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do you agree or disagree at universities and colleges,sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
提纲：同意。
原因一：放松（工作学习太累）学校应提供财政支持保证活动的进行
原因二：锻炼能力合作之类帮助促进学业，应得到财政支持。
原因三：丰富生活和人生经验，也是大学的意义之一。所以应得到财政支持
Have you ever did some sports with your friends and felt  really relaxed and powerful after a hard day? Have you ever  participated in an activity which you were fond of and then learned a lot of meaningful skills like how to cooperate with other people? Have you ever met some successful people who had mutual interests with you from which you heard many splendid stories? When it comes to these questions, some people believe that what I mentioned above is not vital so sports and other activities are not necessary ,then university do not have to pay much on them. However, the others hold the opposite opinion . As far as I am concerned,sports and social activities are just as essential as classes and libraries and deserve equal financial support. The reason why we emphasis the importance of recreations is that by those we can not only relax ourselves but also learn a lot experience which could also do good to our study and future.
There is no denying that people nowadays undergo a great deal of pressure that comes from various directions, including work, school, and so forth. As for students, it is conceivable that they are hectic with study everyday. It seems like they can never finish their assignments and they frequently stay up until midnight. And all of that poses a great threaten to students’s heath physically and mentally. What is universally acknowledged is that health plays an important role in people’s life. And success is based on good health . Thus on no account can people ignore the importance of health. Taking exercise and social activities enable people to live a more healthy life. Accordingly university should provide all kinds of supports including financial supports.
In the second place, in modern society , the relationship among people is getting closer. Everyone must master the skill about how to work with other people which is also significant for study. And sports and social activities can not only benefit our health. Another advantage of them is that we can learn various skills,for instance, communicative skill and leadership skill which are beneficial for people’s exsistance. According to the data that a journal collected, people who are good at team sports or have the experience about group cooperation in university are easier to become a successful businesspeople and would be good at getting along with other people. So there is no doubt sports and social activities are good ways for students to gain skills and what is clear is that schools should provide chances for students.
In addition,the meaning of going to university and college is not just classes and books. What students should pay more attention is the quality of campus life,which includes memorable experience,friends with whom one can share innermost feeling or other funny things. Surprisingly, sports and social activities could offer them all. For example.i am a member of  environment protecting organization and there I could make friend with people from various fields which can not only expand my social circle but bring joy and happiness to people’s life as well. So these activities are necessary for students and it pays for school to support them.
Still, there is no one but know the meaning of studying hard. However , sports and social activities are also important as the same way. Not only can they make students live a more healthy and meaningful life but also give students chances to learn skills for future study and competition.

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