ARGUMENT17，求各位大牛往死里拍，求你们了，求求你们！

sinlon

【原文】The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC
radio station.
“To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that
WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has
occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth
has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We
must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music
format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of
recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should
change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly
popular in our area.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed
to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or
strengthen the argument.”
【response】
In the memorandum, the arguer advocates that WWAC should change from its current rock-music format to a news and tale format. To support this recommendation, the arguer cites a fact that the population growth in their listening area resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. The arguer also points out that a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. However, close scrutiny of this argument reveals that it is unconvincing in several aspects.

In the first place, the arguer fails to offer clear information about whether the current listening rate is declining and what is the real reason of the decline in listener numbers. It is entirely possible that the main rock-music listeners are young people, however, these listeners may have leaved for work out of the area. Or perhaps, its broadcast time is so improper that most listeners are inconvenient to listen to the radio. Without providing this evidence the arguer cannot conclude that its current rock-music format must be changed.（现状如何）

In addition, a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music does not necessarily mean that residents have limited interest in music. The arguer fails to provide strong evidence to show this. It is at least likely that the recent published music is not very popular or lowly-qualified, and then, local residents do not want to buy them. Therefore, to give out a convincing suggestion the author has to provide strong evidence to rule out this possibility and prove that the local residents indeed have limited interest in music.

   Finally, there is no evidence to show that whether new residents like the news and talk format or not. It is equally possible that these new residents, in fact, do not like this new format. If it is the case, then by changing to the news and talk format, WWAC cannot make listeners of these new residents.

   In sum, lacking of necessary evidence, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more information—perhaps by way of a survey or other study--with regard to the new residents’ attitudes towards the new format, local residents’ interest in music and the cause of the decline in listener numbers. Therefore, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and logically acceptable.

竹林中人

关于你的三点，我的意见是，第一个你质疑whether listeners is reducing，明显这个是题目给出的，减少是事实，另外你说听众减少是因为青年人外出工作了，这些也许并不很对点，我觉得可能这样更好，如果当地有另外一家同样的radio station 播出的rock music 更多些，听众反而没减少或者增加呢，只有对比才能说明数据是否有意义。第二个点，人们不买唱片，或许不是因为不喜欢，而是觉得太贵，更喜欢直接听电视台或者广播的音乐。第三个点，写的内容比前面两点内容少了，能否充实下。
继续努力，加油。语言没什么明显的问题！

普渡哥

作者的英语能力特别好。没看到什么语法问题。结构也不错。

sinlon

感谢你的宝贵意见，我会充实一下的