阿伦艾弗森的作文

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sorry, I am late

Considering which quality is the most important for those people who are successful, many of us always think the communication skill is the most important. However, I think there remain other characters that are also important such as the spirit of never giving up, the aim to be innovative and hard-working.
(建议用other than的短语来表示除什么外的什么可能更好)

Firstly, a person who wants to stand at the highest place (position/status) in his career must know that they should not give up when they meet some problems. (If you focus on one single aim at a time and reach it within the pre-determined time, )Focusing on one aim and then achieve it,we can benefit from what we do and even contribute to whole society. (what you learn and know has provided benefits to your working , as well as our society.)Thomas edison, as one of the most famous scientists in the U.S, did more than thousands of times in his light experiments and almost use everything for filament. Everyone at that time thought he would not succeed. Whereas his never giving up attitude(his persisting) finally helped him to find most suitable filament and labeled him as a successful man.

Secondly, innovated products can always attract our eye balls.(有点唐突) It is important for successful men to develop innovative thinking. Not only can they gain profit by this way, but also they can change our life style and lead our life more convenient.（漂亮的倒装）Apple company, which defines our century' way of communicate,（有点别扭，用to好一点） exceeded other companies because of its creative innovations. （这个结论怎么得出来的奥，太抽象了）The company turned the uncomfortable keyboard into flat screen and mobile phones' perfect appearances defeat those of most of other cellphones.



Thirdly, once a reporter asked the famous basketball play （player）Kobe Bryant how can he be so successful. However, Kobe asked the reporter:"do you know what's the weather like in 4 a.m of Los Angeles". Success does not happen by accident. (名言，赞)Only by exercise and hard-working, can we achieve amazing accomplishment. A person who is lazy and doesn't want to pay his energy in（to）his work can not succeed at all. It is important for us to take more time into work in order to be successful.（换well done)

In conclusion, from the examples I mentioned above, （Besides ……）insisting, innovating, and diligence are also important for a man to achieve success.

Tpo8

The reading passage mainly provides us with three reasons that the details of the memoir of Chevalier de Seingalt are not all accurate. 赞！The professor deals with the same issue. However, she thinks that these claims provided by Chevalier are reliable.

Firstly, the reading discusses that if Chevalier was really rich, he would have not borrowed money from other merchants. In contrast, the professor claims that he borrowed money doesn't mean that he was poor at that time. We all know that he spent huge money in parties and gamblings. Though he was rich, it would take him few days to covert access to cash and before that, he should borrow money. （原来我把covert access to cash听错了）



Secondly, the reading makes the point that critics think it is impossible for him to remember every details of the conversation he made with others. Whereas the professor demonstrates that he took notes every night after he had conversation with famous person and he always took out those notes to read them.



Thirdly, the reading states that he might bribe the jailers but not (don’t )use metal to escape from prison. The professor casts doubts that other prisoners knew even more powerful politically well-connected friends but the jailers were not bribed by them. In addition, soon after he escaped from prison, the ceiling of prison was repaired.(最后一点可以说明一下是document证实的)

abbyseven

partner啊 我今天先只写 独立了 ，思维有点乱今天晚上，我先睡了哈， 明晚补好 综合 ，谢谢你了哦

阿伦艾弗森

The reading passage mainly provides us with three benefit about using hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine. The professor deals with the same issue. However, she thinks that hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not the solution for the energy problem.



Firstly, the reading discusses that hydrogen seems like an infinite sources because it can be depleted from common sources. In contrast, the professor claims that though hydrogen remains in many present common sources, it can not be usable easily. The technique we should need for detract the pure liquid is difficult. Sometimes they need to use the water which the temperature of it must below minus two hundred and fifty. So using hydrogen is not practical.



Secondly, the reading makes the point that instead of oil fuel, hydrogen engine can have less pollution released to the air. Whereas the professor demonstrates that although pure hydrogen is not a pollution for environment, the technique which is used to produce the hydrogen will need much energy through burning coal and oil. These, however, will be a problem for pollution.



