小丹尼作文练习贴，欢迎各位拍砖～～

DanielleZ

6.23 Happy Dragon Boat Festival
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are noweasier to become educated than in the past.

When it comes to the question whether education now becomes easier for people to access, people usually hold different opinions. With the society developing, the tuition of universities become more than that of severaldecades ago. So that, some people consider that it becomes harder for people to become educated because of the tuition increasing. However, from my standpoint,some other factors make education more accessible for many people, even the tuition becomes higher, such as websites and variety kinds of classes.

First and the foremost, governments in many cities have spare no effortto develop the condition of education. They have already granted a large amountof money to guarantee all children who are old enough to go to primary school;they build more schools, hire more teachers and publish more policies to makesure all children’s rights to get educated. In China, attending primary school is statutoryand free; it means that the people, who forbid children to achieve primaryeducation, will get punished by local government. And children do not need topay any tuition for primary school. Since this policy has been carried on in China
, manyyoung children have benefited from it. Thanks to the effort of the government,it becomes easier for young children to become educated, especially forchildren whose families are very poor.

Besides  the effort from governments, variety kinds of classes andlectures nowadays enable people to get educated about whatever they want mucheasier than before, such as Fresh, Wine tasting, Ballet, and the forth, whichare not available in the last two decades. Take wine tasting class as anexample, many people in Chinaare very interested in wine tasting, but due to lack of sufficient educationabout wine, most people could not enjoy the fantastic about tasting good winesin the past. However, the situation has changed significantly in the past fiveyears, many wine tasting classes become available to people, they offeredopportunities for people to get educated more conveniently than that in thepast.

Most importantly, the development of technology has great positive influenceon simplifying methods that people utilize to teach themselves. Millions ofresources on the internet have helped people to achieve self teaching materialsmuch easier than the past. For instance, by based on the internet, distanceeducation has been developed so rapidly. Students who can not afford to studyaboard are now able to attend classes in the other country by distanceeducation, thanks to the development of the online distance education, studentswho are eager to learn knowledge but can not afford go aboard can teachthemselves much easier than the past.

To sum up, educationbecomes easier for people to access, because of contributions from thegovernment’s effort, variety classes and the development of the technology.

DanielleZ

yeah~第三页了~嘿嘿~

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

It is universally acknowledged that upsetting or controversial problems can not be avoided in our life. When you need to discuss these problems with your friends,classmates, or colleagues, by which way do you prefer, e-mails and text message or the telephone or voice-messaging? Most people probably will choose telephones or voice-messaging, since people in the other side of telephone could understand what you (are) saying instantly, especially telephones could enable both of you exchange opinions more efficiently. However, from my standpoint, I do not consider telephone and voice-messaging can be better than e-mail and text messaging when discussing upsetting or controversial problems.

At the very beginning, one disadvantage of discussing through telephone or voice-messaging is that people sometimes can not understand each other very well through phones, thus discussion through the telephone or voice-messaging will leave much to be desired. For instance, if a Chinese, whose English is very poor, discusses with an American through telephone, the results will turn to be very frustrated. There is no doubt that they can not understand each other, and not mention to discuss some upsetting or controversial problems.However, by using e-mails and text messages the situation can be better, they can use some tools, such as dictionary, reference books, and internet websites,to help them translate the content of e-mails （这个看着不是很明白额，翻译电子邮件的内容？+so that both of them can understand each other）. By doing so, discussion can be smoothly and efficiently.

In addition, e-mails and text messages will enable people to have discussion recorded and help them recall all details whenever they need, especially for some essential discussions of controversial problems. Take my boss for an example;she has been working for more than ten years. She told me that getting into the habit of discussing through e-mails is very crucial for our career life, since people sometimes are too busy to remember every detail about discussion of controversial problems. It is conceivable that e-mails and text messages can help people recall those details. So, e-mails and text messages are needed for discussion of controversial problems. (其实这个电话和微信也有额，嘿嘿，只不过，文字的便于查阅和整理。个人观点了)

Admittedly,there is no denying that using telephones and voice-messages can reflect sender’s emotion more clearly and vividly. From their intonation, people can gain more information than reading an e-mail. But, most of time the above information is useless for people to discuss upsetting or controversial problems.

To sumup, I prefer using e-mails and text messages than using telephones and voice messages;because it can help people understand each other better and have discussion recorded.

