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[twe150]这是我第三篇作文啦,拍板拍板,越狠越好

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发表于 2005-8-5 17:23:00 | 只看该作者

[twe150]这是我第三篇作文啦,拍板拍板,越狠越好

Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer.



The problem of the function of television is a much-debated one in the modern society in that with the development of technology, television affects every part of people’s lives, including children’s, as one of the most popular medias. Confronting the question that whether watching television is bad for children or not, people hold different ideas. Some people hold the view that watching television is bad for children due to the violent, unhealthy contents of several programs while other people refute this notion because of the knowledge which the programs refer to. Personally, I side with the former and I will reason and provide concrete evidences to support my viewpoint as follows.



The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that watching television will take up a large quantity of children’s time. So many outstanding programs attract their attention, and on the other side, reduce the opportunity to communicate with others. The more time children spend on television, the more unsociable they are likely to be. Hence, the most striking conclusion is obvious that television constrain not only the space and the time children should have to communicate but also the normal development of children’s character.



In addition, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that watching too much television is harmful to children’s physical welfare. They may be unwilling to play football as before in order to return home as quickly as they can to watch a favorite cartoon film; they may also prefer to stay in front of the television rather than go out for an excursion in such a beautiful Spring.



In my early age, there was an astonishing affair I never forgot that a lovely little girl in my neighborhood committed suicide just after seeing that a supernatural being couldn’t die through hanging himself on TV. This reality makes me believe that watching television is bad for children.


In conclusion, despite some advantages of watching television, the drawbacks are far outweighing. Thus, it is sagacious to support the statement that watching television is bad for children.
[此贴子已经被作者于2005-8-5 17:34:32编辑过]
沙发
发表于 2005-8-6 02:04:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用keqi5866在2005-8-5 17:23:00的发言:

Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer.



The problem of the function of television is a much-debated one in the modern society in that with the development of technology, television affects every part of people’s lives, including children’s, as one of the most popular medias. Confronting the question that whether watching television is bad for children or not, people hold different ideas. Some people hold the view that watching television is bad for children due to the violent, unhealthy contents of several programs while other people refute this notion because of the knowledge which the programs refer to. Personally, I side with the former and I will reason and provide concrete evidences to support my viewpoint as follows.



The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that watching television will take up a large quantity of children’s time. So many outstanding programs attract their attention, and on the other side, reduce the opportunity to communicate with others. The more time children spend on television, the more unsociable they are likely to be. Hence, the most striking conclusion is obvious that television constrain not only the space and the time children should have to communicate but also the normal development of children’s character.



In addition, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that watching too much television is harmful to children’s physical welfare. They may be unwilling to play football as before in order to return home as quickly as they can to watch a favorite cartoon film; they may also prefer to stay in front of the television rather than go out for an excursion in such a beautiful Spring.



In my early age, there was an astonishing affair I never forgot that a lovely little girl in my neighborhood committed suicide just after seeing that a supernatural being couldn’t die through hanging himself on TV. This reality makes me believe that watching television is bad for children.


In conclusion, despite some advantages of watching television, the drawbacks are far outweighing. Thus, it is sagacious to support the statement that watching television is bad for children.


你的结构和语言都写得不错,但模版还有改进的余地。建议你自己再把每个比较通用的句子图一瞧一下。比如:is a much debated one,去掉形容词,就成了is a one.有语法错误哦。另外,建议开头些少点。
板凳
发表于 2005-8-9 22:36:00 | 只看该作者
conclusion is a little bit short
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