Thirdly, the reading states that fuel-cell engine will be a less money used technique for people. The professor casts doubts that the fuel-cell engine will use some materials which are really expensive. The companies which use cheaper materials for this technique can not successful in this engine.

abbyseven

The readingpassage mainly provides us with three benefit(benefits我觉得应该是 可数名词) about using hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine. Theprofessor deals with the same issue. However, she thinks that hydrogen-basedfuel-cell engine is not the solution for the energy problem.（貌似文章和lecture里面都没有提到 energy problem， 是不是可以只说教授反驳了 关于 hydrogen 的3个优点 ） 我第一次写综合 真心不是很懂构造啊~ 错了的话你要原谅我


Firstly, the reading discusses thathydrogen seems like an infinite sources because it can be depleted from common sources（daily consumption ）. In contrast, the professor claims that though hydrogenremains in many present common sources, it cannot be usable easily. Thetechnique we should need for detract （extracting）the pure liquid is difficult. Sometimes they need to usethe water which the temperature of it must below minus two hundred and fifty.So using hydrogen is not practical. 其实我觉得你的思路蛮清晰 蛮有逻辑的



Secondly, the reading makes the pointthat instead of oil fuel, hydrogen engine can have less pollution released tothe air. Whereas the professor demonstrates that although pure hydrogen is not a pollution（a kind of pollution） for environment, the technique which is used to producethe hydrogen will need much（more） energy through burning coal and oil. These, however, willbe a problem for pollution. （will make pollution worst） 好像这样更有对比的那种感觉



Thirdly, the reading states thatfuel-cell engine will be a less money used technique for people. The professorcasts doubts that the fuel-cell engine will use some materials which are reallyexpensive. The companies which use cheaper materials for this technique can notsuccessful in this engine.

然后可以写个结尾 哈哈~ 我觉得你的文章比我的写的好 有逻辑很多， 可能是我听力也没有听好吧，嘿嘿~ 加油哈

阿伦艾弗森

Facing the difficult job condition, many parents nowadays consider that it may be a good way for their children to do the same jobs with them in order to find a good job. Whereas I hold a totally different opinion. Here are my reasons.



Firstly, if the children do the same jobs with their parents, parents may use their way of thinking to teach their children so that their children are lack of creativity. Parents might think that they have plenty of experience which is really useful for their children. However, time is going and some of the same-liked experience may be overtimed and even erroneous. The way which parents teach or show to their children may limit children' innovation and even are harmful them. They think their valuable experience may be a open door which can lead luminated way for their children but this door may close the the road to truth which children can find out by themselves if they choose jobs they like but not the parents'



Secondly, the condition which I showed in paragraph one may have another bad effect for children who choose the same children with their parents. Using their own experience to teach their children is not a absolutely bad thing at all. Some parents do have precious knowledge which should be taught to their children. However, if children use their parents' experience to do a good job and never meet some problems and disappointment, what will happen in their future. The increasing rate of suicide year by year shows that some young adults can not face for setbacks nowadays. They might brilliant in their school life because of their parents' experience but not  in their work time. Different people will meet different, good experience can not fix everything. Children should choose the career which they really like and take the responsibility. If the work children choose is not their real like but just what their parents do, they may have a bad mood and can not face any challenges.



Thirdly, different jobs can bring various interesting topics in family. After a whole day's exhausting work, everyone wants to have a relief time at home. Imaging, the conversations around dinner table are just: how is your patients going? How many operations you did today? I met a new disease which do know how to deal with?  Will you really happy to have your dinner? Talking about diverse ranging of matters, such as from history to mathematics, we can really have a relaxed time. Each one has a chance to listening and speaking and a good atmosphere is formed.



In conclusion, although there are some benefits we can get from our parents if we choose the same jobs as they do, I still think choosing careers we really like can help us have a innovative thinking, a self-confidence to facing challenges and a good atmosphere in our families.

lillian馨

Facing the difficult job condition, many parents nowadays consider that it may be a good way for their children to do the same jobs with them in order to find a good job. Whereas I hold a totally different opinion. Here are my reasons.



