【写作小分队】第一篇，献丑了

noarkid

哭了，如果加上修改时间久超时了，肿么办肿么办？？？？？？？哎哎哎~

daisyの小夢想

As we all know that grandparents love their grandchildren so much, and they would always want to protect them(their) grandchildren every times(all the times). But as the world changed so much during the last 50 years, they may not catch the trend and would always(always太绝对, sometimes/probably) offer some advice that not(don’t) fit the situation well. So people need to take their grandparents' advice with cautious(cautiously).

(One one hand,)Grandparents are very old, sometimes just too old to catch the modern trends.(表述有点奇怪。改为As they are in such an old age, grandparents may not be able to catch up with the trends and accept new things.) They are conservative, they are out of fashion. They do not know how to use the Internet, how to use a telephone, and how to use some other new facilities.(三个how to use有点累赘) What is more, they would even afraid to(be afraid of) taking an airplane. So, it's really hard to imagine when you need to go some place by plane for the limited time, but your grandparents insist you to take bus(没有insist you to这一用法，应为insist that you should take a bus), simply because they think it is safer.

But on the other hand, grandparents are old and thus gain more experience(have much more experience than we do) and sometimes they are knowledgeable to turn to for help.(they are so knowledgeable that we can rely on them for help) I could remember there was a time when I met something very embarrass(embarrassing), I did not want anybody know what actually happened. But my grandfather knew(noticed) my difficulties from my abnormal behavior and helped me a lot to face that(confront them). It was the encouragement and advice from my grandpa that made it possible for me to go through that big problem in a short time. I feel grateful to have such (a) grandpa.

Moreover, I always believe that the true love in the relatives(family) always make our grandparents a best advisor. They love us and they will spear(spare) no effort to help us if we meet some difficulties. (这个观点单独一段有点虚，可以把它摆到上一段)

In conclusion, we need to take our grandparents’ advice carefully. Their knowledge and love make them a best(good) advisor, but their conservation makes it important for us to take their advice with cautious(with caution).

sorry，迟来了~！

jiaosisisisi

noarkid  你好，我是音乐同学
224的综合，very glad 由我负责给你revise~~~
but 我的水平有限，如果。。。请多包涵啊~~~

lixiang8747

2月24日 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people’s lives have already taken place.

Though improvement（应该是复数，改进会有很多的） of technology is（相应的助动词要改） making our life better and better, the question whether the most significant improvement have already taken place is still under debate. Some people may think（that） the technology have（has） already led to a measurable change in the life, and thus there would not have any chance to make any more improvement. But I think, as time goes by, there will always be something much more incredible happen and will be a （去掉）much more significant improvement（复数） in life.

To begin with, no one would imagine what would happen next, because life is a talent writer, always coming up with something unpredictable. The past 50 years have saw the tremendous change（复数） in china. When everybody live in 1949, no one would imagine the telephone would used in every family. And what they do know is that china has win a war and would thought that the triumph was the most significant change in their life. But when it came to 1978, when the America became more familiar with every one, （什么是当美国对大家更熟悉后？这句话有问题）no one would imagine the significant change America would bring to China. And then, the television, the computer, and the Internet all make every one（名词所有格呢，每个人的生活） daily life even more interesting. For short, no one would predict the feature, and there will always be something new happened.（这句话时态太混乱了，鸟儿觉得应该这么写there will always be something new to happen）再说说这段的逻辑，我觉得没必要罗列历史事件，问题问你是不是科技的进步已经让你的生活发生改变，你写得这些似乎和这个论点都没什么关系）

What is more, a famous scientist once said, " Imagination is more important than knowledge." We should not limit our imagination to what has already been. Just believe that, there will always be something unknown approaching.（这个approaching是形容词，用在这里不对，直接approach）

On the contrary, if everyone just believes the most significant improvement has already taken place, and everyone do（does单复数问题） not do their best to discover something new, then the world would really stop the pace.

All that I have said（这里用过去式比过去完成时好） above boils down to the conclusion（这里要有be动词，否则句子没有谓语了） that, we should never have a thought that the significant improvement in life has already taken place.







文章有点短，建议第三段再放开写写，另外注意单复数，出现很多这个问题。

noarkid

2-24综合。。。。补交作业
In the lecture the professor was skeptical about the idea of the reading which overestimated the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine, though what it said about replacing the automobile's main source of power was true. The professor argued that the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine was not that nice.


In the reading passsage, the petroleum, which is the sauce main source of the internal-combustion engine, would run out of one day, but the hydrogen was plentiful and was easy to get. On the contrary the professor argued that the hydrogen is not that avalable, as it was artificial and was not easy to produce and stove.


Then, professor opposed reading's idea that the hydrogen-based cells would solve the pollution problems, Though the by-product of fuel-cell engines was environmental friendly, the pollution came from the produce procced was very large, as the large amount of coal and oil would be used, whose by-product was carbon dioxide.


