CECE的作文贴

dreamcece

...........这个。我占座占的是23号的独立和综合，队长没有把我的综合安排进去，独立还没来得及写。但是还是谢谢你花时间修改我的综合，嗯。

dreamcece

The lecturer holds an different opinion against the reading material that she prefers the predation theory as the possible explanation for the declination of sea otters while the reading suggests pollution should take the responsibility.

First,  the reading passage mentions that chemical pollution along the sea indirectly cause the death of sea otters. However, the lecturer debates that no dead sea otters are found along the coast ever so that the pollution theory is not convincing. Eatting by their predators can perfectly explain why  no dead otters are washed to the beach.
Second, the reading passage asserts that the group delication of sea animals indicate the pollution or environment problem should be blame for the vanishing of sea otters. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes that the sea otters declines because of human hunters so that orca change their eating habit and hunt for sea lions and seals, which in return minimizing the general amount of sea animals.
Third, the reading passage believes the uneven pattern of otter decline is better explained by pollution hypothesis. But the lecturer objects that the pattern evidence can work better to support the predator hypothesis. The differential declination based on location is related to whether or not the habitat of sea otters are accessible for orcas. If it is in predator's hunting range, then  otters declines greatly. This also explains the stability of amount for the otters who live in shallow and rocky area which predators are hard to reach.

AnthonySummer

10.24
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The lecturer holds an[A1] different opinion against the reading material that she[A2] prefers the predation theory as the possible explanation for the declination of sea otters while the reading suggests pollution should take the responsibility.



First, the reading passage mentions that chemical pollution along the sea indirectly cause [A3]the death of sea otters. However, the lecturer debates that no dead sea otters are found along the coast ever so that the pollution theory is not convincing. Eatting[A4] by their predators can perfectly explain why no dead otters are washed to the beach.



Second, the reading passage asserts that the group delication[A5] of sea animals indicate the pollution or environment problem should be blame [A6]for the vanishing of sea otters. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes that the sea otters declines because of human hunters so that orca change their eating habit and hunt [A7]for sea lions and seals, which in return minimizing the general amount of sea animals.

Third, the reading passage believes the uneven pattern of otter decline is better explained by pollution hypothesis. But the lecturer objects that the pattern evidence can work better to support the predator hypothesis. The differential declination based on location is related to whether or not the habitat of sea otters are [A8]accessible for orcas. If it [A9]is in predator's hunting range, then otters declines greatly. This also explains the stability of （the）amount for the otters who live in shallow and rocky area which predators are hard to reach.



发现这次写作相比较前面三次是最好的。（好有缘啊，已经批改了那么久了~）听力的关键意思都把握住了，表达也没有歧义，结构也很好，继续保持吧！另外只有稍许错误。加油吧！

[A1]A



[A2]前文没出现人称，无指代对象



[A3]Causes



[A4]Eating



[A5]Declination



[A6]Blamed



[A7]人类用hunt吧！动物用prey，这是原文词汇



[A8]你指的是differential declination 用is



[A9]这里指代不清，因为前面出现太多名词了

chasedreamabc

你只是占了23号的独立呀，没写综合

dreamcece

我填的是独立综合占座, 你没安排我的综合，所以我在更新链接的时候就只留下了独立

dreamcece

the lecture hels an opposite opinion toward the influence of decreased reading on literatures against the one shown in the reading material. She, the lecturer, respectively turns down the subpoints in the reading passage and she says that the decreasing reading in literature is not mean really that troubling.

First, it is false to say that only the literature is intellectual stimulating. Though there is a declination in the reading of literature, other books such as science fiction, history and political books can stimulate imagination anyway.
Second, the diminishing on reading books does not mean a lower cultural level. Since the cultural variable change nowadays, people now can spend more time on music and movies, which are the types of arts better concerning the contemporary art than books or literature.
Third, it is not the audience to blame for the deduction of literature reading. The writers today are tend to be difficult to understand. Readers from earlier time would not read what the writers write today, either.

dreamcece

The lecturer and the reading material hold opposite opinion toward the credential of a portrait that whether or not the portrait is depicted for Jane Austen. The lecturer respectively refutes the points provided in the reading part and he believes that the portrait is belong to someone of Austen's relative.

First, the year, which Austen's family gave permission to use it as illustration of letters, is 17 years after Austen's death. Therefore the person who gave the permission had a great chance that he may had never seen Austen when she was young in person. It is uncertain even for them to confirm that the girl in portrait is Austen.
Second, the portrait could belong to one of Austen's relatives and which explains why the girl in the portrait resembles to the sketch of Cassandra. Many of Austen's female cousins and their daughters are young at that time, and it qualifies the year of the portrait being painted.  
Third, the portrait is only related to Ozias Humphrey because of his painting style. Another way to judge the year of the painting is based on the different characteristics of the canvass. Research shown that the canvass used for the portrait was sold when Austen was 27-years-old, which in return turned out that Austen could probably not being the girl of the portrait.

dreamcece

The lecturer partly agree with the point of the reading that selling fossils in commercial market does have some negative effects. However, she believes the advantages of selling fossils outweighs its disadvantages.

