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3.18 独立    For a business to be successful, more money must be put in advertising.

With society developing fast, a growing number of people began to pursuit the success in money. Those businessmen all resorted to an evident method--advertisement without hesitation in order to expand their shares in the market, giving rise to the expansion of advertisements in various mediums. Well, whether more money invested into advertising benefits any kinds of business aroused much public attention.

To some extent, the issue is reasonable, because a large quantity of advertisements can make people know about the products and then have the desire to purchase them. Take Ford as an example.The time when Ford rises is not so rich and people couldn’t afford a car. One day, a wise idea struck Ford’s mind: advertisements that intended to emphasize the car is affordable can release people’s worries and inspire them to buy his products. The result is that when this advertisement was broadcasted, Ford soon started a brand-new era. As we can see, in this case, advertisements played an important role in the promotion of cars. However, does every business can rely on advertisements to achieve success? The answer is definitely no. The success in Ford can only prove that their advertisements were used in a right way.

First of all, if the products are well-known to the public, business should not depend on advertisements to increase their profits. The concept is a little abstract, let me give you an example to illustrate it. Apple is a famous corporation and almost all people in the world not only are familiar with but also trust in its products. As a result, it is not so urgent as other companies to put more money in advertising. On the opposite, what matters the most is the product itself. Provided that a new product appeared to the public, some people must buy it out of curiosity and tell other people. If the product is good, there is no doubt that it must sell well. In that way, business ought to invest more money on creation than advertising.

At the same time, when target consumer are steady and limited to an certain area , it is also a waste of money to invest more on advertising. Let me raise an example to break down this statement. A medicine manufacturer has produced this kind of product for a long time. Doctors and patients in this area has been familiar with it. Providing that the medicine manufacturer tries to increase its shares in the market, it should put more emphasis on decreasing the cost and price of the product, not advertisements.

To conclude, in modern world, advertisements are effective in promoting one’s products in some ways, but of course not all business can benefit a lot from advertisements.

追梦CY

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sweetyecho

追梦CY 发表于 2014-3-18 21:24
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3.19 独立
Nowadays, a growing number of universities reduce the number of courses students should take in order to improve their learning efficiency. Only from the students’ feedback, the universities may conclude that it is a wise choice not only for the students themselves but also for the universities. However, as for me, the behavior is not so feasible, in other words, it has a negative influence on education. The reasons are as follows.

First of all, the results of the feedback survey can’t convince me, since the survey is only from one aspect--students and can only reflect students’ subjective attitudes. As we all know, almost all the people want to have more leisure time to relax, let alone youth. If the burden of curriculum now is much lighter than the curriculum in the past, students must be inclined to support the former one. What’s worse, the lighter curriculum may cause students to lead a lazy life: lack of courses, assignments and of course pressure, which is harmful to the students’ whole lives.

At the same time, modern society needs generalist, rather than specialist. Successful men can achieve their goals only if they have good command of knowledge in different areas. Let me give you an example to illuminate this concept. Steven Jobs, who is the most successful businessman, innovator in the world, viewed his products from various aspects, such as: architecture, industry, and religion. The all kinds of knowledge broadened his horizon and perfected his design aesthetic, which was the key factor for the success of Apple. Provided that he had had only one certain kind of knowledge, have the final terrific results been possible? Obviously, no! As a consequence, universities ought to provide their students with channels to get in touch with different knowledge.

Last but not least, some students may argue that they need opportunities to associate the knowledge from the book with the practices, and the time that were allocated to class in the past can just be used to improve the employable skills. But, from my point of view, universities are just the place to get knowledge and students should try their best to get knowledge as much as possible. The time is too precious to be wasted. As for employable skills, they have decades of years left to learn and improve.

In conclusion, universities are supposed to assist students to touch knowledge in different areas and form a good learning habit, rather than let them relax and feel comfortable.

sweetyecho

3.19 综合
The reading passage and the listening lecture present two different views. In the lecture, the speaker states that there are many ways to stop the invasion of zebra mussel and it will not pose any threats to freshwater fish populations at all, casting doubt on the main idea of the reading passage.

To begin with, the speaker makes the point that the affluent knowledge nowadays are enough to solve the problem, which refutes the viewpoint showed in the article that the in the history, the invasion might be unstoppable. According to the speaker, when the ships travel from Eastern Europe, using the modern technology, people can empty out all the water in the ships and refresh with the salt water, which can kill the zebra mussel. In that way, the invasion will be stoppable certainly.

Moreover, the author claims that this hardy species can dominate a new habit quickly. However, the speaker views this issue in a different angle. In accordance with the speaker, in the beginning it may dominate the new habitat for a while, but it will decrease after all, because the animals in the new habitat may adjust it and eat it, which will lead to a balance.

Last but not least, the speaker challenges the writer's expectation again by saying that zebra mussels may have a positive influence to the overall fish population.

sweetyecho

感觉3.19的两篇都写得好烂。独立的第一段感觉逻辑有问题，但又不知道怎么修改。综合的第三点完全没有听到。 P.S.：我的18号的修改者捏？你在哪里？？？

JanetYellen

sorry, 改好忘上传了。。。

JanetYellen

sweetyecho 发表于 2014-3-20 16:31
3.19 综合
The reading passage and the listening lecture present two different views. In the lecture, ...

3.19综合修改完毕~
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JanetYellen

sweetyecho 发表于 2014-3-20 16:30
3.19 独立
Nowadays, a growing number of universities reduce the number of courses students should ta ...

独立批改完毕~

sweetyecho

JanetYellen 发表于 2014-3-20 19:21
独立批改完毕~

收到了！好感谢~明天我要认真研究一下，多谢了~