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Agree or disagree, "people should only read books about real events, real persons"

There are lots of books for us to read in the world, including physics, mathematics, biology, collection of poems, novels, and so on. Some of them are about real lives that we need to know both for our academic studies and our daily lives. The others are not relevant to real events or facts, but they are born to entertain us, and these kinds of books are indispensable.

Various reasons could support my viewpoint, and I will figure out some of the most important ones as we discussed bellow. Firstly, these books which are not contingent with real facts or real people actually entertain us everyday. It always contains lots of coincidences happened to the hero in the book which make the book interesting and make us absorbed in the book. Though it is not about real lives, it based on the real lives, and the coincidences in a story or a tale leave us a wide space to imagine.

Secondly, the book irrelevant with real facts is more approachable for people, especially fairy tales for children, because it is not only interesting but also educative. For instance, "Harry Porter" is my favorite book since I was a very little boy. Harry is such a brave and clever boy that he dares to fight against powerful enemies. And his Z-shaped scar and magic stick brought me into the magic world. And I learned a lot from it, such as friendship, hard-work, and the spirit of never give up.

Although books about real events or real people provide people with a more precise knowledge, the book itself always seems to be outdated and dull so that most of us do not like reading it. So my perspective is that books based on real lives, and with a little fictions are to some extent better.

There are lots of books for us(remove) to read in the world, including(subjects like) physics, mathematics, biology, collection of poems, novels, and so on. Some of them are about real lives that we need to know both for our academic studies and our daily lives. The others are not relevant to real events or facts, but they are born(created) to entertain us, and these kinds of books are indispensable.

Various reasons could support my viewpoint, and I will figure out some of the most important ones as we discussed bellow(remove). Firstly, these books which(remove) are not contingent with real facts or real people actually entertain us everyday. It always contains lots of coincidences happened to the hero in the book which make the book interesting and make us absorbed in the book(attract us). Though it is not about real lives, it based on the real lives, and the coincidences in a story or a tale leave us a wide space to imagine.

Secondly, the book irrelevant with real facts is more approachable for people(books dipicts fantacies are more approachable),(;) especially fairy tales for children, because it is not only interesting but also educative. For instance, "Harry Porter" is my favorite book since I was a very little boy. Harry is such a brave and clever boy that he dares to fight against powerful enemies. And his Z-shaped scar and magic stick brought me into the magic world. And(not a good idea to start sentence with "and") I learned a lot from it, such as friendship, hard-work, and the tenaciousness.

Although books about real events or real people provide people with a more precise knowledge, the book itself always seems to be outdated and dull so that most of us do not like reading it(it is not a fact, not persquasive enough). So my perspective is that books based on real lives, and with a little fictions are to some extent better(Do not use "so' in essay, it is not formal.Therefore,  in my opinion, books that combines reality and some fantacies are better.)

Your content is still kind of empty. Try to give more spportive facts and examples with brief stentences. Again, do not use "so' for "therefore", used "therefore"!

Not a good idea to start a sentence with "and",it shows weakness.

Avoid repetition and lengthiness, for instance,"I will figure out some of the most important ones as we discussed bellow", this is very outstanding example for most people; do not repeat or over stress what you are going to do, instead, put more concerntration on how to make your sentences mroe robust.

感谢CD的支持，我权衡再三，决定保送本校的研究生了，这些天给大家添麻烦了，或许我读完研究生，拿到英联邦的注册结构工程师就直接移民了，我有个师兄就这样的，现在在加拿大。

这位帮我改作文的姐姐，你辛苦了，再次感谢你，还有帮我看过作文的pumpkin和rio两位版主，谢谢你们了。

我不会忘记这里的，因为这里有一段我人生中最美好的回忆，毕竟我为之努力过。

我也不会放弃我出国的梦想的，再见了CD，也祝同样抱有出国梦想的人们早日实现自己的梦想。

很明显那个是MM...

cong for graduate!