issue132 ，5.27考G，恳请各位大侠指点！！！

kkkacfly

Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.

Just as the critics’ refusal of granting photograph as a form of art for its dependence on technological tools, similarly, the impact of technology on human’s communication is hotly debated. Some people regard the constant using of technology weakens our interaction, while some admit the contributions, the new and better ways for communication, provided by it. In fact, we shouldn’t deny that, with new devices such as telegraph, phone, and web, we transfer information more timely and effectively. On the other hand, the human interaction is some-how deteriorated by these devices as well.

To begin with, the technology enables us to communicate more conveniently and shortens the distance. By mobile phones, one can chat with his/her friends wherever and whenever he/she makes the call, with little constriction of distance between them. With a computer connected to the web, it is possible for parents to capture the sight of their son who studies abroad. However, all of these conveniences are unimaginable in anterior time, when people usually and uniquely exchange information by letters. Secondly, the highly-developed technology reduces the cost of communication, and liberates people from fag, either. The longest sport race, marathon, is to commemorate the run of Pheidippides, an ancient "day-runner" who carried the news of the Persian landing at Marathon of 490 B.C. to Sparta (a distance of 149 miles) in order to enlist help for the battle. If our forerunners are provided with modern media tools, they will be relieved from physical labor. Thirdly, the technology also enlarges our social communicating circle. A recent survey conducted by New Origin shows that the average number of communication circle of people in 1950 is one thousand, while the number doubles in 2010. Also, New Origin notices that the increased number normally comes from the web social sites, such as facebook and twitter.

However, although the technology used for communication benefits us in several ways, it simultaneously deteriorates our personal interaction. With modern technology, it is easier to make a lie, which may break the relationship between the maker and the taker, thus damps the interaction. For example, if your best friend asks you for dinner and you don’t want to refuse directly, you may simply send him/her a short message with excuses contrived. Nowadays, it is harder for friends, like Plato and Socrates, to get together and talk over spiritual topics intimately.

In all, our ever-increasing use of technology reduces our opportunities for human interaction, but not significantly. More importantly, the technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.

普渡哥

感觉没有重点，正常情况重点应该在however之后。这样的文章拿不到高分。

kkkacfly

谢谢普度哥知道，想问下如果把however前后位置换一下，重点是不是明显了？

shengou

咋感觉这个字数不够啊

竹林中人

感觉最后有必要提升下自己的认识水平，那就是面对利和不利，该采取什么态度和有什么合理的方法没

kkkacfly

谢谢斑竹， 我想问一下我这篇大概能到3分吗

竹林中人

谢谢斑竹， 我想问一下我这篇大概能到3分吗

-- by 会员 kkkacfly (2012/5/4 22:31:59)

我不敢说，估计3分就这样吧

kkkacfly

球拍啊