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prodliu

The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, there are（three） competitive theories about how the Chago Canyonhouses were used(the function of the buildings of Chao Canyon). However, the professor stands that the buildings were not so functional.(听力不是否定是不是functional,而是文章的观点，Oppositely, the professor points out flaws in each theory.)

First of all, the reading passage points out that Chago structures were purely residential with thousands of people(were constructed for purely residential purpose). In contrast, the professor claims that few fireplaces were not enough for all families.(听力的内容再多写点细节) It is not suitable for a lot of people to live in. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.

Second, the passage says that Chago house were used to store food supplies. It is different from what is stand in the professor’s speaking that if the building was the storage, why isn’t the maize still on the floorand why was there no containers? （that if those buildings used for storage purpose, the traces of either maize or maize containers should be discovered. Surprisingly, no indication of any maize or container was found in the excavation. ）

Finally, the passage raises the issue that people regard the big house as the ceremonial centers. The professor holds a totally different view. He claims(demonstrates) that except for the broken pots, the building for ceremonial activity also need other matericals, such as sands, stones, which suggests that the pots were not the good evidence of the houses were used for ceremonies, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.

In conclusion, the point made in the lecture contracts with what is presented in the reading material.


不管是文章还speaker提出观点的动词可以用的丰富一些，state/claim/argue/discuss/mention/talk/indicate/contend/raise the issue/demonstrate
                                                                                    反对的词：contradict/refute/oppose to the writer's expectation/cast doubt on/present

Herisson0509

To prodliu~~~~
谢谢你的词语

Herisson0509

4.10综合

The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, online encyolopedia is regarded as an important resource, while several problems make them less valuable than traditional printed encyolopedia. However, the criticism is largely ignore how far online encyclopedias have come in the eyes of the lecturer.



First of all, the reading passage points out that online encyolopedia lack academic credentials. In contrast, the professor claims that traditional encyclopedias have never been closely perfect, if you are looking for a comprehension work without any mistakes, you will not find it. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.



Second, the passage demonstrates that even if the entry in the online encyclopedia is correct, the communal nature of these online encyclopedias gives users and hackers the opportunity to delete, and corrupt information in the encyclopedia. It is different from what is stand in the professor’s speaking that online encyclopedias have recognized the importance of protecting their articles, they use a format in the article that nobody can change.



Finally, the passage raises the issue that the encyclopedias focus too frequently, which creates a false impression of what is important and what is not. The professor opposes to the writer's expectation. He asserts that the diversity of use in topics that online encyclopedias offer is one of their strongest advantages, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.



In conclusion, compared with the author, the lecturer gives contradictory opinions concerning encyclopedias.

喵喵了个咪

The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, online encyolopedia is regarded as an important resource, while several problems make them less valuable than traditional printed encyolopedia. However, the criticism is largely ignore how far online encyclopedias have come in the eyes of the lecturer.

First of all, the reading passage points out that online encyolopedia lack academic credentials. In contrast, the professor claims that traditional encyclopedias have never been closely perfect, if you are looking for a comprehension work without any mistakes, you will not find it. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.(没有具体叙述网络百科如何反驳passage中所说的不专业，容易有错误的观点。)

Second, the passage demonstrates that even if the entry in the online encyclopedia is correct, the communal nature of these online encyclopedias gives users and hackers the opportunity to delete, and corrupt information in the encyclopedia. It is different from what is stand in the professor’s speaking that online encyclopedias have recognized the importance of protecting their articles, they use a format in the article that nobody can changewithout review by managers.(lecturer部分的内容有点少)

Finally, the passage raises the issue that the encyclopedias focus too frequently, which creates a false impression of what is important and what is not. The professor opposes to the writer's expectation. He(貌似lecturer是个女的) asserts that the diversity of use in topics that online encyclopedias offer is one of their strongest advantages, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.(问题同上一段)

In conclusion, compared with the author, the lecturer gives contradictory opinions concerning encyclopedias.(这段可以不要，因为观点在第一段已经说过了)



主要问题是文章在passage花费了较多篇幅，而lecturer的内容较少。这样容易让考官认为你没太听懂文章，然后用passage凑字数。

然后要注意的就是尽可能的记下lecturer中的细节内容。在作文中尽可能多的写lecturer如何反驳passage。

可能这篇lecturer有点难。。我听的时候老感觉这个professor是和谁吵架了之后来录的音。。

总之，多练习哈~加油

Herisson0509

4.10综合
The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, it is unlikely forAmerican companies do the same as many companies adopted new, ecplogically friendly practices in order to receive ecocertification for several reasons. However, yet none of them regared in the eye of the lecture.