Danie的句子使用越来越熟练了，嘿嘿。是不是我们现在都是限时写了额？

DanielleZ

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

It is universally acknowledged that upsetting or controversial problems can not be avoided in our life. When you need to discuss these problems with your friends,classmates, or colleagues, by which way do you prefer, e-mails and text message or the telephone or voice-messaging? Most people probably will choose telephones or voice-messaging, since people in the other side of telephone could understand what you (are) saying instantly, especially telephones could enable both of you exchange opinions more efficiently. However, from my standpoint, I do not consider telephone and voice-messaging can be better than e-mail and text messaging when discussing upsetting or controversial problems.

At the very beginning, one disadvantage of discussing through telephone or voice-messaging is that people sometimes can not understand each other very well through phones, thus discussion through the telephone or voice-messaging will leave much to be desired. For instance, if a Chinese, whose English is very poor, discusses with an American through telephone, the results will turn to be very frustrated. There is no doubt that they can not understand each other, and not mention to discuss some upsetting or controversial problems.However, by using e-mails and text messages the situation can be better, they can use some tools, such as dictionary, reference books, and internet websites,to help them translate the content of e-mails （这个看着不是很明白额，翻译电子邮件的内容？+so that both of them can understand each other）. By doing so, discussion can be smoothly and efficiently.

In addition, e-mails and text messages will enable people to have discussion recorded and help them recall all details whenever they need, especially for some essential discussions of controversial problems. Take my boss for an example;she has been working for more than ten years. She told me that getting into the habit of discussing through e-mails is very crucial for our career life, since people sometimes are too busy to remember every detail about discussion of controversial problems. It is conceivable that e-mails and text messages can help people recall those details. So, e-mails and text messages are needed for discussion of controversial problems. (其实这个电话和微信也有额，嘿嘿，只不过，文字的便于查阅和整理。个人观点了)

Admittedly,there is no denying that using telephones and voice-messages can reflect sender’s emotion more clearly and vividly. From their intonation, people can gain more information than reading an e-mail. But, most of time the above information is useless for people to discuss upsetting or controversial problems.

To sumup, I prefer using e-mails and text messages than using telephones and voice messages;because it can help people understand each other better and have discussion recorded.

Danie的句子使用越来越熟练了，嘿嘿。是不是我们现在都是限时写了额？

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/23 17:48:57)

还没有哎，我现在35个好句子还没背熟练呢，每次写的时候还要对着看一下。基本上只能40分钟完成，然后还要检查一下。。。嘿嘿~banban，你一般是计时写的吧？

zombiee

6.23 Happy Dragon Boat Festival
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are noweasier to become educated than in the past.

When it comes to the question whether education now becomes easier for people to access, people usually hold different opinions. With the society developing, the tuition of universities become more than that of severaldecades ago. So that, some people consider that it becomes harder for people to become educated because of the tuition increasing. However, from my standpoint,some other factors make education more accessible for many people, even the tuition becomes higher, such as websites and variety kinds of classes.

First and the foremost, governments in many cities have spare no effortto develop the condition of education. They have already granted a large amountof money to guarantee all children who are old enough to go to primary school;they build more schools, hire more teachers and publish more policies to makesure all children’s rights to get educated. In China, attending primary school is statutoryand free; it means that the people, who forbid children to achieve primaryeducation, will get punished by local government（law）. And children do not need topay any tuition for primary school. Since this policy has been carried on out in China
, manyyoung children have benefited from it. Thanks to the effort of the government,it becomes easier for young children to become educated, especially forchildren whose families are very poor.

Besides  the effort from governments, variety kinds of classes andlectures nowadays enable people to get educated about whatever they want mucheasier than before, such as Fresh, Wine tasting, Ballet, and the forth, whichare not available in the last two decades. Take wine tasting class as anexample, many people in Chinaare very interested in wine tasting, but due to lack of sufficient educationabout wine, most people could not enjoy the fantastic about tasting good winesin the past. However, the situation has changed significantly in the past fiveyears, 如何改变了，不明白many wine tasting classes become available to people, they offeredopportunities for people to get educated more conveniently than that in thepast.

Most importantly, the development of technology has great positive influenceon simplifying methods that people utilize to teach themselves. Millions ofresources on the internet have helped people to achieve self teaching materialsmuch easier than the past. For instance, by based on the internet, distanceeducation has been developed so rapidly. Students who can not afford to studyaboard are now able to attend classes in the other country by distanceeducation, thanks to the development of the online distance education, studentswho are eager to learn knowledge but can not afford go aboard can teachthemselves much easier than the past.

