今天写了第一篇作文，垃圾至极，求板砖。。。

mrj1104

Parents are the best teachers.  agree or disagree?


Education is one of the key words of our time.as the most important aspect of education, teacher impact children so much. There is a public concern, some people argues that parents are the best teacher, because they have the closest relation with children. I can not agree with such a statement , which requires further analysis.





It is undeniable that parents are good teachers. there are couple of reasons to name. firstly, When children were young, parents would teach them a lot of personal qualities, such as honest, friendly and so on, which is very useful in their life. Secondly, parents pay much attention to children’s study. For example, when children face some problem in the homework, parents teach them the methodto solve the problem. Thirdly, in order to strengthen the children’ ability parentsusually take children to do some exercises or participate in the social activities.



However ,it is hard to say that parents are the best teachers. On the one hand , with the development of the science and technology , parents’ knowledge is not enough for the children. For example, once I asked my father a problem when I was in the high school, he told me that the knowledge in my book was harder than theirs, and it is hard for him to respond. On the other hand, parents do not have enough time to care about children. Parents all have their own work, after one day work, they need enough time to relax instead of teaching children . for example, when my parent go home, they looks so tired, and I do notwant to disturb them anymore.



Therefore , in conclusion , I cannot agree that parents are the best teachers. Education is the most important thing for children, and the teacher is the most important thing of the education, parents’ knowledge is not adequate for the next generation . in addition, parents is so tired after the work, how can I ask them to solve our problems which we need to solve by ourselves before?

Crystaljoy

你写的还真不少啊~

看大本营的帖子了么？

Joanna0225

Parents are the best teachers.agree or disagree?



Education is one of the key words of our time. as the most important aspect of education, teacher impact children so much. There is a public concern, some people argues (argue) that parents are the best teacher (teachers), because they have the closest relation (relationship) with children. I can not agree with such a statement, which requires further analysis.


It is undeniable that parents are good teachers. there are couple of reasons to name. firstly, When children were (are) young, parents would (去掉would) teach them a lot of personal qualities, such as honest (honesty), friendly (friendliness) and so on, which is (are) very useful in their life (lives). Secondly, parents pay much attention to children’s study. For example, when children face some problem in the homework, parents teach them the method to solve the problem (problems). Thirdly, in order to strengthen the (去掉the) children’ ability parents usually take children to do some exercises or participate in the social activities.


However, it is hard to say that parents are the best teachers. On the one hand, with the development of the (去掉the) science and technology, parents’ knowledge is not enough for the children. For example, once I asked my father a problem when I was in the (去掉the) high school, he told me that the knowledge in my book was harder than theirs, and it is (was) hard for him to respond. On the other hand, parents do not have enough time to care about children. Parents all have their own work, after one day’s work, they need enough time to relax instead of teaching children. for example, when my parent (parents) go home, they looks (usually look) so tired, and I do not want to disturb them anymore.


Therefore, in conclusion, I cannot agree that parents are the best teachers. Education is the most important thing for children, and the teacher is the most important thing (factor?) of the education, (前面的逗号改成句号，And/What’s more等等) parents’ knowledge is not adequate for the next generation. in addition, parents is (are) so tired after the work, how can I ask them to solve our problems which we need to solve by ourselves before? (本句的主语改成 I 了是不是不太合适…我认为可改成 In addition, after work, parents are too tired to solve children’s problems which are better solved by children themselves first.)

1. 注意大小写和空格，格式应该规范。（楼主如果把写的原文粘贴到word里会发现有很多绿色的下划曲线，表示格式有误）
   
2. 单复数、时态等最基本的语法错误不应该出现。
   
3. 文章结构好，举例生动，理由充分。至少楼主是考过6级的，我猜~~
   

仅是本人拙见。有错请指教，虚心接受！

mrj1104

看了的挖/

mrj1104

恩恩，知道了。希望下次多给批改哈。谢谢啦