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Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

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I know there are advantages to living in a modern apartment, but I'd prefer to live in a traditional house. My main reason is that I love traditional design. It is graceful and warm and inviting. I think modern design is very empty and sterile and not very inviting. So, because of the way it looks, I'd choose a traditional house.

I recognize the fact that a modern apartment is going to be in much better shape. Being new probably means all the plumbing works, the roof is not going to leak, the windows are properly sealed, and the kitchen appliances are in working order. A traditional house can not guarantee any of that. In fact, it is likely that things will break down or need replacement, simply because of age.

Still, if the appliances are old, so is the wood, and that's a big advantage as far as I am concerned. Very few new buildings have the kind of beautiful woods that were used years ago. It is something that can not be copied.

Space is always important to me, too. I need a lot of room for my home office, my clothes, and to display all the knickknacks I have picked up in my travels. I also like to have interesting space. I do not want all the rooms and windows the same size or a boxy design. A modern apartment usually comes in one size and shape. A traditional house is going to have a variety of spaces where I can put a little table or a window seat. And it will have lots of room, from basement to attic. These are all good reasons for me to prefer living in a traditional house.

Some people love modern design, but it is not for me. The space and beauty of a traditional home are more important to me than having everything new and perfect.

guandream

以下是引用pumpkin在2004-10-26 3:20:00的发言：

Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

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I know that there are advantages to living in a modern apartment, but I'd prefer to live in a traditional house. My main reason is that I love traditional design. It is graceful and warm and inviting. I think modern design is very empty and sterile and not very inviting.(lack of vocaburaly) So, because of the way it looks, I'd like choose a traditional house.

I recognize the fact that a modern apartment is going to be in much better shape. Being new probably means all the plumbing works, the roof is not going to leak, the windows are properly sealed, and the kitchen appliances are in working order. A traditional house can not guarantee any of that. In fact, it is likely that things will break down or need replacement, simply because of age.

Still, if the appliances are old, so is the wood, and that's a big advantage as far as I am concerned. Very few new buildings have the kind of beautiful woods that were used years ago. It is something that can not be copied.(I have no idea about this point)

Space is always important to me, too(how can the author come out "too". this word infer that the author mentioned the other important point. if it refers to the first paragraph, the organization of the essay is really messy and dis-organized). I need a lot of room for my home office, my clothes, and to display all the knickknacks I have picked up in my travels. I also like to have interesting space. I do not want all the rooms and windows the same size or a boxy design. A modern apartment usually comes in one size and shape. A traditional house is going to have a variety of spaces where I can put a little table or a window seat. And it will have lots of room, from basement to attic. These are all good reasons for me to prefer living in a traditional house.

Some people love modern design, but it is not for me. The space and beauty of a traditional home are more important to me than having everything new and perfect.

this essay can be a failure sample of essays. it is disorganized, irrelated information and no-idea idea.

soaring

谢谢guandreamGG，这篇不收了

绿色精灵

我11月8号考的就是这道题

写的很烂,想了半天也没想到好理由,郁闷啊