互改小组——bitemilk的作文贴

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第一句很长； As a result of declining profits, the owner of Movies Galore, a chain of cheap movie-rental stores intends to reduce operating expenses instead of raising prices, because recently one of its store in downtown Marston reduced the opening hours and ceased to stock DVDs released more than 5 years ago, but raised few complaints from customers.

我觉得可以从新组织，让结构更紧凑。