First of all, the professor claims that American companies don’t treat all advertising as the same, they distiguish them between the places where it made. And American has a lot of confidence in independent agencies, consumers are likely to inclinde to wooden products by independent organization. In contrast, the reading passage points out that American consumers are exposed to so much advertising that they would not pay attention to the ecocertification lable. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.

Second, the passage demonstrates that ecocertification wood will be more expensive than unecocertification wood because to earn ecocertification. In the lecture, the professor admits consumers certainly care about the price. But when the difference between two products is small, they do choose on factories other than price. Americans are becoming increasingly convinced of the value of protecting the environment.

Finally, the passage raises the issue that it is not convicing that it always make good business for American to keep up with development in the rest of world. The professor opposes to the writer's expectation. He asserts that US Wood companies concern what’s going on in the wood business internationally because of foreign competitors, and it is a good chance for the country to be interested in ecocertification, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.

chasedreamabc

The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, it is unlikely for American companies do the same as many companies adopted new, ecplogically （ecologically） friendly practices in order to（是不是可以直接用to do呢） receive ecocertification for several reasons. However, yet none of them regared（regard） in the eye(eyes?) of the lecture.



First of all, the professor claims that American companies don’t(连写显得不正式，do not) treat all advertising as the same, they distiguish（distinguish）them between the places where it made（run-on）. And American has a lot of confidence in independent agencies,（；）consumers are likely to inclinde（inclined） to wooden products by independent organization. In contrast, the reading passage points out that（those） American consumers are exposed to so much（such…that） advertising that they would not pay attention to the ecocertification label. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.

Second, the passage demonstrates that ecocertification wood will be more expensive than unecocertification wood because to earn ecocertification.（because+句子） In the lecture, the professor admits consumers certainly care about the price. But when the difference between two products is small, they do choose on factories other than price. Americans are becoming increasingly convinced of the value of protecting the environment.

Finally, the passage raises the issue that it is not convicing（convincing） that it（指代？）always make（makes） good business for American to keep up with development in the rest of world. The professor opposes to the writer's expectation. He asserts that US Wood companies concern what’s going on in the wood business internationally because of foreign competitors, and it is a good chance for the country to be interested in ecocertification, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.

gre呀gre

真不好意思，我刚到家，今天身体不太舒服，头很疼，所以作文我明天早上再补上，真不好意耽误你了

Herisson0509

4月12日101009 NADo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

Nowadays, many people tend to move from village to city, which arouses a fierce debate. Some people suggest that live in the city, they can possess the ability to take better care of their families than the countrymen, and this is my opinion. My positions are listed as below.

To begin with, those persons who live in rural areas often have no time to care for families. As the agriculture is the primary source of finance in every family, rural residents are always occupied with farm work. According to a recent survey from the Social Community, the figure shows that 80 percent farmers who sell vegetables in the city come from home at 4 or 5 clock in the morning, but back home late. So tired are they that rarely would like to have a rest. They almost have no spare time to do other things, not to mention look after families.（这里不知道用的对不对，求讨论）

Furthermore, it is unverisally acknowledged that people in the country cannot afford too much better consideration due to poor economic condition. As the popular saying goes, the superstructure is determined by the economic base. According to a recent research from the Social Community, only 20 percent family solved the problem of essential food and clothing, the rest are still in starvation and chill. To most rural family, the money they struggle to earn are reluctant to satify their daily needs. Let alone that extra funds to develop living standard and provide families more preferable attention. Just pursume that if one suffered serious disease suddenly, the problem is that maybe the patient cannot be sent to the hospital in time because of a far distance between village and city. What’s more, the another obstacle is expensive cost to cure. So, it is not sagacious to live in country to give more consideration to families.

