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dengsida

As known to all, a sound environment is very helpful to the health of residents, provid benefit to the development of business and attracts more travelers to come to visit.请问这句话是不是有问题？ 如有问题 请帮忙修改一下。 谢

[此贴子已经被作者于2004-11-24 11:45:40编辑过]

likui

看出来是三个动词的平行并列，

改一个，成provides

其他还可，稍微有点口语化。