To sum up, educationbecomes easier for people to access, because of contributions from thegovernment’s effort, variety classes and the development of the technology.

-- by 会员 DanielleZ (2012/6/23 17:26:24)

举例有点生涩，没有说明白说透，有点空. 还有我怎么感觉有点似曾相识，哈哈。
加油

DanielleZ

6月24日110108 ML Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Food inthe past was much healthier than today.

It is universally acknowledged that the quality of people’s life becomesignificantly improved since the technology has been developing rapidly. Improvementof technology enable people travel faster, work more efficiently, and even havemore options for food. When it comes to the question whether foods nowadaysreally become healthier than that of the past, people usually hold differentopinions, some people believe the food become healthier because technology hasrefined the process of producing food and helped people get more nutrition fromeating. However, some people claim that because of the development oftechnology, more pollution has been involved in environment. There becomes moreair, soli, and water pollution. Thus, as the results, vegetable, fruits, andanimals, which supply people’s daily life inevitably, receive more pollution,which make food become more damage to our health. From my standpoint, I agreewith the statement that the nowadays food become less healthy than that in thepast.

At the very beginning, with science and technology improved noticeably, moreand more chemical substances have been utilized into growing vegetable, fruit,and feeding animals. Some of these substances helped vegetables, fruits andanimals grow faster and better, at the same time, most of these substances areharmful people’s health with long-period eating. Take one substance as anexample, this material helps to increase cattle’s growing speed. It acceleratesthe growing periods of cattle as much as ten months, which means cattle willgrow more quickly and could been sold more quickly. There is no denying thatthis substance help farmers and merchants get more profit, but many researcheshave indicated that this substance would destroy people’s immune system if theyget into the habit of eating the meat, which comes from the cattle fed by thissubstance. This phenomena is not rare in our nowadays life, the abuse of thechemistry substances pose a great threat to health of food.

Further more, the way of cooking food has also become less healthy thanthe past. In order to catch up the hurry speed of our life, people have numerousways to speed up the time we spend on eating. More and more fast food and semi-preparefood become popular among people. Thanks to these easy prepare food, more timehave been saved to other crucial matters. However, fast food and semi-preparefood would probably lead to high percentage of oil and salt, such as freshfries, and burgers. These foods will cause many diseases, such as obesity, highblood pressure, and eve heart attack.  

Admittedly, one advantage of the development of technology is that thequantity of foods become less limited, which means people can easily get enoughnutrition from foods, especially in some harsh weather. Processed food wouldnot be the only choice for people in winter; they can purchase fresh vegetableand fruits from market which are grown in the greenhouse. How greatcontribution of the technology it is to improve the health of food today.
Tosum up, even more and more technology make food readily and fast to prepare,the development of the technology leads more damage of people’s health becauseof the abuse of chemical fertilizer and more oil and salt in food.

qianjun06

6月24日110108 ML Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Food inthe past was much healthier than today.
批改       蓝色 好句子
It is universally acknowledged that the quality of people’s life becomesignificantly improved since the technology has been developing rapidly. Improvementof technology enable people travel faster, work more efficiently, and even havemore options for food. When it comes to the question whether foods nowadaysreally become healthier than that of the past, people usually hold differentopinions, some people believe the food become healthier because technology hasrefined the process of producing food and helped people get more nutrition fromeating. However, some people claimargue that because of the development oftechnology, more pollution has been involved dispersedinto environment. There becomes moreair, soli, and water pollution. (Thus, as the results)重复意思,vegetable, fruits, andanimals, which supply people’s daily life inevitably, receive more pollution,which makemakeing food become more damage to our health. From my standpoint, I agreewith the statement that the nowadays food become less healthyhealthier than that in thepast.

