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roymond

各位大牛们请帮我看看这样的作文到底在那个档次？有哪些地方要改进的？

现在速度还是提不上，各位有何良策啊，还望不吝赐教！

                                 save it for future or spend immediately
As the living condition in my country become more and more comfortable in recent years, many people's salarie has an apparent increase. While many so called white-collarers are youngers who would like to spend their earned money immediately for new digital products and prevalent costume, I still prefer to saving the money instead of spending it since I have to ues the deposit to buy an apartment for living,raise up my future child and deal with emergencies, each of these could require a large amount of money.

It is hard to imagine how large the cost is to buy an apartment in our city as the economy as well as the price of a house growing in an unbelieveable pace. For instance, it will cost you at least 8000 RMB for only one square meter to buy an apartment in suburb, that is to mean if you want to buy a house with approximate 100 square meters, you must pay as much as 800 thousand RMB, not to mention that in the center of the city. And the apartment is totally undecorated. As soon as graduating from college, unlike the local students, who can live with their parents, we ecdemic students have buy an apartment as quickly as possible. Although the bank loan give us a great help in owning a house first, we still must to save money for the considerable first pay.

Furthermore, bringing up my own child is as much cost as buying a apartment. Nowadays, most couples are only allowed to have one child by the law which was instituted since the exorbitant increasing of the population. The only child is much more precious then has ever been before for the family. To bring up a child can not only mean the cost to feed and dress him/her, but the countless money for his/her studying, interesting as well as entertainment. Take studying for example. From the primary school to the university, a family have to spend no less than 200 thousand RMB for their child to study. And the total cost to raising a child is unbelievable. Without saving our salaries, how can we afford such a great deal of money?

Finally, saving money is also helpful when confronting emergencies. Unexpected news ofen comes abruptly. When one of your family members sufferring a terrible disease, when a relative coming to borrow you some money for the compensation of a traffic accident, when there is a beneficial opportunity to invest money in a project, you will be gratefull for the deposit you have saved for years.

In conclusion, it is wise for you to save earned money compared with spending it at once and you will benefit it in your future life.