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perfectends

The reading passage explores the issue which genetic trees will be much beneficial.(同义替换,good) In the lecture, however, their professor contradicts this idea. There are three reasons in the following parts.


First of all, the professor said that the resistant ability does not mean the trees can survival. Because the non-genetic trees are diverseto (too) .(diverse这一点我没听到,你听力也很好啊)And the genetic trees can’t suit for all the changes like pests and weathers.(细节听出来了,good)This directly refutes the reading passage which states that(巧妙通过从句写明文章与听力文章关系) genetic trees are to be harder than nature trees. (恩, 匆忙中听的point确实抓住的不是最关键的,但也听出来不少可以反驳的细节.)


Furthermore, there are little economic profits by planting this kind of (建议去掉,有点多余) genetic trees. Again this disagrees with what is pointed out in the reading material that the genetic trees are promise to boring more benefits. For example, if you plant the genetic seeds, you cannot collect the seeds after they are mature. The fact is you have to by the same seeds from the company every time and absolutely spend a lot of money.(例子部分,所对应的听力原文的point不是在于不能收种子,而是你每次种都要付费…)


Finally, the genetic trees will bring serious damage to the wild trees. This differs from the idea in the reading text that the use of genetically modified trees can prevent overexploitation of wild trees. On the contrary, due to the aggressively growth(8错,pharaphrase了) of the genetic trees among nature trees, this will completely ran out of(8错,pharaphrase了) the limit resources, including water, soil and shine. Consequently, the nature trees will be extinct.





你的听力也不错啊. 可能是你状态不好吧,感觉很多细节都抓住了但是主旨句稍微差一点就听到位了. 另外,你的paraphrase和文章结构,句式,都不错学习了. 拼写错误非常少,应该不会影响分数,像你学习.
不好意思，你跟我打招呼这一拖，我开始还记得，昨天就忘了，应该昨天这时候批的。。。祝你的成绩理想~

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