“我把托福踩脚下的作文贴10.30开始

我把托福踩脚下

先写点感受：
拜读了依晨的写作贴，她对写作认真的态度给我留下了深刻印象。
希望我自己也能认真踏实的完成每一篇作文贴，在写作上取得进步。
2012年10月30日开贴
不积跬步，无以至千里；不积小流，无以成江海  从每一天的坚持开始。

我把托福踩脚下

10.30 Contributes on an enjoyable vacation, please select one of three selection. Good food, Good location and with good friends to travel.

A well planned vacation should make you feel refreshed and inspire a positive outlook, and this is tremendously beneficial to your health. From my experience, I prefer to find a good place to stay because I believe that good location can contribute much to my agreeable vacation.

To begin with, most people tend to skimpy on their vacation accommodations for they consider that they will spend most of their time elsewhere. If you take a chance and end up someplace that's not clean, it can certainly distract from the enjoyment of your trip no matter how little time you spend there. Moreover, if you don't feel comfortable, your would have a trouble night sleeping. The most important point is that you may be tired and cannot enjoy your vacation any more. A good place to stay is clean and comfortable. It is unlikely to disturb you, at least not as a result of your boots stick with dog shit or a snake slides into your room.

Furthermore, a good resort would be a good chance to have a moment alone that is what I really need. I am facing dozens of people every day during my work so I require a spot to stay only with my own during my vacation. If I am travelling with a friend, on the contrary, garrulous partner would disturb me a lot even though I can save travelling cost by sharing the same hotel room and car. These benefits to me don’t far surpass to my freedom.

Additionally, I prefer to regard some significant landscape as my resort vacation. Beautiful and colorful scenery usually attracts me into natural masterpiece which covers with peace, pretty and tolerance that makes me forget temporarily stressful activities.

In summary, a good place as the most important factor contributes to my wonderful travelling A clean and comfortable accommodation provide me a good sleeping without distracting from my enjoyment; when I am staying at a good scenery is helpful to forget my working stress, as well as take a chance to have myself alone. Absolutely, the good location usually also provide flavorful food.

我把托福踩脚下

俺第一篇综合，看起来有点弱啊
The reading passage claim that this field of archaeology suffered a serious trouble in Britain in 20th Century, but the lecture refutes the main point by stating that a new guidance which issued in 1990s has changed this awful situation from three aspects and was really helpful to this field’s development.

First, the professor doubts the point in the passage that most of valuable artifacts destroyed due to construction projects. He argues that construction site in new rules has to be examined by archaeologists to assure out of any value or interest. Even if it is versified valuable, further preserve plan will run by local government, builders and archaeologist working together. Additionally, excavation and documents will start before construction.

Second, while the passage mentions that a lot of archaeologists faced a gradual decreased government funding, the professor raises a contradictory idea that the guidance ruled construction companies pay archaeologist all costs including planning cost, as well as initial examination. He also argues that archaeologist's could do wider research than before with companies sponsor.

Third, the passage supports that the career plight a lot of archaeologist was facing , but the lecture rebates the idea and says that new rule provided a lot of paid work for archaeologists what didn't exist before. Those works included whole stages of process, from examining to making plan, from doing research, lab work to writing a report. What's more, ascending working opportunity contribute to the total number of archaeologist in the highest than before.

In sum, the lecture is contrary to the ideas in the reading from three aspects.

lmylacoste

·A well planned vacation should make you feel refreshed and inspire a positive outlook(是积极地观点吗？不是很明白诶，如果是想说心态，outlook好像不能够表达，求与楼主讨论！！), and this is tremendously beneficial to your health. From my experience, I prefer to find a good place to stay because I believe that good location（可以加a，或者s） can contribute much to my agreeable （令人愉快的，好词！）vacation.