Last not the least, people live in the city possess the ability to take better care of their families than the countrymen. The enviornment and economic situation ensure life to excellent quality, such as the superior education children receive, the community full equipped, and etc.

In a nutshell, (跟鸟学的）from all discussed above, compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas cannot take better care of their families.

喵喵了个咪

·改4月12日101009 NADo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

Nowadays, many people tend to move from village to city, which arouses a fierce debate. Some people suggest that live living in the city, they can possess the ability to take better care of their families than the countrymen, and this is also my opinion. My positions are listed as below.(这段那个从句可以直接改成那样，不用断开再给后半句加主语)

To begin with, those persons(person一般强调单数人，复数人一般用people) who live in rural areas often have no time to care for families. As the agriculture is the primary source of finance in every family, rural residents are always occupied with farm work. According to a recent survey from the Social Community, the figure shows that 80 percent farmers who sell vegetables in the city come from home at 4 or 5 clock in the morning, but back home late. So tired are they that rarely would like to have a rest. They almost have no spare time to do other things, not to mention looking after families.（这里不知道用的对不对，求讨论）(not to mention doing/+n.)

Furthermore, it is unverisally(universally) acknowledged that people in the country cannot afford too much better consideration due to poor economic condition. As the popular saying goes, the superstructure is determined by the economic base(妹子学经济的吧^^). According to a recent research from the Social Community, only 20 percent family solved the problem of essential food and clothing(我觉得换车这个好些basicnecessitiesf" target="_blank">oflife), the rest are still in starvation and chill. To most rural family(families), the money they struggle to earn are reluctant to(意思不对，在句尾加) satify(satisfy) their daily needs from hand to mouth. Let alone that extra funds to develop living standard and provide families more preferable attention. Just pursume(presume) that if one suffered a serious disease suddenly, the problem is that maybe the patient cannot be sent to the hospital in time because of a far distance between village and city. What’s more, the another obstacle is expensive cost to cure. So, it is not sagacious to live in country who want to give more consideration to families(这句话如果不加who want，你去掉定语翻译下看看。。。).

Last not the least, people live in the city possess the ability to take better care of their families than the countrymen. The enviornment(environment) and economic situation ensure life to excellent quality, such as the superior education children receive, the community full equipped, and etc. (这段有点少了，最好展开具体说下。)

In a nutshell, (跟鸟学的）from all discussed above, compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas cannot take better care of their families.

有些拼写和小的语法点需要注意下，可能是因为没细心吧。

文章的论据都不错，但是结构有一个致命的问题就是题目中让你比较城市和农村哪个对照顾家人比较“好”，可是你用了两大段篇幅来说另一个不好。这种反面对比一般出现在第三段用来反衬前两段的正面观点。而你的第三段表述正面观点时缺没展开篇幅具体论述。可能是因为没有审清题目的原因吧。

总的来说，要细心！

Herisson0509

4.12  TPO8

The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, many criticssuggests that it was not real that the events distored by Chevalier in his memoir. However, the lecture states that no memoir can possibly be correct in every detail details, but the Chevalier’s memoir is accurate overall due to the reliable sources.



First of all, the professor claims that Chevalier had so much wealth that he could spend lots of money on parties and gambling. The reason why he borrowed money from the merchant is that he sold first then waited money to arrive after a few days. This does not mean he is poor. In contrast, the reading passage points out that he was poor because he often borrowed money. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.

Second, the passage demonstrates that it is impossible to capture the conversation talked many years ago. In the lecture, the professor admits when Chevalier met Voltaive, he wrote down what he could remember about the conversation immediately each night. So later the notes became the important source of his menoir.

Finally, the passage raises the issue that Chevalier offer a bribe to prison jailers so that he could escaped from the notorious prison. The professor opposes to the writer's expectation. He asserts that those prisoners recognized more powerful friends were not able to bribe to freedom. The good evidence of he escaped by himself is that the government documents about an old prison room repaired, Chevalier’s room, which indicates that exactly he did as he said, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.



In conclusion, compared with the author, the lecturer gives contradictory opinions concerning the accuary of the memoir wrote by Chevalier.