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81#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-11-4 09:37:05 | 只看该作者

11.4 综合 TPO 20

The lecturer holds a different opinion against what the reading passage has. She says that fire is a key part of the balance of ecological system, therefore "let it burn" policy is basically a good one that brings creative changes after the fire.

First, the reading passage concerns the huge fire in Yellowstone causes a huge damage on trees and vegetation. Nevertheless, the lecturer debates that the fire makes it more possible for diverse vegetation growth. For instance, there are more space for smaller trees to grow.
Second, as the reading passage mentioned, animals are suffered from the fire that large amount of animals are not able to escape, either can they recover because of the damaged habitat. However, the lecturer dabates that the similar situation happens here. Not only does animals recover their population, but also increase the amount. She says the new habitat in the park are suitable for small animals like rabits and hares so that large animals have more abundant food resource and therefore gain the population.
Last, the reading passage points that the fire hamper the local economy by eliminating the tourist attraction. Nevertheless, the lecture disagrees that the situation is not happened.  The huge fire is only one-year thing that several factors contribute to such huge fire. Those factors like dry climate and heavy wind are not likely to gather every year. Albeit the huge fire happened before, the tourists would not give up going to Yellowstone park, let alone the economic loss.
82#
发表于 2012-11-4 12:31:30 | 只看该作者
11.3改
A real buzzer goes against the opinions held by the reading passage that he thinks buzz is not anything the reading says.
First, the reading passage indicates that buzzers are paid to tell the lie about the products. However, the lecturer says that buzzers are only hired if they use one certain product and do really think it is worth recommendation. This is exactly the reason why the lecturer is hired as a buzzer.
Second, the reading passage suggests that people are less critical to the words from the buzzers. The lecturer opposes that the statement is definitely not true. People
are
tend to ask a lot of questions and gather information such as price and services about the product. Once the buzzer cannot answer those questions, the consumers are not going to buy.
Third, the reading passage mentions that the existence of buzzers dampers the trust between people,
which is a totally stupid idea in the lecturer's eyes.

He objects the opinion by saying that if the buzzers are(were这个是不是应该用虚拟?) not trusted by anyone, no company would hire a buzzer. In addition, the effect of the trust issue should go adverse, for buzzers do tell the truth. Once the consumers enjoyed the fancy benefits, they are more open to people.(时态不对,have enjoyedwill?

83#
发表于 2012-11-5 09:43:18 | 只看该作者
11.4
The lecturer holds a different opinion against what the reading passage has. She says that fire is a key part of the balance of ecological system, therefore "let it burn" policy is basically a good one that brings creative changes after the fire.

First, the reading passage concerns the huge fire in Yellowstone causes a huge damage on trees and vegetation. Nevertheless, the lecturer debates that the fire makes it more possible for diverse vegetation growth. For instance, there are more space for smaller trees to grow.
(此处听力原文举了两个例子,我当时也没记全哈,但我觉着应该都写出来比较好
)
Second, as the reading passage mentioned, animals are suffered from the fire that(先行词是animal?感觉这个地方用定从不太合适) large amount of animals are not able to escape, eitherneither can they recover because of the damaged habitat. However, the lecturer debates that the similar situation happens here. Not only does animals recover their population, but also increase the amountani increase the amount?. She says the new habitat in the park is suitable for small animals like rabbits and hares so that large animals have more abundant food resources
and therefore gain the population.
Last, the reading passage points that the fire hamper
s the local economy by eliminating the tourist attraction. Nevertheless, the lecture disagrees that the situation is not happened.(亲,这个是不是双重否定变肯定了?直接是你同意上面的situation了?) The huge fire is only one-year thing that several factors contribute to such huge fire. Those factors like dry climate and heavy wind are not likely to gather every year. Albeit the huge fire happened before, the tourists would not give up going to Yellowstone park, let alone the economic loss.



