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182 Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is a controversy recently about whether the close relationship between people and their pets is good. Some people believe that this relationship should not be advocated because isolate people from their families and friends. On the contrary, others deem that this special relationship represent the nature ofhuman beings and is favored in the modern society. As far as I am concerned, I strongly support the latter for the following reasons.

To begin with, the attachment to pets brings people the sense of reliability and safety in the highly competitive society. Accompanied with the urban development is the increasing distance among individuals, which makes a person always feel lonely and unsafe. Some people even spout such words, as "there are no perpetual friends but perpetual interests ". Fortunately, the pets are loyal and dependable friends. For example, it is not uncommon that a friend of yesterday will become an enemy tomorrow, but a dog, a common pet in North America will never betray its master.  As a result, a lot of families regard dogs as their family members

Next, many pets have special competencies to help people live more convenient and safer. These pets work as the closest partners of human beings. For example, dogs can help policemen find out the hidden drugs, cats protect the grains from the mice, and even in some tribes, snakes can take care babies when the farmers are working in the fields. That is another reason why many people would rather look their pets as their family members.

Admittedly, the over close relationship between pets and human beings is not without disadvantages such as somediseases caused by animals affecting humans. However, the merits of this close relationship carry more weight than its drawbacks.

To sum up, it is easy to draw the conclusion that a close relationship is worthwhile in our modern society. In fact, not only do I prefer this special relationship, but also advocate that develop the positive relationship between human beings and any natural animals.

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以下是引用hncsxj在2004-11-15 10:03:00的发言：
182 Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is a controversy recently about whether the close relationship between people and their pets is good. Some people believe that this relationship should not be advocated because^it isolate people from their families and friends. On the contrary, others deem that this special relationship represent the nature of human beings and is favored in the modern society. As far as I am concerned, I strongly support the latter for the following reasons.

To begin with, the attachment to pets brings people the sense of reliability and safety in the highly competitive society.(这个理由比较搞) Accompanied with the urban development is the increasing distance among individuals, which makes a person always feel lonely and unsafe. Some people even spout such words, as "there are no perpetual friends but perpetual interests ". Fortunately, the pets are loyal and dependable friends. For example, it is not uncommon（好句！双重否定都用上了！） that a friend of yesterday will become an enemy tomorrow（深有感触）, but a dog, a common pet in North America will never betray its master.  As a result, a lot of families regard dogs as their family members

Next, many pets have special competencies to help people live more convenient and safer. These pets work as the closest partners of human beings. For example, dogs can help policemen find out the hidden drugs, cats protect the grains from the mice, and even in some tribes, snakes can take care babies when the farmers are working in the fields. That is another reason why many people would rather look their pets as their family members.

Admittedly, the over close relationship between pets and human beings is not without disadvantages such as some diseases caused by animals affecting humans. However, the merits of this close relationship carry more weight than its drawbacks.

To sum up, it is easy to draw the conclusion that a close relationship is worthwhile in our modern society. In fact, not only do I prefer this special relationship, but also advocate that develop the positive relationship between human beings and any natural animals.

看来已经炉火纯青了！驾驭句子很强啊，双重否定都用了好几个，用的好！汗！

言简意赅还这么多字~实在是好！！ETS要是不给5.5-6分非去跟他理论不可！

加油！祝GG明天杀出一个好成绩！

friend_friend

以下是引用hncsxj在2004-11-15 10:03:00的发言：
182 Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is a controversy recently about whether the close relationship between people and their pets is good. Some people believe that this relationship should not be advocated because isolate people from their families and friends. On the contrary, others deem that this special relationship represent the nature ofhuman beings and is favored in the modern society. As far as I am concerned, I strongly support the latter for the following reasons.

To begin with, the attachment to pets brings people the sense of reliability and safety in the highly competitive society. Accompanied with the urban development is the increasing distance among individuals, which makes a person always feel lonely and unsafe. Some people even spout such words, as "there are no perpetual friends but perpetual interests ". Fortunately, the (don't need "the" here) pets are loyal and dependable friends. For example, it is not uncommon that a friend of yesterday will become an enemy tomorrow, but a dog, a common pet in North America will never betray its master.  As a result, a lot of families regard dogs as their family members

Next, many pets have special competencies to help people live more convenient and safer. These pets work as the closest partners of human beings. For example, dogs can help policemen find out the hidden drugs, cats protect the grains from the (don't need it) mice, and even in some tribes, snakes can take care of babies when the farmers are working in the fields. That is another reason why many people would rather look (treate) their pets as their family members.

Admittedly, the over close relationship between pets and human beings is not without disadvantages such as somediseases caused by animals affecting humans. However, the merits of this close relationship carry more weight than its drawbacks.

To sum up, it is easy to draw the conclusion that a close relationship is worthwhile in our modern society. In fact, not only do I prefer this special relationship, but also advocate that develop the positive relationship between human beings and any natural animals.

文章写得是不错的,结构完整,思路清晰.虽然模板痕迹明显,但是对付TWE不是什么问题.需要注意的是一些明显的语法错误,此类错误多了,还是蛮影响分数的.文章中有语法错误的地方我用红色标出,特意不改希望你自己看看以加强印象.祝你后天考试好运