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9-11综合。 tpo21. 题目链接 http://www.51pigai.com/tofel-essay/toefl-tpo21-integrated

While the reading stresses three major advantages of genetically modified trees, the speech points out that if we investigate the three dimensions more closely, they will be no longer that prominent.

The first advantage of genetic modification, according to the reading, is that it makes trees more resistant against detrimental environmental conditions. The speech argues, however, that lack of genetic diversity, caused by genetic modification, makes them vulnerable against problems that they are not designed for. Once an unexpected crisis is imposed on trees, naturally growing groups have higher chances of leaving survivors because these groups usually have at least some individuals that have resistant genes against any arbitrary difficulty.

Higher economic return, which is claimed to be the second advantage of genetically modified trees, is contended by the speaker to have been eaten up by higher price of seeds. Moreover, Farmers even need to pay every time they use those seeds for intellectual property right. Therefore, high yield of genetically modified trees does not really benefit farmers.

As for the influence of genetically modified trees on other species, the opinion of the speaker is exactly the opposite from that of the writer. The latter asserts that modified trees are less harmful because higher yield per geometric unit means they needs less space and resources to get the same return than naturally growing ones. The former refutes this assertion by saying that modified trees actually crowd out other species when they are planted together, which is likely the case.

jason509

loverony713 发表于 2014-9-10 11:21

thanks for your spicy points!
现在再读发现确实比较跑题。。。值得注意，有思路也不能乱来

jason509

9-11独立：你是某门课程的大牛，朋友有问题找你解决好还是找tutor好

When a friend of mine have confusion in a subject which I am extremely good at, I can think of no reason why s/he would turn to the tutor for help before trying to solve the problem together with me.

One may say that tutors are there solely for helping students with academic problems, or argue that it is not respectful enough if students who have questions do not ask them. However, this is no longer a concern if we notice that tutors need to help not only my friends but also the whole class. S/He would be more than happy if I could share part of his/her workload.

Besides the tutor, I myself also benefit from explaining questions to friends who ask me. On the one hand, sharing what I am good at makes me feel proud of myself and get satisfaction in self esteem; on the other hand, the process of presenting what I know is a process of strengthening my understanding of the knowledge, and exchange of ideas during discussion might even inspire intelligent new ideas. For example, I have been good at math since middle school; and more importantly, I am willing to share my experience, knowledge, and methods of study about it. This gives me a reputation as a math expert among groups of friends, which makes me even more interested and specialized in the field.

Last but not least, helping friends with academic problems enhances your friendship. Naturally, help means more communication, which is the basis of any type of relationship, including friendship. Since this type of interaction benefits both sides involved, it can be expected to be sustainable and long-lasting. In my case, because of my regular discussion on mathematic topics, I am still keeping contact with my friend whom I knew in middle school; while it is common that old friends who do not have the same interest lost touch after a few years.

Since helping friends with academic problems have advantages including reducing tutor’s working load, enforcing knowledge, and maintaining friendship, your friends should be strongly advised to turn to you for academic help if you are an expert in that field.

loverony713

jason509 发表于 2014-9-12 03:46
thanks for your spicy points!
现在再读发现确实比较跑题。。。值得注意，有思路也不能乱来 ...

对对！！~~ 哪怕只是写简单句 也不能跑题！！！~~

loverony713

jason509 发表于 2014-9-10 03:56
9月9日 综合：TPO 19 题目链接：http://www.51pigai.com/tofel-essay/toefl-tpo19-integrated
多谢指点啦！ ...

9月9日 综合 The claim proposed in the paragraph that buzzing will harm society in three different ways is completely denied by the speaker. First, the paragraph argues that implies that(删掉) buzzers have the incentive to mislead people. This is not true according to the speaker because the way in which buzzers are recruited determines that they can honestly promote a product-- buzzers are usually those who have experience on the product and (who) like it. People who do not like it are not likely to be hired as buzzers, so that when you hear a buzzer praising a product, she/he is likely to be telling the truth at the same time. The second statement in the paragraph-- that potential consumers are more likely to beleive in individual appraisals rather than printed advertisements-- is also refused by the speaker. He contends that people always have lots of questions after their promotion. These questions can be reasons (of)not buying the product if not answered(不是被回答吧) satisfactorily. Finally, buzzing is thought to have brought mistrust and dishonesty to society in the paragraph, but to help building trust in the speech(后半句不好 最好有主谓 我觉得省略后读的不清晰). The difference of the conclusions mainly comeS from the writer's and the speaker's different opinions on the previous two statements.(感觉这句没太必要) The writer believes buzzers lie to potential consumers while the speaker argues that buzzers tell the truth and bring a better life to those who listen to their honest suggestions.(再细节一些) 阅读部分需要提取的观点是： Main point: 口碑营销的方法问题种种，批评家希望取缔。 Sub point 1: 口碑营销可能会提供错误的信息 Sub point 2: 消费者容易信任口碑营销 Sub point 3: 口碑营销可能会破坏社会关系 听力部分需要提取的观点是： Main point: 阅读部分对口碑营销的观点是错误的 Sub point 1: 托儿在推销产品的时候不会说谎 Sub point 2: 人们不会盲目信任口碑营销 Sub point 3: 口碑营销可以促进人与人之间的信任

chasedreamabc

不好意思，改晚了

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While the reading stresses three majoradvantages of genetically modified trees, the speech points out that if weinvestigate the three dimensions more closely, they will be no longer thatprominent.

The first advantage of genetic modification,according to the reading, is that it makes trees more resistant againstdetrimental environmental conditions. The speech argues, however, that lack ofgenetic diversity, caused by genetic modification, makes them vulnerableagainst problems that they are not designed for. Once an unexpected crisis isimposed on trees, naturally growing groups have higher chances of leavingsurvivors because these groups usually have at least some individuals that haveresistant genes（gene）against any arbitrary difficulty.

Higher economic return, which is claimed to be thesecond advantage of genetically modified trees, is contended by thespeaker to have been eaten up by higher price of seeds. Moreover, Farmers evenneed to pay every time they use those seeds for intellectual property right.Therefore, high yield of genetically modified trees does not really benefitfarmers.

As for the influence of genetically modified trees on other species, theopinion of the speaker is exactly the opposite from that of the writer. Thelatter asserts that modified trees are less harmful because higher yield pergeometric unit means they needs less space and resources to get the same returnthan naturally growing ones. The former refutes this assertion by saying thatmodified trees actually crowd out other species when they are planted together,which is likely the case.
语言不够精炼，独立也可以表现出来。大致简单了一些，主要多写听力，阅读一笔带过