阿伦艾弗森的作文

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O(∩_∩)O~很感谢你帮我批改的作文，好细心，好认真。我有可能有改的不好的地方，请多多包涵。(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……
Cars are used by people everyday. In different situations,  cars have different usages, and they do change our ways of life. The past days(我查了一下，这样单独无介词作状语的情况很少), people should（用would need/had to 会不会更好了，表达一种“不得不”，而不是“应该”） walk for a long time to study and work; however, nowadays cars shorten these（the表特指上面提到的time或者用times） time and help us earn more time. Whereas these great effects can not compared with ways（这个表达意思上稍微有些不准确，用benefits/convenience等词会不会更好呢） airplane bringing for us.



Firstly, airplanes make our life more efficient. Most of people have a same dream that someday they will travel around the world. The dream, however, can not be achieved by cars because car will take us tenth of time more than airplane and some ways(roads/highways/dirt road泥土路) which are built for cars will not help us to reach our destination directly. Airplane, yet, takes us just 3 hours from BeiJing to Hongkong and 13 hours from China to America. The shortened time saved by airplane can gives us more time（time 给 time，逻辑上有些别扭） to appreciate famous-of interest（我很孤陋寡闻的，这个用法我没有见过，先提出来吧）. Moreover, presidents of countries have never taken cars to another country to have conversations（international conference）. They all take airplane because it is the only way for them to save time which can be put into other tough problems of countries.



Secondly, connecting the relationship into a deep level（我不清楚这种用法是否合理，因为见用develop的比较多）, airplanes can help us meet our families who live far away from us. Children now like to work in great cities or even to go abroad that sometimes really have这里可能要用单数 long distance from the placed where their parents live. Cars can not assist us to reach Los Angeles from ShanXi province several times of a year这个意思表达有点儿问题，complete the trips/travel between A and S back-and-forth more than X times within one year.. The relationship(用具体的family bonds/friendships会更好) will be drifted apart（用法错了，人或事物分开，主动语态。意思想表达的是淡了吧，emotional distance or alienation of affection） if we do not have airplanes. Only by taking airplane, can we meet our families who live in other cities more frequently. During this way, families can communicate closely and also the relationship will be deepened under this situation.（可以用 share the happiness and sadness of each other, the bonds among the family members will be intensified）



Thirdly, airplanes are social's essential products(用 tools 、vehicles、stuff都可以的) which achieve human's dream to fly. Many mysterious fairy tales are all about something related to the air. Our imagination of what the air looks like(这like用的用问题，is like 表怎么样) stimulates us to make a machine which can carry us into air. Now, the imagine is no longer the imagine（这是个动词）delusion,daydream,fantasy,hope in vain but the reality. By taking airplane, people can submerge（淹没的意思不是很好吧，用 embrace吧） in the blue sky and feel the clouds which surround us. Airplane makes a breakthrough for us and the efforts airplane have（不能说飞机多努力） are really greater than those of cars.



In conclusion, benefits brought by airplane can provide people a more efficiency life as well as a deep relationship. Also, this big breakthrough contained our dream and achieves our goal.
嗯，文章的结构、条例很清晰，相应的例证都能足够证明给出的论点。
还有些时态、单复数的问题。
语言表达的准确度，句式、用词多样性使我们不懈追求的目标。
一起加油啦~~~~~~~

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The reading and the lecture both discuss the issue of declination of literature readers. The reading passage provides three unfortunate effects for the reading public意思不对，是针对三个不同的方面; meanwhile, the professor gives the contrary evidences to this assertion.



It is mentioned in the passage that literature gives intellectual stimulation which can exercise people's imagination. The professor, however, declares that books such as science, history or political fairs are also literature我们听得不一样，他们不是文学，是other form. These books have high quality than novels没有比较，只是说也是high quality and can also stimulate the imagination of people.



The next view made by reading is that the thing people now read instead of literature is less valuable than reading. But the professor demurs the idea. According to him, with the change of culture, many different ways can express culture directly than没有比较级more，就不能用than read literature now. Music,and movies are not a waste of time for people and they do not cause culture decline.



Finally, to encounter the discussion made by reading that some publishers and readers have the responsibility of for reading audiences' decline, the professor argues that these are not responsiblity of readers, but authors' fault. They now write something which is difficult to understand can not be compared with the literature which （were、was）written in the past.
我们听到的内容歧义出现在第一段，但我们有各自组织段落、提取信息的不同。
共勉了，大家多看看别人的就好了。
(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……
加油了~~~~~~~~

阿伦艾弗森

Polite is a thing which can help people develop a intimidated relationship and increase human’s morality. There remains no reason for us to be impolite to another person. Here are my reasons.



First of all, impolite will destroy the good relationship between each other, especially in friends. Though good friends are closed to each other, their impolite attitude is the chronic poison which can finally end their emotion. For instance, once I had a friend named Jack who was brilliant in his study and was really honorable and responsible. However, he had a bad temper and always be impolite to other people including his friends. At first, we just treated his attitude as joke and did not care about it. But after some weeks, we could not tolerate his impolite because we felt offended and finally our relationship ended up. Had he not be impolite to us, we would not have broken our relationship.



Secondly, chances might be lost because of being impolite. First view is important for us when we have a job interview. Companies would not hire the one who is rude and offensive. Also, a boss will not promote a person who has bad manners even though his work ability is excellent. So chances would be missed up such as my aunt is a normal worker who just know how to do the same job everyday. Another her workmate was really innovative and gave much ideas about their work. Whereas the boss chose my aunt to be the manager because her workmate was always impolite to others. Their boss said, people who can not control themselves can not know how to manage other either.



In conclusion, impolite has no beneficial side for us. It can not only destroy people’s relationship but also ruin our chances to be promoted.  

阿伦艾弗森

The reading and the lecture both discusses the issue of endangered Torreya taxifoha. The reading passage provides three reasons that could be useful for increase the population of Torreya; meanwhile, the professor thinks none of the reasons provided by reading is satisfy solution.



It is mentioned in the passage that Torreya can be reestablished in the same location. The professor, however, declares that this way is not successful because the coolest area has no micro climate and might be influenced by climate. Also, wet land are drained and become drier because of global warming. So it may not be a good condition for Torreya.



The next view made by reading is that Torreya can be moved into a totally different place. But the professor demurs the ideas. She said there once had a example that when scientists moved the trees into a new environment, they spread quickly and killed the trees which were endangered in that location. The bad outcome could not be pridected.



Finally, to encounter the discussion made by reading that Torreya can be growed in research centers, the professor argues that trees need to be planted in captain centers which can contain relatively large population and diverse genes. However, research centers have no capability and are not capable for Torreya to survive and defend disease in a long term.