TWE025， 赞成或反对一个project

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025 It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

题目是是否赞成一个project, 衡量优缺点
for example 赞成, 我用这种结构:

第一段, 开头段, 表明赞成

第二段, 赞成的第一个原因, 说优点

第三段, 赞成的第二个原因, 说优点

第四段, 让步段(显得全面和客观), 说缺点

第五段, 结束段



I agree that it would serve the interests of majority residents to build a shopping center in our neighborhood. The shopping center will meet the purpose of solving the persistent problem that faced by areas far away from the center business district. Nevertheless, such a proposal may bring certain problems that must be carefully to minimize.

Consider convenience is the most important benefit that the new multi-function shopping center will bring to us. We will no longer rushing to downtown every time as we do before. When we need food and groceries, we can purchase at the supermarket that normally located at the basement of the shopping center; When we look for books we can go to the library or book store in the shopping center; When we want to send a parcel, there is a post office in the center; You also can find a bank in the shopping center in case you need cash or want to pay bills. If we are too busy to prepare dinner, we can treat ourselves at various restaurants in the center. We can do all of the above in one stop in the shopping center that is just 5 minutes walk away.

The new shopping center will also help to add value to our properties. When people consider buying a house, they will evaluate the environment first. Since people are busy working, most buyers prefer a place that is within easy reach of facilities such as school, subway station, and shopping center. According to the property market report of Singapore, the average selling price of apartments that nearby a shopping center can be $20,000 higher than those far from the shopping center. So the nearby new shopping center will not only benefit our daily life, but also help to increase the value of our investment in the long term.

As even the most beautiful rose has thorns, it is true that building the new shopping center will poses certain problems that must be addressed. First, the opening of various shops in the shopping center will increase the competition and lead to bankruptcy of neighborhood shops. But on the other hand, there will be a lot of new job openings in the shopping center. A second problem involves the risk that the transportation in and out of the shopping center will increase the opportunity of traffic jams and residents may find that it is difficult to find a parking lot in the neighborhood. While these are not reason enough not to build a shopping center, they nevertheless are concerns that planners must be aware of.

To sum up, given the above reasons, and since we can take all of the above disadvantages of the project in to consideration and find ways to solve those problems, my intuition is that building a new shopping center makes good sense and should be the correct choice.

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-3-5 11:56:48编辑过]

whitesand

谢谢wawa, pengstone, lawyer

pengstone修改得很到位, 语法, 冗句, 清晰表达, 我都仔细体会了。
lawyer, 我的语法一向不强，结合pengstone的和我自己的修改，不知道下面的还有错误吗？

I agree that it would serve the interests of most residents to build a shopping center in our neighborhood. The shopping center will solve the persistent problem that faced by areas far away from the central business district. Nevertheless, such a proposal may bring certain problems that must be carefully to minimize.

Convenience is the most important benefit that the new shopping center will bring to us. We will no longer rush to downtown every time as we did before. When we need food and groceries, we can purchase them from the supermarket that normally located at the basement of the shopping center; When we look for books we can go to the library or book store in the shopping center; When we want to send a parcel, there is a post office in the center; In case you need cash or want to pay bills, go to the bank in the shopping center. If we are too busy to prepare dinner, we can treat ourselves at restaurants in the center. All of the above can be done in one stop in the shopping center that is just 5 minutes walk away.

The new shopping center will also help to add value to our properties. When people consider buying a house, they will evaluate the environment first. Most buyers would prefer a place that is within easy reach of facilities such as school, subway station, and shopping center. According to a property market report of Singapore, the average selling price of apartments that nearby a shopping center is $20,000 higher than that of those far away from the shopping center. It seems that the new shopping center will not only benefit our daily life, but also help to increase the value of our investment in the long term.

As even the most beautiful rose has thorns, it is true that the new shopping center will pose certain problems that must be addressed. First, the opening of various shops in the shopping center will increase the competition and lead to bankruptcy of neighborhood shops. A second problem involves the risk that the transportation in and out of the shopping center will cause more traffic jams and bring residents more difficulties to find a parking lot in neighborhood car parks. While these problems do not necessarily mean that to build a shopping center is a bad idea, they are, nevertheless, concerns that planners must be aware of.

To sum up, having taken all of the above disadvantages into consideration, planners will find solutions of those problems in near future.  My intuition is that building a new shopping center makes good sense and should be the correct choice.

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-3-5 0:30:14编辑过]

whitesand

谢谢指导, 易错的地方我都highlight存下来乐

末段,

In sum, residents can benefit greatly from the new shopping centre built in our neighborhood. While in some cases it might create problems, the new shopping center still holds more promise for improving our lives.