At the very beginning, with science and technology improved noticeably, moreand more chemical substances have been utilized into growing vegetable, fruit,and feeding animals. Some of these substances helped vegetables, fruits andanimals grow faster and better, at the same time, most of these substances areharmful to people’s health with long-period eating. Take one substance as anexample, this material helps to increase cattle’s growing speed. It acceleratesthe growing periods of cattle as much lessas ten months, which means cattle willgrow more quickly and could been sold more quickly. There is no denying thatthis substance helps farmers and merchants get more profit, but many researcheshave indicated that this substance would destroy people’s immune system if theyget into the habit of eating the meat, which comes from the cattle fed by thissubstance. This phenomena is not rare in our nowadays life, the abuse of thechemistry substances pose a great threat to health of food. 戴云的吧，呵呵

Further more, the way of cooking food has also become less healthy than thatin the past. In order to catch up with the hurry speed of our life, people have numerousways to speed up the time we spend on eating. More and more fast food and semi-preparefood become popular among people. Thanks to these easy prepare food, more timehave been saved to other crucial matters. However, fast food and semi-preparefood would probably lead to high percentage of oil and salt, such as freshfriesfrenchfries, and burgers. These foods will cause many diseases, such as obesity, highblood pressure, and eve heart attack.  缺少例子

Admittedly, one advantage of the development of technology is that （thequantity of foods become less limited）没明白意思感觉是贬义, which means people can easily get enoughnutrition from foods, especially in some harsh weather. Processed food wouldnot be the only choice for people in winter; they can purchase fresh vegetableand fruits from market which are grown in the greenhouse. How greatthe contribution of the technology it is to improve the health of food today.

Tosum up, even more and more technologyies make food readily and fast to prepare,the development of the technologyies leads more damage of people’s health becauseof the abuse of chemical fertilizer and more oil and salt in food.


1，文章单复数错误太多了，写作不注意。
2，单词的变化太少
3.  插入语用的还是蛮多，蛮不错

Raina

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      优点:无纺布袋http://www.shwufangbudai.com/201261414444.html价廉物美，环保实用，应用广泛，有突出的广告位置。适用于各类业务活动及展览展销会，是企事业单位理想的广告促销礼品赠品. 下面介绍袋子的另外几款类型。
  1、广告型广告袋
　　购物袋广告可以利用袋身有限的面积，向世人传播企业或产品服务的市场信息。当顾客提着印有商店广告的购物袋，穿行于大街小巷的时候，实际上是一些精美的广告袋，并不亚于制作一个优秀的广告招牌，而费用却相对较低。
  2、知识型广告袋
　　它是把各类具有一定知识性的图案、文字，如世界名画、中国书法等，印在购物袋上。这类购物袋，不仅给消费者在携带物品时提供了方便，而且陶冶了人们的情操，使人产生美妙的心理感受。
  3、礼品型广告袋
　　我国是一个礼仪之邦，逢年过节、祝寿贺喜，人们总是要带上礼品“走动、走动”，以联络感情，烘托气氛。当客人把礼品装在印有“祝您长寿”、“愿君快乐”等字样的购物袋里提去时，主人感到的不仅是礼物，而且另有一番情趣在心头。
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　　如××艺术节纪念、旅游纪念袋等。这种策略迎合人们的纪念心理和荣誉心理，使人们在购物之后，尚有一番新感受。
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　　当顾客购买杂七杂八的东西，需要简易购物袋盛装时，如果店家能够提供一个，解人之忧，必定受到消费者欢迎。给人方便，本身就是促销的一个重要决窍。
  6、趋时型广告袋
　　现在人们普遍追求高水准的生活方式，时尚的商品领导一时的消费潮流。当社会上出现什么“热”的时候，若店家把商品图案、宣传信息印在优美的购物袋上，无疑是促销的重要一招。当消费者看到热点商品某店有售时，也就产生了“挡不住的诱惑”。
  7、仿古型广告袋
　　许多社会知名度高的传统商品，由于用料讲究、制作老道、历史久远而倍受消费者喜爱。如果购物袋上印有古朴而典雅的图案和文字，给人一种高贵和庄重的感觉，想必也会引起部分消费者的购物情趣。

DanielleZ

6月26日100206 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Highschool students should take a course on basic economics.

