羞愧啊！羞愧。 作文15分，请帮帮俺！

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考完以后，比较满意的是自己的作文，谁知道得了个15分。实在难以启耻。羞愧啊！羞愧！下面是我平时练习的一篇比较适中水平的作文。其他作文的句子结构大体和此文都差不多。自己感觉还比较满意，不知道哪里出了问题。是例子不够恰当？ 语法？ 我真有点糊涂了。敬请指教。不甚感激！

Just imagine , if the number of automobile constanly increase . what will happen? Some people think that  we will enjoy more conveniences , while ,others may believe that we will waste more time on the road and live in a hell . I deem that when people can realize the disadvantages bought by motorcar . they will completely agree with my opinion that the number of automobile will decrease in future .

 

First of all , no one will deny that the number of people who seek other vehicle to replace the car is growing . since the traffic congestion have brought tremendous harm to our lives . especiall in large cities . take my hometown for example . nowadays . residents have to invest all their time and energy in a never-ending struggle for moving forwad on the road . owing to the traffic jam . they have no choice ,but to waste long hours with pains and boredom . but once upon a time . it was a totally different story, along with less mobile. people hardly confront the  traffic congestion on the street . So they had more time to go shoping , enjoy driving , and enjoy the scenery . Fortunately  . increasing  number of people pay their attentions  to those problems. and then think over if they need buy a new car , or even cast  them away. because they can't save any time from driving now . numerous other example may be easily given.

 

Furthermore, another important factor can't be ignored is that less motorcar will be permitted to manufacture in future. for the reason that the car and truck exhausts pollute the air all around the world .and then cause serious healthy problems . Often , people who live in a polluted surroundings will get together with severity   illness , such as asthma and cough. Moreover , more waste gas are discharged in the air means less pants and animal will surrive on earth .  If you can't breathe , how you can drive accross the city? Therefore , when all  governments recongize the serious consequences , they will limit the production of automobile to prevent  the situation from worsning .

 

Admittedly , infrequently , people who drive to the company may make minute conveniece  . Actually ,these are rare case now, and therefore can't suppot the view that the number of mobile will increase in future . when those people keep a firm hand on those tiny advantages. isn't necessary that they take more consideration to those people who are bored to death with everday traffic jam on the road.

 

In conclusion, considerable though the benefits that driving car enjoys are , they can't compete with the merits  that living a clear environment brings about , when pollution and traffic jam are taken into cosideration . therefore, the number of automobile will decrease .