoption of interactive computer instruction preceded the decease of dropout rate, the former event leads to the latter. But this is fallacious reasoning unless other possible causal explanations have been considered and ruled out. For example, perhaps the improvement of learning atmosphere is  responsible for the fall of dropout rate, or perhaps the decrease is caused by other programs the school provided. As a result, any decision aimed at addressing the problem of dropout rate must be based on a more thorough investigation to gather data in order to narrow down and locate the actual cause of the decrease of dropout rate.

 

Secondly, the author falsely assumes that the achievements of last year’s graduates can be attributed to the introduction of interactive computer instruction . in fact ,this is not necessarily the case. it is more likely that those students hadn’t studied the three academic subjects at all. Lacking evidence that links the achievements of the graduates’ achievement to the interactive instruction , this argument is highly suspected .

 

Finally, even if the decline of the dropout rate and the achievement of last year’s graduates are the direct results of the interactive computer instruction, it is still unknown that whether other schools in this district will have the same experience as Nova
                                    High School did. It is possible that Nova and another school are so dissimilar in many aspects that the another school is unlike to have the same consequence if it adopts the interactive computer instruction.

 

In conclusion, this argument is not persuasive as it stands. To make this argument logically acceptable, the author would have to show that the introduction of interactive computer is the main cause of the decline of dropout rate and the impressive performance of last year’s students. In addition, he should prove that other schools in this distinct will get the desired effect if using interactive computer instruction throughout the curriculum. only with more convincing evidence could this argument become more than just an emotional appeal.

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