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好心人路过看一下,给点意见好吗

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发表于 2007-7-19 15:27:00 | 只看该作者

好心人路过看一下,给点意见好吗

People attend college or university for many different reasons .why do you think people attend college or university?

 

 

Colleges and universities can be dated back to long time B.C. in Athens, Plato built up a place for scholars and students to discuss problems and search for the truth. Modern universities also started in Europe and they have been standing for the best education and the haven of knowledge ever since. Nowadays, first-classed universities and colleges also aim to science research..

In china, about 50 percent of high school graduates can attend colleges or universities. However, some of them are not aware of the real reason of attending a university. There is a phenomenon that most of them just want a diploma and find a good job after graduating. And these students do not work hard in universities and cannot understand what the professors teach. However, they are bound to miss the chance of getting a good job. I think this unawareness of the importance of attending a college may be like a waste of time. On the other hand ,Bill Gates, a self-made business titan left his university at his twenties after finding the target and career of his life. From my point of view, if one cannot know the reason for sure, he cannot do well in university.

People go to colleges and universities to study for their own thoughts. Some for the reason that there, people can obtain more knowledge and become well-educated. Some for the reason of improving themselves and meaningful experiences.

In addition to the two reasons above, I think there is another reason: to make friends. In university , students come from all region in the country even from abroad, with so many different people together, we can see the communication and integration of the cultures and ideas. And we can also find friends who share the similar hobbies and have a common outlook with us. They will be the tremendous treasure we have in our life.

No matter what the reason is ,one should always study and work hard for it. It is a sad thing doing something without a definite reason and target.

沙发
发表于 2007-7-20 19:56:00 | 只看该作者
你可以先看一看我给别人的修改和本版上的 胡敏高分作文

我在iBT区也有一个写作的帖子,你可以搜索到。

板凳
发表于 2007-7-24 15:04:00 | 只看该作者

lz的写作风格是典型的中文文风,在表明观点之前铺垫很多。而英语写作应该是直线式的思维,一般都是开宗明义,然后展开论据和批驳,这样结构清晰,逻辑性强。

个人认为你第一段完全可以不要,和topic关系不大。第2段应该和第3,4段融汇一下,调整一下结构。


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