issue 81 求拍！

nsl2012

All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools.

       Requiring parents to volunteer time to their children’s schools benefits in many ways hence I fundamentally support the author’s claim. However, there are ciucumstances that has to be dealt with cautiously to avoid causing damage.

       In the first place, that parents spend volunteer time in their children’s school is really favourable for children, parents and schools in multiaspects. For children, simply knowing about the fact that their parents are volunteering in schools makes them feel under focus and loved, which would initially encourage children to study harder and better attitudes toward their parents. For parents, it is a good opportunity to learn more about their children. For instance, maybe some children who are really talkative at home become very quiet at school and they don’t tell their parents about. Only spending time can parents can find out the fact so to be aware of the confusion or problems that their kids are facing as to provide effective help correspondingly. Thus volunteering at schools enables parents a deeper knowledge about the behaviours and thoughts of their children. For schools, having parents volunteering help them save resources and it is also a good chance to know about how children behave at home, which can eventually promote better education.

       However, there are certain drawbacks under such recommendation while ignoring them will lead to untoward ends. Firstly, the requirements for parents to volunteer time to their children’s schools cannot be too compulsory. Some parents can be so busy sometimes that they really have no way sparing time for volunteering in a certain time. In this case, that schools set given time forcing parents to volunteer would cause damage both to parents and schools. Secondly, what kind of activities can parents participate in during their volunteer time should be regulated. It has to be avoided that parents play a too active role in classes so as to interrupt the normal teaching of classes. Teachers are trained professionally to provide effective education to students thus the major teaching tasks belong to teacher and parents cannot interfere their teaching. Thirdly, all the parents volunteering at school should  equally find themself a proper place as a parent. Showing off better wealth status or social status must be forbbiden to avoid bad influence on children.

       In sum, requiring parents to volunteer time to their children’s school is conducive to students, parents and schools. It is a triple win. But at the same time, there are also several ciucumstaces, including compulsory requirements, too much interference and comparison, if not handled properly would render the author’s recommendation counterproductive.

普渡哥

in the first place...


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这样的结构不是很好

nsl2012

普渡哥 发表于 2013-6-14 13:21
in the first place...

谢谢~~
怎样替换比较好啊？？求指导~~~