新手的作文，大家随便拍，感激不尽

第一天准备作文，毕业一年了，有一段时间没碰过英语了，以前也就是个四级水平，大家评一下这样的能给多少分，请随便拍

It is unrealistic for people to expect work for one company or under one employer for all their life. Agree or not?

The development of the work can be seen as a part of human history. It is seems certain that most of us have formed unrealistic picture of work for one by one company or under several employer for all their life. They always imagine work under several employer have a beneficial influence on their work life. However, the information I have collected make me believe that nothing is further form the truth than this view.

  First and foremost, with the globalization has come urbanization, more and more people realized that the corporation only provide a free opportunity to study abroad for the man who was willing to work for the company for all their life. Normally study abroad is too expensive to people who do manual works, what is more, it is a good chance to enrich your academic and social expensive. When you returned after achieve your study, you must gain advantage over other and have acting an important part in your position.

  In addition, work under one employer can increase your loyalty. As a loyalty employee, you can gain more opportunity than other competitor. It is show in a recent survey that people who play an important part in the company are usually worked more than ten years for this company. The employer deemed that more work time in his company means more recognized company's teamwork and cultivate. So work for one company for all their life can give you more opportunity to promote yourself.

  The last but not least, one of the virtue of people work for one company for all their life is When they retire at a age of sixty, the company often regarded he or her as a sort of hero. You deserved much better than others, not only include pension but also respected.

  It is obvious that the development of the modern society requires people gain more opportunities to promote him. In the final analysis, work for one company can give you an advantage to over other rivals.

不知道楼主第一句的seen as 是不是想表达“被看做为”的意思，个人感觉好像应该是regard as ，刚刚查了查金山词霸，没有查到see as 这个短语，不知道这么是不是有点小bug。

得去上课了，下次再接着聊。

嘿嘿，regard as ，记下了

what the hell did you smoke man ?~

dont take toefl , otherwise, you will get 2-3 on this section !

只看了一段，提醒楼主写好后修改下小拼写或语法错误，虽然小错误是允许的，但出现太多就不好了，呵呵。

The development of the work can be seen as a part of human history. It is（动词重复？）
                seems certain that most of us have formed unrealistic picture of work（working？） for one by one company or under several employer for all their life. They always imagine work under several employer (employers？) have a beneficial influence on their work life (lives?). However, the information I have collected make (makes?) me believe that nothing is further form the truth than(抱歉，没懂！) this view.

no to mention too many grammatical mistakes

1. thesis statement do not clear (the last sentence of the first paragraph)

2. main ideas do not support theme

3. too many Chinglish expressions

and more... 我快吐血了，眼睛快看瞎了，脑子快冒烟了，也没看懂。。。but do not be frustrated, i was the same level as u when i first started.

呵呵，

It is seems certain that most of us have formed unrealistic picture of work for one by one company or under several employer for all their life.

只看了第一段，这里，work for one by one company，这么楼主是不是想表达去几个公司工作的意思，只是one

by one 是副词，用在这么修饰company 好像不大对，不确定，呵呵。

还有就是“have formed unrealistic picture of”这里好像有点像中国式的英语，不知道改成“have dreamed of”是不是好点。

另外，题目好像是说好多人都梦想一生只在一个地方工作，可是楼主的第一段好像是在说好多人都在梦想分别在几个地方工作，这里是不是有点离题了，

其它关于第一段的语法，2006fighting前面说了，我就不啰嗦了。

呵呵，楼主不要灰心，毕业一年还可以用英语写作文，我怕我到时候会连个英语单词都写不上来了。

加油！