ARGUE 求拍【西蛋市垃圾回收问题】

xxfahima

题目：

The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of West Egg.

"Two years ago, our consultants predicted that West Egg's landfill, which is used for garbage disposal, would be completely filled within five years. During the past two years, however, town residents have been recycling twice as much aluminum and paper as they did in previous years. Next month the amount of material recycled should further increase, since charges for garbage pickup will double. Furthermore, over ninety percent of the respondents to a recent survey said that they would do more recycling in the future. Because of our residents' strong commitment to recycling, the available space in our landfill should last for considerably longer than predicted."

提纲：

1.某些材料的回收不意味着垃圾总数的减少，可能因为人口流入，工厂建设等原因导致垃圾增多
2.虽然垃圾处理费用提高，迫于没有其他处理方式，对垃圾数量可能没有明显的影响
3.调查不具备代表性


作文：
In the memo the mayor claims that contrast with two years ago as many as twice amount of aluminum and paper are recycled by town residents. Meanwhile, the mayor asserts as the charges for garbage pickup increased, the amount of garbage recycled will keep increasing. The mayor also cites a survey in which major respondents advocate to do more recycling in the future. Therefore, the mayor concludes the time that the landfill would be filled will be considerably longer than predicted. However, the argument is logically flawed in several critical respects.
  First, though certain material recycled more than before, it doesn’t necessarily mean the amount of garbage get smaller. Perhaps there are more people in West Egg because of work opportunity, or the city has become a tourist resort. For that matter, maybe factories newly built contribute to garbage production. It is entirely possible that the amount of garbage produced offset the decrease of that of aluminum and paper. In short, without ruling out other possible reason for garbage production the mayor cannot convince me on the basis of the amount of aluminum and paper recycled that the amount of garbage will decrease.
  Secondly, even if the charge of garbage pickup doubled, the memo contains no evidence to support the assumption that the amount of garbage recycled will definitely increase. Lacking such evidence it is equally possible that people are more willing to pay money in solving garbage.  
   Finally, the recent survey cited indicating that major respondents will do more recycling in the future would lend support to the mayor’s claim only if respondents typify residents in West Egg. However, the applicant provides no credible evidence that this is the case, let alone that the survey fails to substantiate the respondents’ declaration.
   In sum, the mayor’s conclusion is not persuasive as it stands. To strengthen it the mayor should prove that the amount of garbage is declining and the trend won't reverse in short time.Besides, the mayor should provide evidences that apart from residents in West Egg who contributes to rubbish to the landfill and all residents including respondents of the survey are inclined to do more recyling.

竹林中人

求附上题目和提纲

xxfahima

听版主话加上了哟~~求版主指导

竹林中人

现就提纲：
1.铝和纸在所有垃圾中占比如何？如果很小，那么这种回收的效果很有限。
2.垃圾箱收费翻倍，但如果之前的费用就很低，翻倍了之后也许不会给人们警醒。人们会认为价格还是很低而不会回收。
3.调查所反映的是被调查者这么说，但as we know ，调查的时候，因为调查者以及话题的原因，他们不愿意或者不会说实话，他们很难在行动中体现。
4.即使上面的所有都成立，但是如果我们这里回收制度没跟上，或者新增垃圾越来越多，也可能得不到结论。

竹林中人

你的中间段落太过简单，基本上指出不合理的地方之后，就一笔带过了，没有分析这种不合理的依据。

竹林中人

这种论证问题很大，内容空洞，字数也显得很少，3分很难

xxfahima

刚开始写，有点无从下笔的感觉，或者是想到了却不晓得怎么表达，我也发现自己这个问题很严重，不晓得该怎么提高

竹林中人

刚开始写，有点无从下笔的感觉，或者是想到了却不晓得怎么表达，我也发现自己这个问题很严重，不晓得该怎么提高

-- by 会员 xxfahima (2012/5/14 11:14:31)

你写的时候大脑清晰些，对每一个错误，你想想题目中的那人为什么这么说，他犯的错误是什么，然后指出这种错误是不行的，再提出自己的其他的合理的解释，不要太过抽象，只是说缺evidence，你要指出这个evidence到底是什么，越具体越好