橙子酱的作文贴：每天都要写写写

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小蘑菇开始打怪 发表于 2014-9-2 17:07
revised by mushroom

0901 独立

谢谢蘑菇~
PS：with this as a turning point  以此作为契机 呃 固定搭配

PPS：卧槽！你是怎么做到写600多个字的 我赶脚我完全写不完阿

橙圆

0902 独立

Being creative, rather than carefully planning, is more often results in better solution.

What characterizes modern society most is its open thinking. People’s minds are not confined to what they have already known but broadened by Internet and other technologies. As for me, these creative minds provide us better ways to solve problems than do carefully plans.

To some extent, carefully planning gives us a possible solution rather than a feasible one. No matter how carefully it is, it is unlikely to deal with all sudden changes. Take my own experience as an example. In my senior year, I went to the Europe for tourism. Before departing from my country, I almost did all plans as carefully as possible, even thinking about what if I got a terrible disease during the trip. However, all my previous efforts wasted. My luggage was lost at the airport in my country because of airport staff’s fault. Under this circumstance, the only thing I could do is to forget all my plans and try to find a creative solution to solve this problem. Therefore, thoughtfully planning not always results in better solution.

Additionally, creative minds allow us to think things in a smarter way. Let us assume a situation that a man has to attend a meeting on a couple of days. However, the weather forecast says that there is probably raining outside during these days. What this man should do? Should he plan the time he go out precisely? I think the answer might be “no”. Today we all know that he should take an umbrella or use other tools, but in ancient china most people’s life depend on prediction about weather greatly. Hence, the creative minds enable people to abandon their awkward planning.

Another important advantage of creativity is that it concerns more about people’s emotion and thus makes people feel better about a certain solution because of the power of surprise. For example, when people try to chase a girl, it is the boy who has bad taste will do the things like carefully planning. In the most cases, only unpredictable things could touch the heartstrings of the girl. In contrast, the reason why many boys failed to win their girls is that they treat people as machines, which are in the need of accurately planning. Thus when it comes to human, I prefer a creative solution.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, better solutions often result from creative minds rather than carefully planning.

GJason

模版痕迹很淡，说明功力已经过了初级阶段；其他细节见文内

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GJason 发表于 2014-9-3 20:38
模版痕迹很淡，说明功力已经过了初级阶段；其他细节见文内

谢谢啦 有一个点~ than do careful plans 是因为标准写法 do 需要倒装哒~

橙圆

0903 独立
Do you agree or disagree? The best way for a teacher to let students become interested in a subject is to help them know how to use it in lives outside schools.

What characterizes the best part of subjects in school most is their profound knowledge, which preventing students from being interested in them. However, by telling the application of those subjects to students, teachers could attract their students to show more interest in studying those sciences.

As for most people, life draws them more than an abstract knowledge does because life experience provides people a directly way to understand a subject. Take my own experience as an example. Physics was my setback for a long period. One of my most important problems is that I cannot relate what I learn in class to the phenomenon in real life. For instance, a theory says that light could reflect towards different directions, but light is invisible and intangible. I did not fully acquire this knowledge until my teacher told me that the street lamp in the evening could describe this phenomenon precisely. In this way, how light reflects vividly appeared on my mind, and I found that physics is really interesting. Therefore, the application of a subject interests us in the subject itself.

People tend to have interest in what is useful rather than what is only important in exams. Once they realize that they are in desperate need of a subject, nothing could pour cold water on their enthusiasm. Another example from my own experience is how I feel interest in English. Like almost all students, I was afraid of learning a totally different language. However, a tour to Europe completely changed my mind. The English I learned in class plays a vital role in my whole trip, even when I ask the place of the toilet. Since then, I have devoted myself to English study and gradually fell in love with it. Hence, real interest sometimes comes from an urgent need.