To begin with, most people tend to skimpy（两点问题哦，1，skimpy不足的，吝啬的，是adj缺be动词；2，skimpy好像不太准确，难道你指的真的是钱？我不确定诶，用be indifference如何？楼主自个儿斟酌斟酌）on their vacation accommodations for（理解楼主的paraphrase，外国人好像喜欢because，在这点上，本人也被别人指出过） they consider that they will spend most of their time elsewhere（elsewhere是指在别处，但是这里应该说是不确定，或者是在外面，用outside或者between destinations/on the way 在路上）. If you take a chance（冒险，好词！） and end up（结束，死亡，好像过了点，用lodge如何，临时寄宿哦）someplace that's not clean, it can certainly distract(注意是vt哦，加宾语) from the enjoyment of your trip no matter how little time you spend there. Moreover, if you don't feel comfortable, youràyou would have a trouble night sleeping. The most important point is that you may be tired and cannot enjoy your vacation any more. A good place to stay is clean and comfortable. It is unlikely to disturb you, at least not as a result of（表原因，而这里是表结果吧，因果关系反了）your boots stick with dog shit or a snake slides into your room.

Furthermore, a good resort（paraphrase好） would be a good chance to have a moment alone that is what I really need. I am facing dozens of people every day during my work so I require a spot（paraphrase好）to stay only with my own during my vacation. If I am travelling with a friend, on the contrary, garrulous partner would disturb me a lot even though I can save travelling cost by sharing the same hotel room and car. These benefits to me don’t far surpass to（vt，不要加to的） my freedom.

Additionally, I prefer to regard some significant（下文讲的是自然美景，意义重大不合适哦，用magnificent比较好） landscape as my resort vacation. Beautiful and colorful scenery usually attracts me into natural masterpiece which covers with peace, pretty（作名词意为没人，用beauty比较好，因为prettiness是指可爱的） and tolerance that makes me forget temporarily stressful activities.

In summary, a good place as the most important factor contributes to my wonderful travelling A clean and comfortable accommodation provide（加s） me a good sleeping without distracting （也可以是being distracted）from my enjoyment; when （只有变成that这句话才可能通吧，求讨论！）I am staying at a good scenery is helpful to forget my working stress, as well as take（是和forget并列的吗？如果不是要注意相应的变化） a chance to have myself alone. Absolutely, the good location usually also provide flavorful food.（这句活略显突兀啊）

总结：
1.结构紧凑，paraphrase部分做的很好，但是个别词如disturb是不是多了一点。
2.极个别词表达不是非常准确，求讨论！
3.结尾总结的很好,但是最后一句略显突兀。

lmylacoste

The reading passage claim（又漏s了啊） that this（感觉the比较好，可讨论） field of archaeology suffered a serious trouble in Britain in 20th Century, but the lecture refutes the main point by stating that a new guidance which issued in 1990s has changed this awful situation from three aspects and was really helpful to this field’s development.

First, the professor doubts the point in the passage that most of valuable artifacts destroyed due to construction projects. He（没记错好像是个女的。。） argues that construction site in new rules has to be examined by archaeologists to assure（vt 加宾语）out of（好像是由于，和缺乏的意思，求讨论!） any value or interest. Even if(这个逻辑词好像不妥，if比较好) it is versified（versify是作诗的意思。。。verify）valuable, further preserve plan will run（被动） by local government, builders and archaeologist working together. Additionally, excavation and documents（document名词是没有录档的意思的哈，可用-ing） will start before construction.

Second, while the passage mentions that a lot of archaeologists faced a gradual decreased government funding, the professor raises a contradictory idea that the guidance ruled（虚拟语气，好！） construction companies pay archaeologist all costs including planning cost, as well as initial examination. He also argues that archaeologist's could do wider research than before with companies sponsor（指赞助人，sponsorship）.

Third, the passage supports that the career plight（好词！） a lot of archaeologist was facing （为什么要宾语前置呢？）, but the lecture rebates（减少，有反驳或削弱的意思吗？求讨论！） the idea and says that new rule provided a lot of paid work for archaeologists what didn't exist before. Those works included whole stages of process, from examining to making plan, from doing research, lab work to writing a report（怎么会有两个from，平行会更好，也可在第二个from前加；）. What's more, ascending working opportunity contribute（加s） to the total number of archaeologist in（感觉to更好，求讨论！） the highest than before.

