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guoliwei

twe 009 Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in?

The issue of whether to live in a small town or live in a big city is a controversial one. Facing this question, different people will present different answers due to respective experiences and standpoints. Some claim that they like to live in a big city because they could enjoy more convenience there. Others, on the contrary, argue that living small towns is more preferable. As far as I am concerned, I would rather agree with the former than the latter. The reasons are listed as follows.

To begin with, a big city could provide people with more job opportunities. Compared to small towns, cities are more economically developed. In a big city, there are millions of companies and factories which create a large number of job vacancies.  A person, no matter what skills he owns, could easily find a job that suits him and earn enough money to support his family. However, in a countryside, where there are only one or two small factories, it is relatively difficult for people to get a satisfied job and their talents would be greatly limited.

Next, children could receive a better education in cities. In general, big cities are education centers which afford complete education systems ranging from kindergartens to universities. School teachers, who are well educated and have abundant experiences, could teach students a lot of useful knowledge. With such knowledge, students will gain enough confidence and be prepared for their future work. Moreover, there are many modern sports facilities such as spacious playground in cities’ schools. By playing sports games, students could not only keep physical fitness but foster their team spirits as well.

In addition, another advantage of living in cities is the convenience. Large shopping malls, hospitals, cinemas and restaurant could be found everywhere in a city. Such facilities bring much convenience to residents. For instance, people could buy daily necessities at their convenient time at a lower price, for there is always a 24-hour supermarket established near their communities. However, such convenience could not be easily gained if people choose to live in small towns.

Of course, it is obvious that living in small towns also has a couple of advantages, such as the fresh air and the gentle pace of living. But if all the factors are contemplated together, the advantages of living in big cities carry more weight than those of living in smalls towns. For the reasons which have been discussed above, it is safe for me to draw the conclusion that living in big cities is more preferable than living in small towns.

pengstone

以下是引用guoliwei在2004-11-13 19:01:00的发言：

To begin with, a big city could provide people with more job opportunities. Compared to （compared to 和compared with　还是有区别的，这里要用后者，MM最好查查字典）small towns, cities are more economically developed. In a big city, there are millions of companies and factories which create a large number of job vacancies.  A person, no matter what skills he owns, could easily find a job that suits him and earn enough money to support his family. However, in a countryside, where there are only one or two small factories, it is relatively difficult for people to get a satisfied job and their talents would be greatly limited.

MM写得越来越好了。

guoliwei

呵呵，真的要非常非常感谢pengstone GG，一直以来都给了我很大的帮助和鼓舞，不知道怎么说才可以表达内心的感激！希望我可以考个好些的成绩，回报大家的帮助．

再次谢谢ＧＧ！还有祝你申请好运！

hncsxj

以下是引用guoliwei在2004-11-13 19:01:00的发言：

twe 009 Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in?

The issue of whether to live in a small town or live in a big city is a more and more controversial onenowadays. Facing this question, different people will present different various answers due to respective experiences and standpoints. Some claim that they like to live in a big city because they could enjoy more convenience there. Others, on the contrary, argue that living small towns is more preferable. As far as I am concerned, I would rather agree with the former than the latter. The reasons are listed as follows.

To begin with, a big city could provide people with more job opportunities. Compared to small towns, Economy of big cities are is  more economically developed prosperous compared to that of small towns. For example, in a big city, there are millions of companies and factories which create a large number countless of job vacancies.  Therefore, a person, no matter what skills he owns, could easily find a job that suits him and earn enough money to support his family. However, in a countryside, where there are only one or two small factories, it is relatively difficult for people to get a satisfied job and their talents would be greatly limited.

Next, children could receive a better education in big cities. In general, big cities are education centers which afford complete education systems ranging from kindergartens to universities. School teachers, who are well educated and have abundant experiences, could can teach students a lot of useful knowledge. With such knowledge, students will gain enough competencies confidence and be prepared for their future work. Moreover, there are many modern sports facilities such as spacious playground in cities’ schools. By playing sports games, students could not only keep physical fitness but foster their team spirits as well. 和主体句无关

In addition, another advantage of living in cities is the convenience. Large shopping malls, hospitals, cinemas and restaurants could be found everywhere in a city. Such facilities bring much convenience to residents. For instance, people could buy daily necessities at their convenient time at a lower price, for there is always a 24-hour supermarket established near their communities. However, such convenience could not be easily gained if people choose to live in small towns.

Of course, it is obvious that living in small towns also has a couple of advantages, such as the fresh air and the gentle pace of living. But if all the factors are contemplated together, the advantages of living in big cities carry more weight than those of living in smalls towns. For the reasons which have been discussed above, it is safe for me to draw the conclusion that living in big cities is more preferable than living in small towns.

guoliwei

非常感谢hncsxj，你的修改使文章读起来更通顺，上下句的联系也比原来紧密多了，而且很多词语你确实运用很地道。学习中～

再次感谢！另祝你考个好成绩，别忘了ＴＷＥ拿６分回来