好佩服楼主的句式词法变化呀,我就写不出来,5555,还是注意一下细节吧,例如动词与发起者之间的搭配;而且第一个听里段的听力点不全,再听一下吧
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84#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-11-5 11:36:18 | 只看该作者

11.5 综合 TPO 21

The lecturer and the reading passage hold opposite opinions on genetically modified trees. The reading passages suggest that genetic modification brings a lot of benefits, while the lecturer says it brings a problems and costs more.

First, the reading passage indicates that genetically modified trees are more hardier than natural trees. However, the lecturer goes against the viewpoint by pointing out that natural trees would survive a few under the severe conditions like bad climate or insect infection. But the genetically modified trees are not going to survive under the undesigned challenge because they are so uniformed.
Second, the reading passage suggests that genetically modified trees make more profits than natural trees for their rapid growth cycle and high productivity. Nevertheless, the lecturer opposes that because of the uniform in gene, once genetically modified trees got infected, farmers suffer a huge loss. Besides, growing genetically modified trees tends to cost more. According to the law, every time farmers grow the genetically modified trees, they have to pay for the patent company.
Third, the reading passage considers that growing genetically modified trees can protect wild trees. Nonetheless, the lecturer diffuses that genetically modified trees brings anything but benefits to wild trees. She points out that genetically modified trees tend to out compete the wild trees and demand for more resource like soil, sunlight and water, pushing the endangered trees on the edge of extinction.
85#
发表于 2012-11-6 21:50:58 | 只看该作者
The lecturer and the reading passage hold opposite opinions on genetically modified trees. The reading passages suggests that genetic modification brings a lot of benefits, while the lecturer says it brings a problems and costs more.

First, the reading passage indicates that genetically modified trees are more hardier than natural trees. However, the lecturer goes against the viewpoint by pointing out that natural trees would(can) survive a few under the severe conditions like bad climate or insect infection. But the genetically modified trees are not going to survive under the undesigned challenge because they are so uniformed.
Second, the reading passage suggests that genetically modified trees make more profits than natural trees for their rapid growth cycle and high productivity. Nevertheless, the lecturer opposes that because of the uniform in gene, once genetically modified trees gotget建议嘿) infected, farmers suffer(will suffer) a huge loss. Besides, growing genetically modified trees tends to cost more. According to the law, every time farmers grow the genetically modified trees, they have to pay for the patent company.
Third, the reading passage considers that growing genetically modified trees can protect wild trees. Nevertheless, the lecturer difuses that genetically modified trees brings anything(nothing吧?) but benefits to wild trees. She points out that genetically modified trees tend to out compete with the wild trees and demand for more resource like soil, sunlight and water, pushing the endangered trees on the edge of extinction.



还是要注意细节啦!!单三啦,时态啦,这样会更perfect!@@
86#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-11-7 01:11:47 | 只看该作者
回复一下小滋滋: nonetheless=nevertheless. 是一个挺好的转折词哦。nonetheless 报错 英[n?nð?'les] 美['n?nð?'l?s]

  • adv. 尽管如此,但是
  • conj. 尽管如此,但是
87#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-11-8 03:16:36 | 只看该作者

11.6 综合 TPO 22

The lecturer and the reading passage hold opposite opinion toward whether or not the ethanol fuel is the good replacement for gasoline. The lecturer illustrate the benefit of ethanol fuel in three aspects.

First, the reading mentions that burning ethanol will create carbon dioxide, accelerating the global warming. However, the lecturer diffuses the point by saying that using ethanol will not add to global warming, because the process of producing ethanol, growing the plants, can absorb carbon dioxide. In return, carbon dioxide will be decreased if people use ethanol as the replacement of gasoline.
Second, the reading passage points that the amount of food for farm animals will be sacrificed to the large production of ethanol, while the lecturer opposes the point as nonsense. He says that ethanol is produced largely by the part of the plant named cell walls, which is inedible for farm animals. Given to this reason, the amount of food for farm animals will not diminished.
Third, the reading passage indicates that the price of ethanol is too high so that unable to compete with gasoline. Nevertheless, the lecturer rejects that although it is true the tax policy brings advantages to ethanol use, this protection action would not always be needed because with the large production of ethanol, the marginal cost will go down. Related research indicates if the production of ethanol goes up to 4 times as what it is now, the price will plummet fourty percent off.
88#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-11-9 09:15:45 | 只看该作者