In sum, the lecture is contrary to the ideas in the reading from three aspects.



总结

内容完整，用了许多不常见的词

个别词可讨论，本人也拿捏不准

可适当增加字数

我把托福踩脚下

自己小结一下：A well planned vacation should make you feel refreshed and inspire a positive outlook and this is tremendously beneficial to your health. From my experience, I prefer to find a good place to stay because I believe that a good location can contribute much to my agreeable vacation.
To begin with, most people tend to skimpy on their vacation accommodations for they consider that they will spend most of their time elsewhere. If you take a chance and end up someplace that's not clean, it can certainly distract you from the enjoyment of your trip no matter how little time you spend there. Moreover, if you don't feel comfortable, youràyou would have a trouble night sleeping. The most important point is that you may be tired and cannot enjoy your vacation any more. A good place to stay is clean and comfortable. It is unlikely to disturb you, at least not as a result of lodging, your boots stick with dog shit or a snake slides into your room.
Furthermore, a good resort would be a good chance to have a moment alone that is what I really need. I am facing dozens of people every day during my work so I require a spot to stay only with my own during my vacation. If I am travelling with a friend, on the contrary, garrulous partner would disturb me a lot even though I can save travelling cost by sharing the same hotel room and car. These benefits to me don’t far surpass my freedom.
Additionally, I prefer to regard some magnificent landscape as my resort vacation. Beautiful and colorful scenery usually attracts me into natural masterpiece which covers with peace, beacuty and tolerance that makes me forget temporarily stressful activities.
In summary, a good place as the most important factor contributes to my wonderful travelling. A clean and comfortable accommodation provides me a good sleeping without being distracted from my enjoyment; I am staying at a good scenery that  is helpful to forget my working stress, as well as taking a chance to have myself alone.最后一句的确突兀删掉

谢谢lmylacoste帮我指出问题 求讨论：
a positive outlook  ： 积极乐观的态度或者人生观
skimpy on：吝啬于，不愿意花钱在
end up:不表示死亡， finally be or do something;

The reading passage claimsthat the (用the 因为指代的是大家都知道的)field of archaeology suffered a serious trouble in Britain in 20th Century, but the lecture refutes the main point by stating that a new guidance which issued in 1990s has changed this awful situation from three aspects and was really helpful to this field’s development.

First, the professor doubts the point in the passage that most of valuable artifacts destroyed due to construction projects. She argues that construction site in new rules has to be examined by archaeologists to  ensure the sites against any ignoring .If it is (versify是作诗的意思)verifyvaluable, further preserve plan will run by local government, builders and archaeologist working together. Additionally, excavation and documenting will start before construction.

Second, while the passage mentions that a lot of archaeologists faced a gradual decreased government funding, the professor raises a contradictory idea that the guidanceruled construction companies pay archaeologist all costs including planning cost, as well as initial examination. He also argues that archaeologist's could do wider research than before with companies sponsor（指赞助人，sponsorship）.

Third, the passage supports that the a lot of archaeologist was facing career plight , but the lecture（ rebates 减少）rebuts  the idea and says that new rule provided a lot of paid work for archaeologists what didn't exist before. Those works included whole stages of process, from examining to making plan, from doing research, lab work to writing a report（怎么会有两个from，平行会更好，也可在第二个from前加；）. What's more, ascending working opportunity contributes to the total number of archaeologist in（感觉to更好，求讨论！） the highest than before.
In sum, the lecture is contrary to the ideas in the reading from three aspects.
小结
第三人称单数谓语动词。
最后用 in 还是to ，我也不确定
sponsor 也有动词赞助的意思， 这里你指出的sponsorship更适用

lmylacoste

谢谢lmylacoste帮我指出问题 求讨论：
a positive outlook  ： 积极乐观的态度或者人生观
skimpy on：吝啬于，不愿意花钱在
end up:不表示死亡， finally be or do something;