First, selling the fossils to commercial increase the exposures to public but not decrease the chance. The lecturer mentions that the opening for market give public museums and schools the opportunity to get the fossils, and then they display the fossils to the public.
Second, the lecturer claims that it is not realistic for scientists to lose access to the discoveries for the fossils. Even the fossil is destined to the commercial market, it is being researched and testified by scientists. All the fossils would pass through the hands of scientists, therefore it is unlikely that the scientists would miss anything about the fossils.
Third, it is true that destroys are being done during the commercialization of fossils, but it provide more opportunities to find more undiscovered fossils. Universities and scientific institutions are more available to get funds for new fossils, and which is more important than studying on the existed data about the  surroudings of the fossil.

dreamcece

10.27
Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.

The assertion, which indicates patience is not a good strategy because take action now is much more effective than do it later, is arised by some people, but others, myself included, are not agree. Although the world nowadays encourage no more than effectiveness, it does not mean that we can spare no time on the waiting, also known as showing some patience when it is in need, because patience can help us do the things right.
First and the most important, patience is a good attitude toward trivial tasks. It is true that if we take action immediately, we get more chance of saving time and finish the task eariler. However, this strategy does not always work when we face the trivial tasks. Patience, the good attitude which help us understand the real goal for the task, can facilitate us making a better plan for the process of work, which in return optimizes the effectiveness of work. Take my personal experience for example, I have 4 night exams in one week and I have to finish 2 online homeworks and the daily courses. Sounds impossible and I have to make some sacrifices, right? However, if I could take 10 minutes before I start my daily burdened review, I could have a more thorough understanding of where I am now in my review schedule and what should I do more to finish the task. I use the strategy every time when I face mutiple tasks and it never fails to work. Therefore, the patience of holding up for 10 minutes is more important than taking actions right away.
Second, patience is usually a good strategy especially when we are seeking for external help. As a Chinese old saying goes, “The one who has better patience, the more they can achieve.” It also works on the personal communication. A research shown on Times indicates that given the same conditions for job applicants, the ones who show better abilities in patience, the greater chances they are getting the job in communication- related industries. This is especially true that the one in service industry. For example, the cashier in a cafeteria needs to be patient to ask all the requirements the customer want for his order, otherwise the rush work like making orders right away could cause every one unhappy. The boss would be unsatisfied with the wrong order because the cook has making food based on wrong requests, wasting material and time in results. The customer would be unpleased for the extra waiting time to remake his order. Therefore, the patience is so much in need in such circumstances.
Third and not the least, patience is also a good virtue that displays who you are. When we discribe a person, “patience” is never the bad words for them. In addition, the certain degree of patience also indicates someone who has been well-educated. Waiting in the queue are the best way to display one’s patience and which also demonstrates whether or not he is a sophisticated social animal. The obeying behavior for society manners illustrates that he wants to get respect by showing his respect to other people. Therefore, the patience of showing mutual respect is always a good strategy if we want to survive in the society with dignity.
In all, patience is not go backwards, but to help us settle down the first step more firmly and in right direction, which in return help us make the things right.
35 Mins； 589 words.

小滋滋

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The lecturer partly agrees with the point of the reading that selling fossils in commercial market does have some negative effects. However, she believes thatthe advantages of selling fossils outweighs its disadvantages.

First, selling the fossils to commercial increasesthetheir exposures to public but not decrease the chance. The lecturer mentions that the opening for market gives public museums and schools the opportunity to get the fossils, and then they can(对将来的预测)display the fossils to the public.
Second, the lecturer claims that it is not realistic for scientists to lose access to the discoveries for the fossils. Even the fossil is destined to the commercial market, it is being researched and testified by scientists.(fossil需要经过scientist检验，才能到达市场，你这里的这个even 肯面的it is being能表达出来先后关系吗？？我有点没读懂) All the fossils would pass through the hands of scientists, therefore it is unlikely that the scientists would miss anything about the fossils.
Third, it is true that destroys are being done during the commercialization of fossils, but it(同一句话中的两个it指代了不同内容) provides more opportunities to find more undiscovered fossils. Universities and scientific institutions are more available(与get重复)likely to get funds for new fossils, and（and前后连接两个句子，或者两个从句，你这个哪个都不是呀 连词数+1=谓语动词数） which is more important than studying on the existed data about the  surroudings of the fossil.

总结：内容，句式变换都很好，但是语法错误有点多，注意单三，复杂句子的语法。