【写作小分队】:5月20日初试伤不起啊~~叩谢各位前来拍砖~~

lucystar2012

嗯嗯~~我确实一开始审错题了~~~后来就略微加了一点儿字但还是朝着原来的跑偏~~~
谢谢你的修改，真难为你修改我这个诡异的文章了》

lucystar2012

As society becomes more and more competitive, the pace of life has been much faster than before. And there are a lot of people ignoring the basic polite behavior just holding the reason that they are too busy to care about these trivial things. However, from my perspective, I oppose that view and believe that we should stick to being polite no matter how  world outside has changed.

Have you ever been knocked down by others but people even didn't say "I'm sorry"? Anyone who meet this kind of rude people can't bear for their humiliating attitude. Have you ever met this situation that people cut in the line without any guilty? If I meet this people, I will feel that they are so impolite to everyone. Furthermore, those behaviors above, on the one hand, can reflect that people are immoral, which actually harm their reputation, on the other hand, will do deep harm to people and a increasing number of people will become more and more indifferent to deal with people's relationship. The result is that everyone is trapped into his/her self circle, compelling others.

Be polite to others can bring about much popularity for yourselves. For example, when you work in a company. You should learn how to socialize with others and make friends with others. And if you want to get others' belief , the basic line is to be polite to them, showing your respect. Especially to your boss, your polite behavior will make him appreciate for you. Besides, your colleagues can feel more closed to you. As long as you are polite, I think, everyone won't hate you, but like you a lot.

Admittedly, some people are too concentrated on their work or academic study, they have no time to care about how to do with others even how to be polite to others. But as a human being, the most important quality is nothing but respect. Be polite can show you treat others as a man.

As far as I am concerned , the necessity of being polite to others cannot be exaggerated much more. Therefore, we should recognize being polite as our basic and intrinsic value and persist in it forever.

sang824

As society becomes more and more competitive, the pace of life has been much faster than before. And there are a lot of people ignoringignore the basic polite behavior just holding the reason that they are too busy to care about these trivial things. However, from my perspective, I oppose that view and believe that we should stick to being polite no matter how  world outside has changed.

Have you ever been knocked down by others but people who even didn't say "I'm sorry"? Anyone who meets this kind of rude people can't bear for their humiliating attitude. Have you ever met this situation that people cut in the line without any guilty? If I meet this people, I will feel that they are so impolite to everyone. Furthermore, those behaviors above, on the one hand, can reflect that people are immoral,which actually harm their reputation, (这个句子有点混乱，从句套从句的，不如直接 can reflect immoral people and harm their reputation.)on the other hand, will do deep great harm to people and a increasing number of people will become more and more indifferent to deal with people's relationship(建议改成：As a result, a increasing number of people will become more and more indifferent and it is difficult to deal with relationship.). The result is that In this way,everyone is trapped into his/her self circle, compelling others.

Being polite to others can bring about much popularity for yourselves. For example, when you work in a company(不是个完整句子). You should learn how to socialize with others and make friends with others. And(联词连接句子) if you want to get others' belief , the basic line is to be polite to them, showing your respect. Especially to your boss(这里不要断句的好吧), your polite behavior will make him appreciate for you. Besides, your colleagues can feel more closed to you. As long as you are polite, I think(太口语化，可以as far as i am concerned一类), everyone won't hate you, but like you a lot.

Admittedly, some people are too concentrated on their work or academic study, they have no time to care(用too..to的结构？) about how to do with others even how to be polite to others. But as a human being, the most important quality is nothing but respect. Being polite can show you treat others as a man.(没有怎么看明白这句话..)

As far as I am concerned , the necessity of being polite to others cannot be exaggerated much more. Therefore, we should recognize beingpolite as our basic and intrinsic value and persist in it forever.

注意一下句子结构哦，用联词连接两个句子，从句使用准确。
还有小错误，加强一下表达，有些地方感觉得到意思，但是不知道到考官那里他们能不能理解准确叻。
加油～

lucystar2012

5月18日 2010.10.22 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Since the world has changed so much in the past fifty years, advice our grandparents can give us is not useful.




