11月1号考试(作文求拍<急>)

第一次发作文到网上,主要是就快考试了,看了斑竹改的文,太强了,发现还不知道自己到底作文怎么样,只知道自己写闷头写?急啊~~~~~德克帮帮忙哈

Before 1970s, the extended family life was the mainstream life-style in china.And each members, in the family,had an intimate relationship. Along with the elapsing of year,do the relatives still crucial for us? Yes ,it is still important,although it is not obviously.

As no doubt, with economic growth has come centralization,chinese citizens live in cities where community and the extended family have been abandoned. People hold a new life-style called”Two generation-households” which means that each family had a single child and we never lived with our grandparents anymore. Due to these, people might believe that our extended family members had minuscule influnce on us .

As a matter of fact, from my perspective,the extended family was still important for us. As a youth,we might leave our parents and attended school in the other province currently.At that time,the relative accurately comes to be very important, say, before I would go to beijing to study,my parents teleponed my sister who lived in beijing to ask her to take care of me.After I had been there,my sister helped my a lot,such as,received me in the station,invited me to her home to eat dinner every weekend and held the birthday party for me these years. My sister now had become an very important person in my life.

On the other hand,the relationship plays an important part in the modern socierty.The relatives, whose job is relate to the thing which is so complex that we can not solve it aiv ourselves,might deal with it smoothly. To give a demonstration, job is hard to find at present,but I can easily land a job in a company which my uncle worked on .

As the examples I have just present show,I might not uphold that our relatives had limited influnce on our lives. In constrast, these phenomenons are to some degree partial which means that the extended family still play a crucial role in present-day socirty.

MM，我是31号考，因为自己水平未知，所以不敢对你的作文大改。

总的印象是：你走的路线是OG上的散文路线（这也是我最近力求达到的目标），没有用模板。另外，没有用两边都写点的方式，赞。这种一边倒的方式，就怕有的题目没法吹出3点的内容来。

开头很不俗套，我也在研究这样的形式，但是在考场上临时想出这么个出彩的开头真不容易，所以我第一段还是用自己的模板了。

句式的多样化挺不错的，如果能语句间的逻辑再紧点，除例子之外的部分再多写点，相信更易得高分。

谢谢亲~~~可是我也是仅限于一些题目,有的完全就没办法了~~~~~~~而且现在貌似问题还是多啊~