Five_007的写作练习贴~

Johnnyli

修改完毕，请指教！

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Five_007

Johnnyli 发表于 2014-6-24 21:55
修改完毕，请指教！

加油！

改的好认真！灰强感谢！！！

Five_007

TPO11 综合
Does the trend of less reading produce negative effects on public, general culture and the future of literature? The reading seems strongly support to this view. However, the listening just on the contrary.


First, the passage proposed that it was unbenefitial when less literature was red by public. While the professor refutes the its view. She contends that literature is not the only thing can stimulate public. The science writings and history books also have enough quality to stimulate people's imaginations or understanding. Thus, it is unreasonable to say that the less literature, the less benefits.


Second, the author presents the viewpoint that the time spent on diveting and other books with poor quality makes the general culture lower. However, the speaker refutes the point held by the author. She states that listening to music or watching movies is not wasting of time. The culture is changed, so is the form of expression. Brilliant music and good movie are also excellent expression forms. So it is not proper to say that without reading, the level of culture must has lowered.


Finally, the text also claims that the decline of writing and reading of literature is the fault of poor standars of reader. The speaker, however,totally refutes this idea. She claims that it is unfair to blame the audience because current writings are indeed more difficult for reader to understand. Even the readers, who read a lot in the past, would not read much today.

Johnnyli

Five_007 发表于 2014-6-25 22:23
TPO11 综合
Does the trend of less reading produce negative effects on public, general culture and th ...

改完了，加油！

e23lzh

Five_007 发表于 2014-6-24 18:26
TPO10 综合

Which is the main reason for the decline of sea otter? The reading contends that polluti ...

文章结构挺好，问题还是语法和拼写。不过就快考试了的话就不用纠结了，考试的时候尽可能注意，少写自己拿不准的句子和词组。

Five_007

Whether the subject of full-length portrait, owned by a member of Austen family is Jane Austen? The reading consists that Jane Austen must be
the subject, while the listening refutes that it is not true.

First, the passage presents that the Austen family commits the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen. However, the speaker think this reason is not reasonable. He proposes that the even though the portrait recognized as Jane Austen by her family, but the portrait came up after several years that the Jane Austen had died. So her family could not confirm that very well if that was Jane Austen.

Second, the author contends that the face in the portrait resembles the adult Jane Austen depicted on Cassandra's sketch, which presents that the subject is Jane Austen. Whereas, the professor doesn't agree. He states that Jane Austen has a big family so that many distant relatives may look  like her. And for example, one of her distant relative, Marry looks like her very much. So it couldn't tell us much.

Finally, the text contends that the author of this portrait may be Ozias Humphrey, who was active during the time that Jane Austen was still a teenager. This view, is totally refured by the speaker. The speaker tatess that it is not enough for just confirming the creater of the portrait by the style. The stamp, clinged to the portrait, was not saled by the Williams until the Jane Austen was 27. So if this is true, at the time this portrait was created, Jane Austen had been 27 years old, which also proves that the girl on the portrait is not Jane Austen.

Five_007

Johnnyli 发表于 2014-6-25 22:44
改完了，加油！

thx~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Five_007

e23lzh 发表于 2014-6-26 16:41
文章结构挺好，问题还是语法和拼写。不过就快考试了的话就不用纠结了，考试的时候尽可能注意，少写自己拿 ...

~~~~~~~~谢谢！

sweetyecho

6.25 错误修改好

Whether the subject of full-length portrait, owned by a member of Austen family is Jane Austen? The reading consists that Jane Austen must be the subject, while the listening refutes that it is not true.

First, the passage presents that the Austen family commits the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen. However, the speaker think this reason is not reasonable. He proposes that the （删） though the portrait recognized as Jane Austen by her family（though引导从句，你这里不是完整的句子，应改the portrait was recognized blabla）, but the portrait came up after several years that the Jane Austen had died. So her family could not confirm that very well if that was Jane Austen.

Second, the author contends that the face in the portrait resembles the adult Jane Austen depicted on Cassandra's sketch, which presents that the subject is Jane Austen. Whereas, the professor doesn't agree. He states that Jane Austen has a big family so that many distant relatives may look  like her. And for example, one of her distant relative, Marry looks like her very much. So it couldn't tell us much.

Finally, the text contends that the author of this portrait may be Ozias Humphrey, who was active during the time that Jane Austen was still a teenager. This view, is totally refured by the speaker. The speaker tatess（单词查不出来，是不是拼写有误？） that it is not enough for just confirming the creater of the portrait by the style. The stamp, clinged to the portrait, was not saled by the Williams until the Jane Austen was 27. So if this is true, at the time this portrait was created, Jane Austen had been （这句应该不需要用过去完成时吧）27 years old, which also proves that the girl on the portrait is not Jane Austen.

感觉听力内容略少了一点儿，但我跟你听的差不多，我也不知道应该加一些什么，真是摔。其实，总体来说，很好！