1a: a place offering a view
b: a view from a particular place


b: a view from a particular place
2:point of view<a positive outlook on life>

3: the act of looking out

4: the prospect for the future <the outlook for steel demand in the United States — Wall Street Journal>


1.我不知道outlook有心态的意思，可以给一下出处吗，如果有，就是好词了
2.skimpy on是花钱的意思，我明白了，我以为是不关心呢
3.end up 有这层意思，好词！

附，我也有点问题，一起讨论下哈

我把托福踩脚下

10.31 Young people nowadays have no influence on decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole
Modern society focuses on youth education, growth and mental health because the public has belief on that the destiny of society will be determined more by the youth of today. The ideas and behaviors based on young generation obviously affect present society a lot regardless of on decision or making regulations that has longer and more permanent impact to future.


To start with, It is a notable phenomenon that the impact of young to society has an upward rapidly tendency today. As a result of effect, many social critical events have shifted concerning about young's overwhelming opinions. For instance, considerable new ideas and opinions that young often discuss on the platform of Internet communication become the predominant power and streamline ideas. As we know, the president of USA, Obama was not content to stay out of young electors, instead of; he did some pop rally to win supporting from young voters.


Furthermore, considering the strong power of youngsters’ ideas, prudent decision-makers usually tend to listen from youngsters and pay their more attention to younger before important decisions they generate. They who have played important roles in building future society but are the offspring in families. Decision-makers are the responsibilities and stress to consider how advantage will bring to their next generation. For example, Chinese government updated their enrolling system of universities for considering about many youngsters were out of registration list. Universities in China has extended their enroll figure from 1.8 million people in 2000 to 6.5million people today. Thus, youngster ideas have well contributed to wise decision made by government.


Besides, it is certified by a lot of evidence that young generation are competent to impact and change society because they hold creative ideas, open minds and energy bodies which of those are helpful to their success. One example is that Mark Zuckerburg as the chairman and chief executive of Facebook company was nominated number one on 2010 list of top 100 most influential people of the information Age on Vanity Fair magazine. What you can image that the Facebook as one new popular communication platform has roughly 800 million active users in worldwide. When decision-makers enjoy their chatting on Facebook, isn’t it necessary that they give more consideration to young impact to society.


In sum, modern youth has significant influential to modern society, also the impact will continue in the future. Decision-makers absolutely make their wise decisions by around youth group beacuse they realize that youth as a newborn strong power enable to dominant social development.

我把托福踩脚下

http://ezinearticles.com/?What-It-Means-To-Have-A-Positive-Outlook-On-Life&id=744338 有一篇关于positive outlook的文章。

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10.31写得有点匆忙，第2点的理由我听得不是很清楚

The reading passage claims that the total of birds will certainly decrease in the furture in America due to human population, agriculture extending and pesticide use, but the lecture believes that lecture is unconventional ideas by stating that the whole number of birds will not change a lot.

First, the professor doubts the point in the passage that birds' habitats would be limited in smaller and smaller size as a result of swell of human population.She argues that even though some type of birds were limited but other kinds of bird will adapt to living with human. For instance, more and more pegon will on the streets. Thus, the birds wil not decreased in total quantities. The points is contrary to reading materials.

Second, while the passage mentions that expanded agriculture will result in destruction of birds, the professor raises a contradictory idea that future agriculture will not need to hurt or destroy wild area because the fact is less and less land are being used agriculture every year in USA. He also argues that in the future, new crops for foods can support human demanding, it is not nessary to use more land. So, the opinion the professor contradicts the idea in reading

Third, the passage says that chemical pesticides is an important reason to contribute to birds' decline, but the lecture rebuts the idea from two aspects. First of all, traditional pesticide will be replaced and new pesticide will provide less toxicity. What's more, crops can be designed to resist-pest. Therefore, chemical insectcide will not hurt birds at all in future. The lecture is oppsite of the idea in the reading.