11.6 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The way of a person’s dress is an indication of his or her personality or character?
Street snap is not the exclusive right for celebrities anymore that anyone who dresses in specific ways can catch the eyes of paparazzi. There is no doubt that everyone want to make a decent impression on others through first meeting, and the most direct and explicit impression lies in how we dress up ourselves. In my point of view, the way we dress up is an indication of our personalities.
From the very beginning, the way of a person’s dress reflects basic information about that person. Almost every industry has its own dressing code that engineers are in blue jacket suits, nurse are in nurse’s uniform and business people in business professions. With these different kinds of dressing style, we can distinguish people in various types. The usage of costume here is not only for good-looking, but building up confidential and credibility.
Far beyond telling what kind of job does the person do, the way the person dress also indicates several aspects of personalities. The dominant color of the clothes helps us judge whether the person is enthusiasm or not. Besides, the match of clothes is the best way to understand the taste of the person. The fashion shows expand idea that using cloth to illustrate one’s ideas to art even life to the utmost.
In addition, other information is also embedded in how we dress up. Clothing is, rather the reflections of personal preferences, the social name tag for people. For instance, luxuriant cloth indicates someone is wealthy, girly dress on a man implies someone is guy, and even the changing frequency of cloth refers some is aristocrat. A heated TV show named Downton Abbey talks about a story happened in an aristocrat family in 1930s. Ladies and Sir are supposed to change their dress under different circumstances and even the dinner with family requires firmly and decent costume. Along with the manners and the way we talk, costume makes up the first impression about who we are.
In all, it is not enough to say the way of a person’s dress is an indication of personality, but beyond, more implicit information is provided in the way we dress.
89#
发表于 2012-11-9 21:04:52 | 只看该作者
TPO22修改

The lecturer and the reading passage hold opposite opinion(貌似opinions吧) toward whether or not the ethanol fuel is the good replacement for gasoline. The lecturer illustrate(小错误哦illustrates) the benefit of ethanol fuel in three aspects.

First, the reading mentions that burning ethanol will create carbon dioxide, accelerating the global warming. However, the lecturer diffuses the point by saying that using ethanol will not add to global warming, because the process of producing ethanol, growing the plants, can absorb carbon dioxide.(这句话不通,我知道你要说植物成长过程会吸收CO2,但你前面的the process of producing ethanol会吸收CO2? 属逻辑不当) In return, carbon dioxide will be decreased if people use ethanol as the replacement of gasoline.

Second, the reading passage points that the amount of food for farm animals will be sacrificed to the large production of ethanol, while the lecturer opposes the point as nonsense. He says that ethanol is produced largely by the part of the plant named cell walls, which is inedible for farm animals. Given to this reason, the amount of food for farm animals will not diminished.(此段写得很流畅,不错!)

Third, the reading passage indicates that the price of ethanol is too high so that(so that后面可以直接接残句? 后面应该为完整句子吧.建议加个主语在后面) unable to compete with gasoline. Nevertheless, the lecturer rejects that although it is true the tax policy brings advantages to ethanol use, this protection action would not always be needed because with the large production of ethanol, the marginal cost (呵呵,边际成本这次用的很好,不错~)will go down. Related research indicates(建议加that) if the production of ethanol goes up to 4 times as what it is now, the price will plummet forty percent off.(plummet off词组很不错)

换词恰当,除了小小粗心,整体不错,看得出基础扎实.继续加油~~~ 很棒唷!
90#
发表于 2012-11-10 21:26:35 | 只看该作者
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