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Stegosaurus

Some intensive English programs in the United States offer a foreign student the option of living with an American family while he or she is studying abroad. Many students feel that such a home-stay program is a valuable part of their total learning experience. However, others may feel that such a program offers little value. In a short essay, discuss one or two advantages of living with an American family and then state one or two disadvantages. Tell whether you are in favor of or opposed to the idea of home-stay. Give examples to support your opinion.




Nowadays, many students go to the United States to practice their English as well as experience the local culture by attending a home-stay program. While some people argue that the program has little value for students, I believe students can benefit a lot from the program.

First, living with an American family can help students experience the native culture better. It is because living with an American family, students can attend many local activities and celebration events. For example, some students may go to churches with their American family and the students can also celebrate Christmas and Thanksgiving with their American family. By attending these events, they can surely understand American culture better. One of my friends once attended a home-stay program for a year and he did a lot of things with his American family. When he came back, he told me that American culture was so different from what he thought previously. In this case, attending a home-stay program helped him understand native culture.

In addition, it will be safer and more comfortable for us if we live with an American family when we study abroad. Sometimes we would hear some horrible news that some students were shot down on campus. Although it is very important to acquire advanced knowledge, we should also consider about our own safety. Besides, living with an American family, we can be taken care of better and the food provided by the American family is usually better than that provided by school. My friend who attended a home-stay program told me that he tasted the most delicious dishes in his American family. Thus, living with an American family can provide us safety and comfort.

Admittedly, there are one or two disadvantages of living with an American family to some degree. That is, this may bring our family some financial burden as we all know that it is very expensive to live with an American family. My cousin who attended this program told me that the fee was about 60 dollars a week. However, students who choose to attend this program are usually from wealthy family so they can generally afford this. And students can also do some part time jobs in order to release this financial burden. Comparing with the benefits that living with an American family brings, this only disadvantage can be totally ignored.

Considering all the facts above, there are so many advantages for students to attend a home-stay program while studying abroad. And I believe people will realize this eventually and more students will choose to live with an American family while studying abroad in the future.

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Stegosaurus

8月31日    独立写作
Do you agree or disagree people who go out from their village will be more successful and happier than people who stay in their village?

Nowadays, an increasing number of people go out from their villages to pursue their career. Some people state that these people will be more successful and happier than people who stay in their village. As for me, I quite agree with this statement.

First, there are more working opportunities in big cities than those in small villages. People who go out from their villages to big cities can always seize some opportunities. And some people even establish their own business. However, people in villages can only work on their own farms. For example, once a famous businessman came to my school to give us a lecture about his career development. He told us he grew up in a small poor village and even did not get formal education. When he came to the city, he started from a worker and did some simple tasks, but he acquired a lot of knowledge at work. Due to his hard-work and strong will of learning, he soon got promoted and now he is a senior manager in his company. He is much more successful than people who still live in his village.

In addition, there are more recreation activities in big cities than those in small villages. People can go to a bar at night with their friends, go shopping in a huge shopping mall, watch exciting movies with their family, and go to restaurant to taste delicious food and so on. However, people in villages can only talk with their neighbors and watch televisions with limited programs. Thus, life in big cities is much happier than that in villages. One of my friends who came from a rural area told me he never saw so many interesting things before. In his village, the only relaxing activity was chasing with his friends on farms. Undeniably, life in big cities has more pleasure and joy.

Admittedly, there may be one or two disadvantages of living in big cities to some degree. As there are more people in big cities, people would have more pressure in big cities. Some people even get insomnia due to heavy pressures. However this problem can be solved by relaxing themselves immediately and adjusting themselves continuously. Besides, those pressures usually come from people who want to get promotion quickly and who want to earn a lot of money in a short time. These thoughts are all unrealistic. Thus, comparing all the benefits that big cities bring, this only drawback can be totally ignored.

Considering all the facts above, people go outside are more successful and happier than people staying in their village. And I believe more people will realize this eventually and go out from their village to start a new life.

Stegosaurus

8月31日  综合写作  TPO5
The writer discusses three competing theories about the use of the "great houses", which differs from the main idea in the listening that none of the arguments shown in the reading passage is convincing.

First, the writer makes a point that the Chaco structures were purely residential. The listening, in contrast, holds a different view that the Chaco structures could not be residential. The professor claims that although the Chaco structures look like "apartment buildings" in New Mexico from outside, the inside casts doubt to this idea. If people lived there, there must be some fireplaces that people could use to cook. However, there were few fireplaces and the largest fireplace was in a room which could contain ten families.

