6.6 题目： Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Food in the past was much healthier than today
作文： Food is always the most important part in people’s daily life. After developing thousands of years, food in modern world is not merely a bundle of water, protein, and fat. People will care more about the taste and even the health factor. It is undeniable that the food in today is more delicious than ever before. However, many people concern that the food in the past was much healthier than today. For my part, I support this idea and use the following statements to support my choice.
In the first place, the technology has changed the origin of the food. With the development of the technology, many food producers use various kinds of biochemical methods to ensure their food products look good. For example, in China, every people will take about 183g antibiotics on average annually. However, most of these antibiotics do not come from the medicine, rather come from the food. The farmers in the ranch spray a lot of antibiotics to ensure the pigs and cows healthy. However, these antibiotics will come to human body through food chain and impact people’s health profoundly.
Furthermore, fast living style is another main reason that leads to the food unhealthy. People at today do not spend too much time on eating, because they are always very busy and suffer pressure from all sizes of their lives. The only way to solve this problem is to eat fast food. However, the synonym of fast food is junk food. Junk food can be made very easily and ate conveniently. Nevertheless, junk food cannot balance people daily nutrition and often cause obesity. For now, obesity has become the first potential health problem for many developed countries in the world.
In conclusion, the reasons why the food in the past was healthier than today are the incorrect use of new technology and appearance of junk food. People need to be aware of the situation they are in right now and struggle to find an alternative to enforce the food to be better.
6.5 独立 With the development of the society, many people care more about the quality of their daily life and internal happiness. Some people think they are happier than the people in the past, because the technology in the modern society is advanced, and entertainment is also more available. However, the other（the other 是指两者中的另一个吧，用在这里貌似不太合适）people are not satisfied with the situation that they are in right now. They image the people in the past were happier and more satisfied with their life.（这句话双谓语了把） For my part, I want to refute the former idea and agree with the later one.
First, advanced technology is not always a good single（我觉得这个词用得很好呀） for modern people. Although many new products, such as internet, mobile phone, make people connect with each other.（这句没说完，应该是和下面一句连在一起的吧） Many people may lose themselves in the e-world and generally unable to contact their friends in the real world. Actually, people spend a growing amount of time to stay online. With statistics, people in United States spend averagely 13 hours per week on internet. These 13 hours are taken from the social activities mostly. By this way, technology can be the main factor caused the unhappiness in the modern world.
In addition, pressure is another issue people need to consider if they want to pursue happy（应该换个名词呢）. In the past, people did not have too much pressure. The life pace is not so fast.（是不是应该用过去时呀） Although the living standard is not as good as the one in modern society, people are more easily satisfied with their work and family. As Aristotle said, the real happiness is from the human’s internal world, without depending on anyone else. People in the past can be more independent than the people at （这个介词好诡异）now. Persons in the modern world always want to pursue a higher social status and greater reputation. All these things are illusions, since these halos rely on other people’s work and attention. By this way,（上一段用的也是这个啊，是不是考虑换换呀） human at now hardly obtain the real happiness from outside.
In conclusion, people need to concentrate on their own life and find what they really want to pursue if people want to find the real happiness in this highly developed world. Do not lose yourself in the virtual world or pursue something unreal. A person needs to find the way he wants to insist on and get the happiness from his own internal world.
6.5 独立 With the development of the society, many people care more about the quality of their daily life and internal happiness. Some people think they are happier than the people in the past, because the technology in the modern society is advanced, and entertainment is also more available. However, the other（the other 是指两者中的另一个吧，用在这里貌似不太合适）people are not satisfied with the situation that they are in right now. They image the people in the past were happier and more satisfied with their life.（这句话双谓语了把） For my part, I want to refute the former idea and agree with the later one.
First, advanced technology is not always a good single（我觉得这个词用得很好呀） for modern people. Although many new products, such as internet, mobile phone, make people connect with each other.（这句没说完，应该是和下面一句连在一起的吧） Many people may lose themselves in the e-world and generally unable to contact their friends in the real world. Actually, people spend a growing amount of time to stay online. With statistics, people in United States spend averagely 13 hours per week on internet. These 13 hours are taken from the social activities mostly. By this way, technology can be the main factor caused the unhappiness in the modern world.
