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6月20日110827 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.  批改

Are you in great depression because your life doesn’t go on the way as you expected? Are you messing up for the lack of ability to calm down when encountering problems? Are you hurting your dreams by being impatient? Undoubtedly, patience is a good strategy. It is an essential trait of our personality, a necessity for success.

In this life, lots of things may not go accord with our intentions. So what to do with that? To be irritated and complain about everything or calm down to keep a positive attitude? Impatience will lead us to irritation, to anxiety, which makes no use to the problems, yet puts us in low spirits and hard times. Otherwise, to be patient, and calm down can we get down to work or even explore a better way to make a change.

Moreover, “A beard well lathered is half shaved”, rashly digging into things without any preparation will in many times yield an unsatisfying result. Take overseas traveling for example. Without enough previous study of the journey destination, getting everything packaged and ready beforehand, it would be almost impossible for any traveler to really have a wonderful trip. One of my mother’s friends went to Nepal last year, but she just stayed there for one day, and hurried to buy a ticket back home. The reason is that this trip was made in haste, .onlyOnly until she arrived in Nepal, did she realize that it’s not the type she favored even made her fell uncomfortable, including poverty ,untidiness,harsh weather. sick用的太过了，有恶心你的意思。 , and that the poverty, untidiness, harsh weather all made her feel sick. Thus, even though we are longing to go to somewhere for a visit, we still need to be patient enough to get things in order first.

Last but not least, patience is a cherished power, a power thatwhich或者重启一句 can support us to keep waiting and fighting for our dreams, to motivate us to never give up because a better future is always ahead. To study abroad is many Chinese students’ dreams, but some cannot bear the long period of time devoted to the preparation of language exams, selection of dream schools or even the seemed complicated application procedure, and gave up in the midway. From many real stories, we can truly find that success belongs to those patient people who have the strong wills to wait, to preserve, to endure the boring or even disheartening process.

"He that can have Patience, can have what he will.” Benjamin Franklin once said. Yes, it’s true,有点口语化 patience is a good strategy, a wisdom of life.

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Are you in great depression because your life doesn’t go on the way as you expected? Are you messing up for the lack of ability to calm down when encountering problems? Are you hurting your dreams by being impatient? Undoubtedly, patience is a good strategy. It is an essential trait of our personality, a necessity for success.

In this life, lots of things may not go accord with our intentions. So what to do with that? To be irritated and complain about everything or calm down to keep a positive attitude? Impatience will lead us to irritation, to anxiety, which makes no use to（solve） the problems, yet（instead） puts us in low spirits and hard times. Otherwise, to be patient, and calm down can we get down to work or even explore a better way to make a change(yangyang work a better way？make a change太中性化了呗，用个比较positive的词).

Moreover, “A beard well lathered is half shaved”, rashly digging into things without any preparation will in many times yield an unsatisfying result. Take overseas traveling for example. Without enough previous study of the journey destination, getting everything packaged and ready beforehand, it would be almost impossible for any traveler to really have a wonderful trip. One of my mother’s friends went to Nepal last year, but she just stayed there for one day, and hurried to buy a ticket back home. The reason is that this trip was made in haste, only until she arrived in Nepal, did she realize that it’s not the type she favored, and that the poverty, untidiness, harsh weather all made her feel sick. Thus, even though we are longing to go to somewhere for a visit, we still need to be patient enough to get things in order first.(this example is not rare,people may confront with similar problems which need patience as this one,therefore,patience is ……)

Last but not least, patience is a cherished power, a power that can support us to keep waiting and fighting for our dreams, to motivate us to never give up because a better（bright） future is always（去掉） ahead if we continue on. To study abroad is many Chinese students’ dreams, but some cannot bear the long period of time devoted to the preparation of language exams, selection of dream schools or even the seemed complicated application procedure, and gaive up in the midway. (这里来一个过渡句就好了)From many real stories, we can truly find that success belongs to those patient people who have the strong will to wait, to preserve, to endure the boring or even disheartening process.

"He that can have Patience, can have what he will.” Benjamin Franklin once said. Yes, it’s true, patience is a good strategy, a wisdom of life.

1 yangyang的主要意思one：不焦躁可以取得成功two：急于做某事容易产生不好的效果 three;耐心能让我们最终取得成功；

2yangyang的各部分处理的很好，分论点的准备可以把第二段放后面，这个是对文章中心是次要的了；

3然后，yangyang进步很多哈，不错不错。