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e23lzh

牛奶泡小猫 发表于 2014-4-9 23:34
弱弱问一句 楼主考试时独立写作能写多少字？我看到有人说550左右就能拿满分。。。我打字也不快，所以望楼主 ...

四百多吧

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大神，还在吗？ 能麻烦帮忙改作文吗
TPO1 Integrated writing
In the passage ,there is  an argument that offering a four-day week work,  will do good to both  the individual and the cooperation respectively.In
the lecture , however ,the  professor holds another point of view.
First, offering four-day week job may cost more. Since the company would invest more to the office space and more computers, this would of course cut down the profit of the company . In addition , if they hire new employees to accomplish the work ,there would be a sum of moneyputting into the hiring and training process, this is another aspect of cost  the company more . Further , if they hire new employees they must  pay for their medicine fees, this is the third  facets that costing the company more. These  all contradicts what claims in the passage that a four-day week work would decrease the cost  of the company and benefit the company a lot .
Secondly, a four-day week work don't necessary mean an increase in more employment . In the lecture ,the professor holds that ,in order to decrease the hiring cost ,the company may not want to hire more employees ,the reasons are already stated as before , and this will end up working overtime. And also ,the employer would increase  their expections , hoping that the present employee could do the  sameamout of time in the four-day week works. This would obviously increase the pressure of the employees. But in the passage , it maintains that ,a four-day week policy would increase the employment ,and make the employee feel at ease ,and improve their life quality.However, the lecture refutes both of the saying in the passage.
Finaly , offing a four-day week policy impede the career development  and wouldn't reduce the cost of the company . To start with , this policy also end up reducing the  ability of the workers ,since the less work time . and in a economic downturn , they might be first to losttheir jobs ,and there will be less promotion opportunities for them comparing to thier five-day counterparts . This is also completely contradicts what has claimed in the passage that  the employee will benefit from the policy and enjoy a high quality life.

Five_007

e23lzh 发表于 2014-3-21 23:20
2014.3.21 独立写作 A\D Teaching is a harder work in the past than today.

The current world is fast  ...

LZ, 行文非常流畅，语法扎实，外加闪光词汇，的确很nice。我经常作文写不出三点来，看了您的文章，表示稍显宽心，至少写两点是不会倒扣分的。。另外，有的时候用模版也会把自己的思路框死了，也显得不自然。28号考，但是觉得有希望。 会多来看看如何将简单的词用的地道 TPO去啦~ THX

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