In addition, pressure is another issue people need to consider if they want to pursue happy（应该换个名词呢）. In the past, people did not have too much pressure. The life pace is not so fast.（是不是应该用过去时呀） Although the living standard is not as good as the one in modern society, people are more easily satisfied with their work and family. As Aristotle said, the real happiness is from the human’s internal world, without depending on anyone else. People in the past can be more independent than the people at （这个介词好诡异）now. Persons in the modern world always want to pursue a higher social status and greater reputation. All these things are illusions, since these halos rely on other people’s work and attention. By this way,（上一段用的也是这个啊，是不是考虑换换呀） human at now hardly obtain the real happiness from outside.
In conclusion, people need to concentrate on their own life and find what they really want to pursue if people want to find the real happiness in this highly developed world. Do not lose yourself in the virtual world or pursue something unreal. A person needs to find the way he wants to insist on and get the happiness from his own internal world.
Food is always the most important part in people’s daily life. After developing thousands of years, food in modern world is not merely a bundle of water, protein, and fat. People will care more about the taste and even the health factor. It is undeniable that the food in today is more delicious than ever before. However, many people concern that the food in the past was much healthier than today. For my part, I support this idea and use the following statements to support my choice.
In the first place, the technology has changed the origin of the food. With the development of the technology, many food producers use various kinds of biochemical methods to ensure their food products look good. For example, in China, every people will take about 183g antibiotics on average annually. However, most of these antibiotics do not come from the medicine, rather come from the food. The farmers in the ranch spray a lot of antibiotics to ensure the pigs and cows healthy. However, these antibiotics will come to human body through food chain and impact people’s health profoundly.
Furthermore, fast living style is another main reason that leads to the food unhealthy. People at today do not spend too much time on eating, because they are always very busy and suffer pressure from all sizes of their lives. The only way to solve this problem is to eat fast food. However, the synonym of fast food is junk food. Junk food can be made very easily and ate conveniently. Nevertheless, junk food cannot balance people daily nutrition and often cause obesity. For now, obesity has become the first potential health problem for many developed countries in the world.
In conclusion, the reasons why the food in the past was healthier than today are the incorrect use of new technology and appearance of junk food. People need to be aware of the situation they are in right now and struggle to find an alternative to enforce the food to be better.
如果非要鸡蛋里面挑石头，我觉得文章的最后一句，Situation 作先行词 后面的定语从句they are in 来修饰，感觉跟right now 紧紧链接，读起来非常拗口，而且容易误会是in now的使用方式。我的记忆中时间状语是紧紧跟着系动词的。不知道people need to be aware of the situation they are right now in ” 会不会好些 Enforce the food to be better 弱弱感觉有点Chinglish，作为solutions，寻找食物的替代品的建议也是否来得有点突然。
Food is always the most important part in people’s daily life. After developing thousands of years, food in modern world is not merely a bundle of water, protein, and fat. People will care more about the taste and even the health factor. It is undeniable that the food in today is more delicious than ever before. However, many people concern that the food in the past was much healthier than today. For my part, I support this idea and use the following statements to support my choice.
In the first place, the technology has changed the origin of the food. With the development of the technology, many food producers use various kinds of biochemical methods to ensure their food products look good. For example, in China, every people will take about 183g antibiotics on average annually. However, most of these antibiotics do not come from the medicine, rather come from the food. The farmers in the ranch spray a lot of antibiotics to ensure the pigs and cows healthy. However, these antibiotics will come to human body through food chain and impact people’s health profoundly.
Furthermore, fast living style is another main reason that leads to the food unhealthy. People at today do not spend too much time on eating, because they are always very busy and suffer pressure from all sizes of their lives. The only way to solve this problem is to eat fast food. However, the synonym of fast food is junk food. Junk food can be made very easily and ate conveniently. Nevertheless, junk food cannot balance people daily nutrition and often cause obesity. For now, obesity has become the first potential health problem for many developed countries in the world.
In conclusion, the reasons why the food in the past was healthier than today are the incorrect use of new technology and appearance of junk food. People need to be aware of the situation they are in right now and struggle to find an alternative to enforce the food to be better.
如果非要鸡蛋里面挑石头，我觉得文章的最后一句，Situation 作先行词 后面的定语从句they are in 来修饰，感觉跟right now 紧紧链接，读起来非常拗口，而且容易误会是in now的使用方式。我的记忆中时间状语是紧紧跟着系动词的。不知道people need to be aware of the situation they are right now in ” 会不会好些 Enforce the food to be better 弱弱感觉有点Chinglish，作为solutions，寻找食物的替代品的建议也是否来得有点突然。
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饭饭托福作文一窍不通呀。。。就有点G的底子而已。。。还跟着冰冻学捏。。。饭饭不敢乱说。。要不饭饭会把你带到坑里的。。。加油哈~~~~~~