Another point shown in the reading passage is that the Chaco structures were used to store food supplies, but the listening material presents a conflicting idea that the Chaco structures were not used to store food. Excavation uncovered no trace of maize or maize containers. If people were really used the structures to store food, some maize should have been found on floor and maize containers should have been remained.

Finally, the writer states that the houses were used as ceremonial centers, which challenges the standpoint made by the professor who says that the houses were not used for ceremonial purpose. It is because the mound also contained some other materials that cannot be used as ceremonial purpose. Some building materials such as sand and stone were found in the mound. Perhaps these materials were thrown away as trash after construction and pots could also be left as trash by workers who built the houses.

safeandsound

Nowadays, an increasing number of people go out from their villages to pursue their career.（有点问题…谓语在哪里？） Some people state that these people will be more successful and happier than people who stay in their village. （改写一下吧…）As for me, I quite agree with this statement.

First, thereare more working opportunities (是不是job opportunities 更好呢？) in big cities than those in small villages. People who go out from their villages to big cities can always seize some opportunities. And some people even establish their own business. However, people in villages can only work on their own farms. For example, once a famous businessman came to my school to give us a lecture about his career development. He told us he grew up in a small poor village and even did not get formal education. When he came to the city, he started from a worker （感觉怪怪的，有点chinglish）anddid some simple tasks, but he acquired a lot of knowledge at work. Due to his hard-work and strong will of learning (strong desire to learn), he soon got promoted and now he is a senior manager in his company. He is much more successful than people who still live in his village.

In addition, thereare more recreation activities in big cities than those in small villages. People can go to a bar at night with their friends, go shopping in a huge shopping mall, watch exciting movies with their family, and go to restaurant to taste delicious food and so on. However, people in villages can only talk with their neighbors and watch televisions with limited programs. Thus, life in big cities is much happier than that in villages.（放在后面）One of my friends who came from a rural area told me he never saw so many interesting things before. In his village, the only relaxing activity was chasing with his friends on farms（好像不对，但我也不知道怎么改、、、抱歉啊）. Undeniably, life in big cities has more pleasure and joy. Thus, life in big cities is much happier than that in villages.

Admittedly, theremay be one or two disadvantages of living in big cities to some degree. Astherearemore people in big cities, people would have more pressure in big cities. (后面的big cities可以不说了，把第二个people 换成they) Some people even get insomnia due to heavy（high） pressures. However, this problem can be solved by relaxing themselves（删掉） immediately （放在solve后面） and adjusting themselves continuously（这个词是压根不停的…改成constantly 或 continually）. Besides, those pressures usually come from（occur in） people who want to get promotion quickly and who want to earn a lot of money in a short time. These thoughts are all unrealistic. Thus, comparing all the benefits that big cities bring, this only drawback can be totally ignored.

Considering all the facts above, people go outside are more successful and happier than people staying in their village. (同上，最好改写一下)And I believe more people will realize this eventually and go out from their village to start a new life.

总体来说，整篇文章没什么语法错误，论点展开的不错，而且写了不少【对我来说【呱唧呱唧!】

但是举例之后再加几句议论应该会更好

建议变换一下句型【貌似每段中心句都是there be】

另外，针对there be，“此句型在中高级英语写作中罕有用武之地，甚至在GMAT语法考试中还遭到了严重抨击，几乎每个使用到There be的句型的说法都必错无疑。”--《十天搞定TOEFL作文》,by 张红岩

虽然我也不知道是对是错，但是还是尽量不要写为好。防患于未然嘛~

是不是中心句关联到题目中的happier和more successful会更好呢？【只是一个想法，不知道对不对

【收工】

本人非大牛，仅供参考~~与君共勉~

Stegosaurus

an increasing number of people go out from their villages to pursue their career中go就是谓语吧，这句话应该没错吧，word里是没有语法错误的。。。。。。。。。

Stegosaurus

非常感谢safe的修改，真是受益匪浅啊，发现了好多隐藏的问题！
现将改后作文贴下：

Nowadays, an increasing number of people go out from their villages to pursue their career. Some people state that people can live a more successful and happier life in cities. As for me, I quite agree with this statement.