Actually, we have experienced a big change around the world,  therefore, the principle of the world also get altered, and some conclude that the advice from elders like our grandparents cannot fit this world very well, we don't need to listen to them. But from my perspective, I still tend to listen to them regardless how different the outside world it is. My statement can be proved as follows.

Firstly, grandparents have abundant experiences during their whole lives. The reason that they tell their stories and some advice to us just stems from their real concern about ourselves. They know what should do and what need to avoid by describing some lively life stories, which are not like some philosophical ideas abstract, but specific and comprehensive for us. However, their contents of advice carry on the eternal principle just like philosophical ideas, such as love, justice ,freedom and so on, they are still beneficial for us, not only in our knowledge, but also in our personality. For example, when I get failed in an exam, my grandmother told me about her struggle for college, during which she overcame the suffering of hunger, separation with her family. Finally, she got her goal, she made a success. Later, I thought of this story, I understood what my grandmother wanted to tell me, that is the persistence. And I keep this precious thought in my mind and never forget, especially confronting some obstacles.

Secondly, the advice from grandparents doesn't really contradict this changeable world. What's the real change happens, I think, is the technique. And the advice of technique may cannot get from our parents, even cannot from our peers, but need to search help for the professional. So the criteria of judging this kind of advice is just decided by the professional. But the function of every theoretical principles, we need to resort to experience, and the best way to get this experience is to listening to our grandparents. Admittedly, they cannot give the deep investigation about one thing, but they can give you a general description about what it is like, and you can get the right direction to start a new thing, avoiding going to the opposite.

In a word, the importance of grandparents' advice can never be exaggerated too much. As a youngster, we are too immature, listening to our elders can gives us a broaden horizon about this world, which provides opportunity for us to understand this world in a historical stance.

sang824

Actually, we have experienced a big change around the world,  therefore, the principle of the world also get altered, and some conclude that the advice from elders like our grandparents cannot fit this world very well, we don't need to listen to them.(这个句号前面好多分句，建议分开写吧。。) But from my perspective, I still tend to listen to them regardless how different the outside world it is. My statement can be proved as follows.

Firstly, grandparents have abundant experiences during their whole lives. The reason that they tell their stories and some advice to us just stems from their real concern about ourselves. They know what should do and what need to avoid by describing some lively life stories, which are not like some philosophical ideas abstract, but specific and comprehensive for us(不是很明白..). However(感觉没有转折意味), their contents of advice carry on the eternal principle just like philosophical ideas, such as love, justice ,freedom and so on, they are still beneficial for us, not only in our knowledge, but also in our personality. For example, when I get failed in an exam, my grandmother told me about her struggle for college, during which she overcame the suffering of hunger, separation with her family. Finally, she got her goal, she made a success (and succeed). Later, I thought of this story, I understood what my grandmother wanted to tell me, that is the persistence(分句没有连接词.建议换成主从 When I thought of this story, I understood what my grandmother wanted to tell me, that is persistence). And I keep this precious thought in my mind and never forget, especially confronting some obstacles.

Secondly, the advice from grandparents doesn't really contradict this changeable world. What's the real change happens, I think, is the technique. And the advice of technique may cannot(删一个吧) get from our parents, even cannot from our peers, but need to search help for the professional. So the criteria of judging this kind of advice is just decided by the professional. But the function of every theoretical principles, we need to resort to experience, and the best way to get this experience is to listening to our grandparents. Admittedly, they cannot give the deep investigation about one thing, but they can give you a general description about what it is like, and you can get the right direction to start a new thing, avoiding going to the opposite.

In a word, the importance of grandparents' advice can never be exaggerated too much. As a youngster, we are too immature, listening to our elders can gives us a broaden horizon about this world, which provides opportunity for us to understand this world in a historical stance.

注意句子间的联词，及时断句