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发表于 2005-4-8 09:38:00 | 只看该作者

再次请求你们的批评---96

As we all know that modern people confront with more stress in such a hurry world. How to release from stress is vital important for every person who want to work efficiently and success in his or her career. Different people have different ways. some people prefer to reading or exercise, while others like working in their gardens. As for me, I would like to talk with my friends or family members. Reasons for this argue go bellow.

the first reason why i prefer to talk with my friends or my family members is that they can give me courage or talk jokes with me while i face difficulties during my work and study. As a graduate student form a poor town, i have to work in part time jobs while i should study hard for my course. So I hardly had time to travel or sing in KTV and i often felt tired after i work or study all day long. Every time i am in such conditions, i always talk with my friends, my girl friend or my parents and they all encourage me to hold on and do not give up. Hearing their words, i would fell energetic again and get rid off stress while i laugh at their jokes.

Moreover, my friends who work or study with me and my family members with whom i live all know me very well, therefore, they can give me much beneficial advice for these difficulties i accounting with in my job or study, which is the main cause of stress for me. my friends working with me are all so kind that they will help me for solving difficulties and their advice is always helpful because they are all experts in the field i work in .my family members such as my parents and my brothers, having been living with me for more than 20 years, so they know my personal character and my faults very well, so their advice are quite useful for me escaping stress.

Certainly, there are still many ways, such as playing basketball, play chess and travel for me to release from stress, however, talking with my friends and my family members can give me so much encouragement, joys and useful advice that i am no doubt choosing this way to escape stress.

沙发
发表于 2005-4-9 02:11:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用不会游泳的鱼在2005-4-8 9:38:00的发言:
As we all know that modern people confront with more stress in such a hurry world. How to release from stress is vital important for every person who want to work efficiently and success in his or her career. Different people have different ways. some people prefer to reading or exercise, while others like working in their gardens. As for me, I would like to talk with my friends or family members. Reasons for this argue go bellow.

the first reason why i prefer to talk with my friends or my family members is that they can give me courage or talk jokes with me while i face difficulties during my work and study. As a graduate student form a poor town, i have to work in part time jobs while i should study hard for my course. So I hardly had time to travel or sing in KTV and i often felt tired after i work or study all day long. Every time i am in such conditions, i always talk with my friends, my girl friend or my parents and they all encourage me to hold on and do not give up. Hearing their words, i would fell energetic again and get rid off stress while i laugh at their jokes.

Moreover, my friends who work or study with me and my family members with whom i live all know me very well, therefore, they can give me much beneficial advice for these difficulties i accounting with in my job or study, which is the main cause of stress for me. my friends working with me are all so kind that they will help me for solving difficulties and their advice is always helpful because they are all experts in the field i work in .my family members such as my parents and my brothers, having been living with me for more than 20 years, so they know my personal character and my faults very well, so their advice are quite useful for me escaping stress.

Certainly, there are still many ways, such as playing basketball, play chess and travel for me to release from stress, however, talking with my friends and my family members can give me so much encouragement, joys and useful advice that i am no doubt choosing this way to escape stress.



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不建议写了不修改,那么写再多也。。。。

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