Have you ever attended basic economics courses inthe high school? Have you ever had trouble to deal with a large amount of money?Recently, a public topic over the phenomenon of high school providing a course onbasic economics has been brought into our eyes. When it comes to the questionwhether it is necessary to teach high school students some economicalknowledge, people usually hold diverse opinions. Some people think thatstudents have too much subjects to learn, adding a course about basic economicswill do nothing but increase their working load. However, the others believethat it is essential for high school students to grasp some economicalknowledge, which will benefit their future life. From my standpoint, I aminclined to the statement that high school students should take a course onbasic economics, because economics is not only assist them learn the method ofmanagement of money, but also cultivate their interest of economics.
At the very begin, an advantage of learning somebasic economics is that it can benefit students and their family. Takingcourses enable students gain more knowledge about how to manage money, whichare lacked by a huge number of families, such as the deposit rate, stocks andso the forth. It is conceivable that students will deliver that economicalknowledge towards their parents, as the result, their parents will inevitablylearn the knowledge as well. Consequently, these families who are armed with adequateeconomical knowledge will do some investments base on that knowledge. Take myown experience as an example, I have learned some knowledge about deposit ratein university, during my holiday, I taught my parents what I had learned inuniversity. Thanks to this useful knowledge, my families get more interestbecause of choosing a compound interest of deposit. My case is not rare, a lotof students in my class have already helped their families to do somemanagement of money by the knowledge they learn in class. So it is obvious thatbasic economics knowledge could help both students and their families.
Atthe same time, along with the benefits of my families from economicalknowledge, economical lessons also have a favorable impact of students’ futurelife. There is increasing tendency that more and more young people get into thehabit of purchasing something of which the price is too high to them to afford,just because the good looks fashionable and popular. This impulse buying isclosely related to the lack of economics knowledge. After learning the basic knowledgeof economics, students can be more rationale when they want to buy something.Furthermore, they may even try some investments to increase their incomes. Manyresearches have indicated that the more economical knowledge students can gainin high school, the more skillful of them to management their prosperities. Whatan extremely important role that economical knowledge play in students life.
Admittedly, despite many obvious advantages oflearning basic economical courses in high school, it is not without itsproblem. The majority disadvantage is learning extra courses will increasestudents’ working load. But compared to some interest classes that parentsforce students to attend, the basic and understandable economical course willlead more interest rather than burden.
Fromwhat has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that studentsshould learn some courses about basic economics, because it would benefit theirfamilies and their future.

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Have you ever attended basic economics courses in the high school? Have you ever had trouble to deal with a large amount of money?Recently, a public topic over the phenomenon of high school providing a course on basic economics has been brought into our eyes. When it comes to the question of whether it is necessary to teach high school students some economical knowledge, people usually hold diverse opinions. Some people think that students have too much subjects to learn, adding a course about basic economics will do nothing but increase their working load. However, the others believe that it is essential for high school students to grasp some economical knowledge, which will benefit their future life. From my stand point, I am inclined to the statement that high school students should take a course on basic economics, because economics is not only assist them learn the method of management of money, but also cultivate their interest of economics.

At the very begin, an advantage of learning some basic economics is that it can benefit students and their family. Taking courses enable students gain more knowledge about how to manage money, which are lacked by a huge number of families, such as the deposit rate, stocks and so the forth. It is conceivable that students will deliver that economical knowledge towards their parents, as the result, their parents will inevitably learn the knowledge as well. Consequently, these families who are armed with adequate economical knowledge will do some investments base on that knowledge. Take my own experience as an example, I have learned some knowledge about deposit rate in university, during my holiday, I taught my parents what I had learned in university. Thanks to this useful knowledge, my families get more interest because of choosing a compound interest of deposit. My case is not rare, a lot of students in my class have already helped their families to do some management of money by the knowledge they learn in class. So it is obvious that basic economics knowledge could help both students and their families.

At the same time, along with the benefits of my families from economical knowledge, economical lessons also have a favorable impact of students’ future life. There is increasing tendency that more and more young people get into the habit of purchasing something of which the price is too high to（for） them to afford,just because the good looks fashionable and popular. This impulse buying is closely related to the lack of economics knowledge. After learning the basic knowledge of economics, students can be more rationale when they want to buy something. Furthermore, they may even try some investments to increase their incomes. Many researches have indicated that the more economical knowledge students can gain in high school, the more skillful of them to management their prosperities. What an extremely important role that economical knowledge play in students life.！

Admittedly, despite many obvious advantages of learning basic economical courses in high school, it is not without its problem. The majority disadvantage is learning extra courses will increase students’ working load. But compared to some interest classes that parents force students to attend, the basic and understandable economical course will lead more interest rather than burden.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that students should learn some courses about basic economics, because it would benefit their families and their future.

Denie你的句子背完了额，好多你都用到了，佩服俺们丹尼亲改晚了，原谅下额。一个就是句子的简练度需要提高，嘿嘿。这个包子童鞋的作文里面可是表现的很好。