issue10 求拍

sohiechan

这是第一篇issue，憋了好久。。。不过我马上要考试了，对于issue，只是列出了每题的提纲（还记不住）。
所以各位大侠有没有好建议可以让我在两个礼拜以内有所提高啊。
10) Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

Is it justifiable that nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural sates, even though these areas can be used to develop our economic gain? From my point, it is not a simple response to this question. We should consider two parts separately.

First of all, I think that certain wilderness areas should be preserved, since they are contributed to the equilibrium of our ecological system. Admittedly, as advances in our technology, we obtain a lot of welfare to make our life more comfortable and convenient. But at the same time, our environment suffers from huge harm. These extant wilderness areas may have a lot of precious animals and plants that once disturbed by human’s activities, could be extinguished. Or perhaps these wilderness areas have some history values, which we have not detected. Or even these wilderness areas are landfills, they are also very important for us. And if they are developed for economic gains, our garbage will have no places to go. Therefore, it is important for our humans to preserve some remaining wilderness areas for the equilibrium of our ecological system or for unknown history stories or for ourselves and so forth.

But we should make it clear that it may be unnecessary to preserve any remaining wilderness areas even if they can be developed for our economic gains. As we all know, there indeed have some wilderness useless. Or even If we do not take some measures to deal with them, they will be either bare or full of wort. On the other hand, with the development of our society, the space which we can use becomes more and more limited. Thus, this limitation, to some extent, has constrained our economic gains. So, it is more reasonable for us to take advantages of these areas to benefit our economy.

In fact, the preservation of remaining wilderness areas and development of our economy are not mutually exclusive. Moreover, we can also preserve these areas to begin with and as a result benefit our economy. The exact example of this comes first to my mind is Yellow Stone Park in USA. Yellow Stone Park which maintains its natural state, although it attracts many tourists every year, has developed its economic gains to protect this area. Therefore, it is entirely possible for us to keep balance between the preservation and development.

In sum, from my viewpoint, it is necessary to pass laws to preserve remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, considering many aspects of their values as primary ones. However, we could never be too absolute. What is more rational to us is that we should make a judicious evaluation to decide which is deserved to be preserved and what’s better establish wise strategies which can benefit both sides.

普渡哥

第一段写得不够精致，参考满分作文

sohiechan

第一段写得不够精致，参考满分作文

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/5/7 22:58:16)

第一段？那其他段呢？

竹林中人

. We should consider two parts separately   有必要指明是哪两部分
certain wilderness areas ？？你用certain不太严谨，你需要指明
have some history values？这个不太地道
第三段的第一句话，到底想表明什么，感觉有点矛盾的样子。
there indeed have some ？？？这样的低级错误不应该犯的
will be either bare or full of wort？？
as a result benefit our economy？前后主语已经不一致了，benefit不能省去主语。
我觉得你先从写对每一个句子开始吧，这点很重要的，也是最基础的，太多的语法错误，实在有碍观瞻

sohiechan

. We should consider two parts separately   有必要指明是哪两部分
certain wilderness areas ？？你用certain不太严谨，你需要指明
have some history values？这个不太地道
第三段的第一句话，到底想表明什么，感觉有点矛盾的样子。
there indeed have some ？？？这样的低级错误不应该犯的
will be either bare or full of wort？？
as a result benefit our economy？前后主语已经不一致了，benefit不能省去主语。
我觉得你先从写对每一个句子开始吧，这点很重要的，也是最基础的，太多的语法错误，实在有碍观瞻

-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/5/8 10:57:10)

1.嗯，有道理。再思考下！
2.我是把certain 当some 用的。。去找了韦氏，有个解释是used to mention a particular thing, person or group without giving any more details about it or them     所以我觉得应该不需要指明吧？
3.有历史价值怎么说？ historical values?
4.呃···我的意思是“要么就会变贫瘠，要么就会杂草丛生”  
5.噢

噢噢噢·····

sohiechan

. We should consider two parts separately   有必要指明是哪两部分
certain wilderness areas ？？你用certain不太严谨，你需要指明
have some history values？这个不太地道
第三段的第一句话，到底想表明什么，感觉有点矛盾的样子。
there indeed have some ？？？这样的低级错误不应该犯的
will be either bare or full of wort？？
as a result benefit our economy？前后主语已经不一致了，benefit不能省去主语。
我觉得你先从写对每一个句子开始吧，这点很重要的，也是最基础的，太多的语法错误，实在有碍观瞻

-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/5/8 10:57:10)

忘了说，谢谢！