Firstly, if the children do the same jobs with their parents, parents may use their way of thinking to teach their children so that their children are lack of creativity. Parents might think that they have plenty of experience which is really useful for their children. However, time is going and some of the same-liked experience may be overtimed (我查了一下overtimed没有过时的意思啊，可以用outdated、obsolete、out of fashion) and even erroneous. The way which parents teach or show to their children may limit children' innovation and even are （主语是前面的the way,这里谓语动词错误） harmful （笔误吧，少了to）them. They think their valuable experience may be a open door which can lead luminated way for their children but this door may close the the road to truth which children can find out by themselves if they choose jobs they like but not（而不是的表达可以用rather than） the parents'（我觉得最后这一句和前面的说理是相同的效果，不妨把这里换成实实在在的例子就好了）



Secondly, the condition which I showed in paragraph one may have another bad effect for children who choose the same children (work) with their parents. Using their own experience to teach their children is not a absolutely bad thing at all. Some parents do have precious knowledge which should be taught to their children. (我觉得这几句话本身有点相互矛盾。我用中文描述变一下看这样你觉得怎样：即使父母的经验在某些情况下不会像第一段的描述中对孩子的创新思维造成限制，那么也会有另外一个bad effect, 那就是什么什么。。) However, if children use their parents' experience to do a good job and never meet （encounter、suffer from）some problems and disappointment, what will happen in their future. The increasing rate of suicide year by year shows that some young adults can not face for（for应该不用的） setbacks nowadays. They might （少了be）brilliant in their school life because of their parents' experience but not in their work time. Different people will meet different(这里应该少了个词), good experience can not fix everything. Children should choose the career which they really like and take the responsibility. If the work children choose is not their real like （what they really love）but just what their parents do, they may have a bad mood and can not face any challenges.



Thirdly, different jobs can bring various interesting topics in family. After a whole day's exhausting work, everyone wants to have a relief time at home. Imaging, the conversations around dinner table are just: how is(are) your patients going? How many operations you did(did you perform) today? I met a new disease which do(I do not) know how to deal with? Will you (少了be) really happy to have your dinner? Talking about diverse ranging of matters, such as from history to mathematics, we can really have a relaxed time. Each one has a chance to listening and speaking (listen and speak ) and a good atmosphere is formed.



In conclusion, although there are some benefits we can get from our parents if we choose the same jobs as they do, I still think choosing careers we really like can help us have an innovative thinking, a self-confidence to facing(face前面用了几次了，可以换换) challenges and a good atmosphere in our families.

阿伦艾弗森

The reading and the lecture both discuss the issue of declination of sea otters. The reading passage provides three reasons that declination may be caused by pollution; meanwhile, the professor gives evidence contrary to this assertion.



It is mentioned in the passage that sources of industrial chemical pollution endangered the number of sea otters. The professor, however, declares that no one find that dead otter washing up on the beach. The consistent decline of sea otter verify the predator hypothesis.



The nest view made by reading is that other animals including predators of sea otters were declining too. But the professor demurs this idea. According to him, orcas are also declined by human's hunting which changes their way to survive. They hunt small animals because these small are available. It leads cause the decline of sea lions, sea otters and so on so forth.



Finally, to encounter the discussion made by reading that uneven pattern of otters' decline are caused by pollution. The professor argues that the locations  which are shallow and rocky are not access to large animals. So in these regions, the number of otters is stable. However, in other locations which are available for large predators, the number of otters are declined.



In conclusion, the reading strongly believes that the decline of otters are made by pollution; however, the professor refutes these evidences and demonstrates his own proofs of this very fact.

lillian馨

The reading and the lecture both discuss the issue of declination of sea otters. The reading passage provides three reasons that declination may be caused by pollution; meanwhile, the professor gives evidence contrary to this assertion（这里我觉得与其说是contrary不如直接说出来lecture的观点predation 造成的）.