Finally, the writer camplain that the fuel-cell engines would be economically competitive one day. However the profressor thought there would not be any cost saving and the fuel-cell engines is really expensive.

noarkid

noarkid  你好，我是音乐同学
224的综合，very glad 由我负责给你revise~~~
but 我的水平有限，如果。。。请多包涵啊~~~

-- by 会员 jiaosisisisi (2012/2/25 12:11:03)

彼此彼此啦。。。。。

noarkid

2月25日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in urban areas, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

Recently more and more people rush into the city and search for a better life. No doubt, there are many advantages to live there. So, I would like to support the idea that those live in the city will take better care of their families.

To begin with, urban residence earns much money, thus will take care of the families better. In China there is a big gap between urban and rural, those live in rural can just feed themselves, but those works in the city will have a lot surplus income to support the family. Moreover, with the money, the family can do lots of funny things. They can travel around the world, for instance, which will bond the relationship between the family members, and broaden them horizon. Therefore, living in city will lead a better life for the family.

In addition, city provides the residents with plenty of resources. There are many good hospitals, schools and playgrounds. When one of our families falls ill, there is better medical care; when families needs to go out for a rest, plenty of amusement-park would be available; when someone meets something sad, the bar is the best choice. With all that facilities, of course, one will take better care of the family.

Of course, there would be some benefit to live in the urban. The air there is fresh, the environment there is good, people there is friendly. Every thing is peaceful in the countryside. But it could not be justified, since in China, the rural would not provide enough materials for the betterment of the whole family.

In conclusion, though there may be some beneficial to live in the rural areas, the city is much better to take care of the family. Live in city will earn much more money and will enjoy a better facility there, all of which plays a really important role in taking care of the family.

jiaosisisisi

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In the lecture the professor was skeptical about the idea of the reading which overestimated the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine, though what it said about replacing the automobile's main source of power was true. The professor argued that the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine was not that nice.



In the reading passsage,（在阅读文章里，应该是作者指出，或者是得出结论比较好吧，如果单纯罗列出在阅读文章里的事实感觉很怪吧~~，） the petroleum, which is the sauce main source of the internal-combustion engine, would run out of (of介词去掉吧，)one day, but the hydrogen was（友情建议一个the hydrogen was supposed to be） plentiful and was easy to get. On the contrary （on the contrary 一般后面一般有逗号的！）the professor argued that the hydrogen is not that avalable, as it was artificial and was not easy to produce and stove.(stove 是火炉的意思，如果想表达存储。store )

Then, professor opposed reading's idea that the hydrogen-based cells would solve the pollution problems, Though the by-product of fuel-cell engines was environmental friendly, （environmentally friendly）the pollution came from the produce procced（production process生产过程，貌似这样表达好些吧） was very large, as the large amount of coal and oil would be used, whose by-product was carbon dioxide.


Finally, the writer camplain complainthat the fuel-cell engines would be economically competitive one day. However the profressor thought there would not be any cost saving and the fuel-cell engines is really expensive.



读后感：总体把三个VS 描述了出来，比较全面！
但是美中不足，是记忆下单词拼写！！！

整体结构 看起来不够 明朗 ！强烈建议noarkid 小盆友~~~
keyi 有一个自己的模板  ~~~~~~~

Crystaljoy

Noarkid，2,25的独立你跟Daisy互改哦。有点小小调整。

daisyの小夢想

2月25日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in urban areas, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

Recently more and more people rush into the city and search for a better life. No doubt, there are many advantages to live there. So, I would like to support the idea that those live in the city will take better care of their families.

To begin with, urban residence(residents) earns much (more) money, thus will take care of the families better. In China there is a big gap between urban and rural (+areas), those live in rural (+areas) can just feed themselves, but those works in the city will have a lot (+of)surplus income to support the family. Moreover, with the money, the family can do lots of funny things. They can travel around the world, for instance, which will bond the relationship between(among) the family members, and broaden them(their) horizon. Therefore, living in city will lead a better life for the family.

In addition, city provides the residents with plenty of resources (to enjoy together with their families). There are many good(advanced) hospitals, schools and playgrounds. When one of our families falls ill, there is better medical care; when families needs to go out for a rest(for relaxing), plenty of amusement-park would be available; when someone meets something sad, the bar is the best choice. With all that facilities, of course, one will take better care of the family.

Of course, there would be some benefit(s) to live in the urban (+areas). The air there is fresh, the environment there is good, (and) people there is(are) friendly. Everything is peaceful in the countryside. But it could not be justified(什么意思？？), since in China, the rural would not provide enough materials for the betterment of (+life of)the whole family.

In conclusion, though there may be some (a little) beneficial to live in the rural areas, the city is much better (+for us) to take care of the family. Live(Living) in city will (enable us to) earn much more money and will enjoy a better facility there. all of which plays a really important role in taking care of the family.(All factors considered above play important roles in how well we can take care of our families.)

观点不错，很清晰~~~语言表达要注意一下语法哦^^