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Some people take the childhood years, the time from birth to twelve years of age, as the most important years of a person. As far as I am concerned, I agree to the statement firmly. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

First, in the aspect of live, people begin to have（用词不当，develop/build） their own philosophy(value) during this phase. As is known to all, a good philosophy is very, very important in a person’s life. Seldom has a man who did not (时态？)have a good philosophy been successful at last. Al/so the philosophy that formed during your early years generally influences your whole life. Take our great leader Zhou Enlai as an example, he decided to read books for our nations stronger （？？？）when he was ten years old, and this made him a successful person later.

Moreover, good studying habits are usually formed in our childhood years. Generally speaking, if you want to become a good student as you grow up, you usually need to form good habits and attitudes of studying when you are still children. It is almost impossible that a good university student did （时态？）not like studying before. For me, I was one of teacher’s good students when I was very young, and I keep the good studying habits for years until now I am a master（？？？）.

In addition, the friends you made when you were young are true friends. Young children are simplicity（？？？）, and they make friends in order to make friends. So these friends are the most precious properties of your life.（一会儿是第二人称，一会儿又是第三人称，不好。）

（In conclusion,）I agree with the above statement because I believe that what happened during your childhood years will influence your while lives, so they are the most important years of you.

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本篇文章总体还可以，但语言有较多问题。