It is mentioned in the passage that sources of industrial chemical pollution endangered the number of sea otters. The professor, however, declares that no one find(found)that dead otter washing up on the beach（the appearance of dead otters）. The consistent decline of sea otter verify(verifies) the predator hypothesis.



The nest(next) view made by reading is that other animals including predators of sea otters were declining too(阅读中并没有说otter的predator数量在降低). But the professor demurs this idea（作者不反对other animal的数量在减少这个观点，反对的是环境污染引起other animal的减少，提出是orcas导致减少）. According to him, orcas are also declined by human's hunting which changes their way to survive.（这个观点好像听到不是很到位，与speaker的不一致） They hunt small animals because these small are available. It leads cause the decline of sea lions, sea otters and so on so forth.



Finally, to encounter (counter )the discussion made by reading that uneven pattern of otters' decline are （is）caused by pollution. The professor argues that the locations which are shallow and rocky are not access to large animals. So in these regions, the number of otters is stable. However, in other locations which are available for large predators, the number of otters are declined(不应用被动形式 ，而且主谓一致应该用单数形式).



In conclusion, the reading strongly believes that the decline of otters are（decline是主语，用is） made by pollution; however, the professor refutes these evidences and demonstrates his own proofs of this very fact.

阿伦艾弗森

Cars are used by people everyday. In different situations,  cars have different usages, and they do change our ways of life. The past day, people should walk for a long time to study and work; however, nowadays cars shorten these time and help us earn more time. Whereas these great effect can not compared with ways airplane bringing for us.



Firstly, airplanes make our life more efficient. Most of people have a same dream that someday they will travel around the world. The dream, however, can not achieve by cars because car will take us tenth of time more than airplane and some ways which build for cars will not help us to reach our destination directly. Airplane, yet, takes us just 3 hours from BeiJing to Hongkong and 13 hours from China to America. The shortened time saved by airplane can gives us more time to appreciate famous-of interest. Moreover, presidents of countries have never taken cars to another country to have conversations. They all take airplane because it is the only way for them to save time which can be put into other tough problems of countries.



Secondly, connecting the relationship into a deep level, airplanes can help us meet our families who live far away from us. Children now like to work in great cities or even to go abroad that sometimes really have long distance from the placed where their parents live. Cars can not assist us to reach Los Angeles from ShanXi province several times of a year. The relationship will be drifted apart if we do not have airplanes. Only by taking airplane, can we meet our families who live in other cities more frequently. During this way, families can communicate closely and also the relationship will be deepened under this situation.



Thirdly, airplanes are social's essential products which achieve human's dream to fly. Many mysterious fairy tales are all about something related to the air. Our imagination of what the air likes stimulates us to make a machine which can carry us into air. Now, the imagine is no longer the imagine but the reality. By taking airplane, people can submerge in the blue sky and feel the clouds which surround us. Airplane makes a breakthrough for us and the efforts airplane have are really greater than those of cars.



In conclusion, benefits brought by airplane can provide people a more efficiency life as well as a deep relationship. Also, this big breakthrough contained our dream and achieve our goal.

阿伦艾弗森

The reading and the lecture both discuss the issue of declination of literature readers. The reading passage provides three unfortunate effects for the reading public; meanwhile, the professor gives the contrary evidence to this assertion.



It is mentioned in the passage that literature gives intellectual stimulation which can exercise people's imagination. The professor, however, declares that books such as science, history or political fairs are also literature. These books have high quality than novels and can also stimulate the imagination of people.



The next view made by reading is that the thing people now read instead of literature is less valuable than reading. But the professor demurs the idea. According to him, with the change of culture, many different ways can express culture directly than read literature now. Music, movies are not a waste of time for people and they do not cause culture decline.



Finally, to encounter the discussion made by reading that some publishers and readers have the responsibility of reading audiences' decline, the professor argues that these are not responsible for readers, but authors' fault. They now write something which is difficult to understand can not be compared with the literature which wrote in the past.