First, more job opportunities are provided in big cities than those in small villages. People who go out from their villages to big cities can always seize some opportunities. And some people even establish their own business. However, people in villages can only work on their own farms. For example, once a famous businessman came to my school to give us a lecture about his career development. He told us he grew up in a small poor village and even did not get formal education. When he came to the city, he started his career as a basic worker who did some simple tasks, but he acquired a lot of knowledge at work. Due to his hard-work and strong desire to learn, he soon got promoted and now he is a senior manager in his company. He is much more successful than people who still live in his village.

In addition, people can enjoy more recreation activities in big cities than those in small villages. People can go to a bar at night with their friends, go shopping in a huge shopping mall, watch exciting movies with their family, and go to restaurant to taste delicious food and so on. However, people in villages can only talk with their neighbors and watch televisions with limited programs. One of my friends who came from a rural area told me he never saw so many interesting things before. In his village, the only relaxing activity was playing with his friends on farms. Undeniably, life in big cities has more pleasure and joy. Thus, life in big cities is much happier than that in villages.

Admittedly, there may be one or two disadvantages of living in big cities to some degree. As more people live in big cities, they would have more pressure. Some people even get insomnia due to high pressures. However, this problem can be solved immediately by relaxing and adjusting themselves constantly. Besides, those pressures usually occur in people who want to get promotion quickly and who want to earn a lot of money in a short time. These thoughts are all unrealistic. Thus, comparing all the benefits that big cities bring, this only drawback can be totally ignored.

Considering all the facts above, going outside allows people to pursue a more successful and happier life. And I believe more people will realize this eventually and go out from their village to start a new life.

Stegosaurus

9 月1 日  独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement？

In order to be succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else

Nowadays, as people try to develop their own abilities, more and more people present distinctive opinions and ideas. Some people state that people should be like others in order to success. However, I quite disagree with this statement.

First, being different from others could help us gain more attention. When we compare two things, the first thing comes to our mind is their difference, so difference could attract more attention than similarity. Our bosses could find our unique abilities and we could also get promoted easily when we keep different from others. For example, a famous local businessman who came to my school to give us a lecture about his career development told us it was of great significance to stay unique and distinctive because that was the reason why we necessarily existed in the world and why we were irreplaceable. In this case, being different is an indispensable element of success.

In addition, being different could allow us think creatively. If we just want to be like others, we all try to think in the way in which others think. And we will be afraid of thinking differently so we will avoid seeking new solutions to problems. However, so many new technologies emerged in today's society, and none of these could be invented without new thoughts. For example, my uncle is a person who is so different from others and he always has some strange ideas. Once his company stroke in a crisis, but his new thoughts helped his company get out of the crisis. Since then, he got much respect in his company than he had never imagined and now he is one of senior managers in his company. Thus, being different is so important to our success.

Admittedly, being different may bring one or two disadvantages to our social circles. If we are too different from others, other people may do not want to make friends with us. Nonetheless, this problem can be solved by giving others enough respects. People who do not want to make friends with someone different from them usually think the behaviors of those different people have offended them. Comparing with all the benefits that being different brings this only drawback can totally be ignored.

Considering all the facts above, being true to ourselves and different from others brings a lot of advantages which could help us succeed. I believe more people will realize this eventually and stay their unique characteristics.

Stegosaurus

9月1日  综合写作
TPO6
The writer discusses that the communal online encyclopedias have several important problems that make them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias, which differs from the main point in the listening that the criticism in the reading passage is prejudice and the author has no idea how far the communal online encyclopedias have gone.

First, the writer makes a point that the contents in the communal online encyclopedias are partially informed at best and downright inaccurate in many cases. The listening, in contrast, holds a different view that even the traditional encyclopedias have many mistakes. For example, if people read a complex book, they will find a lot of errors in it. The advantage of communal online encyclopedias is that the errors in them can be easily corrected. However, the errors in the printed encyclopedias will remain for decades.

Another point shown in the reading passage is that the information in the online encyclopedias could be fabricated, deleted, and corrupted, but the listening material presents a conflicting view that the crucial information in an article cannot be changed. It is because the most crucial facts in an article are put in a special format that cannot be changed by others. And there are special editors who will monitor the changes and reverse the changes which are obvious malicious.

Finally, the writer states that the communal encyclopedias focus too much on trivial and popular topics, which challenges the standpoint made by the professor who says that the communal encyclopedias truly reflect what people concern. Because traditional encyclopedias only have limited space, people have to decide what is important. However, this judgment made by a group of academics cannot reflect ordinary people's interests. Communal online encyclopedias present a great variety of contents which truly reflect users' interests.

面具小姐

不好意思。。改了忘了传了。。。。。。。。。。