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作文修改(TWE166) 谢谢!

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发表于 2008-8-4 21:29:00 | 只看该作者

作文修改(TWE166) 谢谢!

TOPIC166  是说为什么人们对special present总是记得的 第一篇作文,还有两周时间啦~今天练D结构……所以语法可能不太好。我一会语言上再改改。先谢谢大家啦~~提意见吧~~

When we get gifts from our important friends or families, we always treasure the gifts very much and remember them for a rather long time.

Among countless factors which contribute to this situation, three conspicuous aspects are as follows.

One of the primary causes is that the gifts are from people we are familier with or even who we love. Therefore, when we look at the gifts, they comemory the relatives and remind us of the people.

The beauty of the gifts is responsible for this circumstance, as well. Tired at we are, looking at the beautiful present can make us relax. Meanwhile, some presents have special meaning which make us remember them all the time.Take me as an example. Last year on my birthday party, my best friend  sent me a huge beautiful calender. She was going to Germany and wanted me to remember the date when she was not by my side as I always asked her the date. Now, the calender is standing on my desk, waiting me to look at it silently. Each time when I am stressed out, drop my pencil and want to give up, I look up and see the big calender, and I smile. It's just like my friend is waving at me and tell me to keep up, tell me that I still have lots of days to do wonderful things and I cannot just stuck by a tiny problem. With the calender, I conquered a number of difficulties and the calender really means the encouragement from my best friend. How can I forget that?

The unforgettability also results from that the gifts mean a kind of self-provement. Imagine that, if a person is not welcome and not kind, will he receive gifts from others? Definitely no! Given gifts by someone means they like us and they treasure us. It's a proof that we are not bad at making friends and there are someone who love us.

I draw conclusion that these three above are main contributors to our unforgetability of certain presents.


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沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2008-8-4 21:57:00 | 只看该作者

自己修改一遍啦~

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                    getting gifts from our important friends or families, we always treasure the gifts very much and remember them for a rather long time.

Among countless factors which contribute to this situation, three conspicuous aspects are as follows.

One of the primary causes is that the gifts are from people we are familiar with or even who we love. Therefore, the gifts, especially from who we love, are commemorating both our love and the people.

As well, the beauty of the gifts is responsible for this circumstance. Tired as we are, looking at the beautiful present can make us relax. Meanwhile, some presents have special meanings which make us remember them all the time. Take me as an example. Last year on my birthday, leaving for Germany, my best friend sent me a huge beautiful calendar to remind me of the date when she was not by my side as I always asked her for the date. Now, the calendar is standing on my desk, waiting me to look at it silently. Each time when I am stressed out, drop my pencil and want to give up, I look up and see the big calendar, and I smile because it's just like my friend is waving at me and tell me to keep up, tell me so many days and wonderful things are waiting for me so I cannot just stuck by a tiny problem. With the calendar, I conquered innumerable difficulties.
                    The calendar really means the encouragement from my best friend. How can I forget that?

The remembrance to the gifts also results from self-proof meaning from the gifts. Imagine that, if a person is hatred by others, will he receive any gifts? Definitely no! Given gifts by others means they like as well as treasure us. It's a proof that we are not bad at making friends and there is someone who loves us.

I draw conclusion that these three above are main reasons why certain presents are unforgettable.

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