The unknown things outside the school stimulate people to study a certain subject with a surprising passion. As is so often pointed out, curiosity is the nature of human beings. People incline to try every means to finger out anything unknown to them. For example, when my ten years old sister sees something strange to her, the first thing she do is to try to explain it with the knowledge she learned in class. If she feels that she could not solve this puzzle, the next thing for her is to search the reference or consult with her teachers. This puzzle-solving process helps a lot to keep her interest in her study. In contrast, if she were confined to the academic books, this enthusiasm would easily fade away. Thus the outside world could arouse students’ interest in subjects.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I would arrive at the conclusion that learning how to use a subject in real world weighs in favor of the process that students become interest in this subject.


0903 综合

The reading passage puts up some negative effects of commercial fossil trade. However, in the listening, the professor thinks that even though these negative effects exist, they have been greatly exaggerated. In fact, the benefits of this trade outweigh its disadvantages.

First, the professor refute the point in reading passage that commercial fossil trade decrease the exposure to the public. As a matter of fact, the public tends to have a greater exposure to fossils. The fossil hunting makes more fossils available for purchase, so even low level of institution, such as public school and libraries could buy the fossils.

Second, contrary to what is mentioned in reading passage, the point made by professor shows that scientists are unlikely to lose access to some of important fossils. In contrast, any fossils, before entering the market, have to be identified by scientists. The Scientists are the only people who could put the value on fossils. Therefore, the important information will not be missed.

Third, another important reason stated in reading passage is that commercial fossil collectors will destroy valuable scientific evidence, however, the professor in the listening believes that those collectors help to discover many fossils. In reality, universities or scientific institutions discover not that much fossils. If there were not those collectors, we might even not know the locations and surroundings of fossils.


快考试了压力大 改作文的见谅见谅  可能错误会比较多一点

GJason

橙圆 发表于 2014-9-3 22:34
谢谢啦 有一个点~ than do careful plans 是因为标准写法 do 需要倒装哒~

倒装是可以的，没问题。正装也行吧

GJason

9.3综合修改
橙子的综合写作非常可以了，good。出了两个主谓一致的错误，其他都OK

橙圆

GJason 发表于 2014-9-4 12:38
9.3综合修改
橙子的综合写作非常可以了，good。出了两个主谓一致的错误，其他都OK ...

谢谢G童鞋！主谓一致居然还表扬我 满地打滚

GJason

橙圆 发表于 2014-9-4 14:10
谢谢G童鞋！主谓一致居然还表扬我 满地打滚

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0904 独立


Should all teachers be required to take courses every five years to update their knowledge?

What characterizes modern society is its rapidly changes. It is not totally exaggerated that the knowledge advanced yesterday might fall behind times tomorrow. As a result of the significance of teachers, I stand for the point that they should attend courses after a certain period, such as five years, to refresh their knowledge.

To judge a course, one of the most important criteria is practicality. Teachers should teach a course that could apply to real life rather than a backward one. Take smart phone as an example. Five years ago, it is impossible to make more than the wildest guess at how clear and big the screen of mobile phone could be. In the classes, teachers was talking about superior capacities brought by Iphone 3GS. However, these capacities could not amaze people anymore. Teaching these knowledge in class bring nothing valuable to students. Therefore, teachers should focus on catching up with times.

Some people are wondering whether all teachers should take courses. I insist that this requirement is an absolute necessity, because world changes not in some certain perspectives but in every corner. People’s outlooks on the world, life, and values have totally changed, thus converting the things in the world to completely different features. For instance, people in my country now regard thin face as the symbol of beauty. Responding to market demands, scientists have developed countless technology to help people to change their face shape. The method they used even not appeared on the world in the past. Hence, new things has sprung up in large members, thus making it is necessary for all teachers to update their knowledge.

How often should teachers renew their knowledge? I think every five-year is appropriate. If they attend courses more often, these courses may distract them too much from their jobs, resulting in a decline in the time they spent on their student. But if the time is longer, their knowledge might too out-of-date to teach their students. For example, in my childhood, Pluto was one of plants surrounding the sun. But when I attended high school, scientists announced that it is not qualified for being a “plant” and actually Pluto is a dwarf start. Thus five year is suitable.

Owing to reasons I mentioned above, I would arrive at the conclusion that all teachers should be required to attend courses every five years to update their knowledge.

我不是故意把个作文写得这么非主流 我实在憋不粗理由！