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光说不练不行，现在来看看牛奶的这篇文章。
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The friend that you can have fun with is more important than friend that you can get help with. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
第一段开头，表明观点：Friends make our life interesting and wonderful. Life would be pretty lonely without them around. Friends are not just for socializing and having fun. Most importantly, they are always there for you when you need help. Personally, I value the friends that I can get help from more than the friends that I can have fun with. （第一段，阅卷人找的就是这句话。）
第二段，reason+detail+example： To begin with, friends will come and go in our life; having helpful friends means having people I can count on when I had bitterness and disappointment in my life.（理由1）They are there to listen to me and give me help and advice. It is hard to imagine what would happen without their kindness help.（detail1）For example, （开始举例）six months ago me and my husband of almost 2 years ended our marriage because of his betray. It was so miserable and I tired to commit a suicide in the bathroom. But my friends found me finally and took me to the hospital. They looked after me and kept comforting me and cheer me up. Now, I have already fully recovered from it. I feel very appreciate for their help and realize that having friends who is willing to help is really important, because when you feel like it is the end of the world, and have no one to go to, your friend will always be there for you.（呼应一下这段的首句，提醒阅卷老师你的例子没有跑偏）
第二段，Reason+detail，这段没写example，但是在detail里面加了一个对比： In addition, helpful friends let you know what the true friendship is, how to be friendly to other people, and how to solve our daily problems, etc.(理由2) People always say that tell me who your friends are and I'll tell you who you are. Thus, it is of utmost importance to carefully choose your friends, for they will have great influence on our life. Surround yourself with helpful friends who are models of something instead of experts of nothing, for they are capable of contributing to a solution of your problem from their own experiences. On the contrary, if you surround yourself with lots of friends that you could only have fun with, you can barely learn useful things from them.
第四段，回到Reason+detail+example： Finally, a helpful friend could also bring us lots of happy time and make our life beautiful.（理由3）Life without them is just like flowers without sunshine.（detail）For example, a helpful friend is generally able to work out a wonderful plan for traveling or doing other interesting things. Most of my friends and I are keen on traveling and we went to Korea last year. It was really fun to stay with them; they arranged almost everything from hotel to cars. We went to lots to tourist sites and tried different kinds of delicious Korean food. I never remain suspicious that I can have fun with them as well.(呼应理由3，顺便提醒老师，例子没写偏)
第五段 再次表态： To sum up, the factors that have been discussed above lead me to believe that the friend that you can get help from is more important than the friend that you can have fun with. As an old saying goes, a friend in need is a friend indeed. |
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