Issue 91~科技的根本目标是？求拍~~谢谢！

greenfish7

91) The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


In modern society, technology successively renders scads of convenience for people, leading to their life's increasing efficiency. Controversy surrounds the question of whether technological advancement should be aimed at fostering people's efficiency and thus they can have more leisure time to dispense freely. In my perspective, technology assuredly is related to higher efficiency; however, whether people would thus have more leisure time is contingent upon personal factors, and more frequently technology in fact should concentrate on the quality of people'slife.

Technology indeed has contributed to high efficiency in this society. From a speed at 8km/h, which is as an adult's striding, to over 300km/h, which is nearly as of the sound's, the speed of train owes much to the advancement of technology. From several days' delivery to few seconds' transmission, Email has triumphed to exert incredible impacts on people's communication. People benefit a lot from technology and life more convenient and efficient also undergirds humans’ intellect and galvanizes innovation. The efficiency today is inevitably correspondent with the development of technology.

However, the statement unfairly relates people's efficiency to their leisure time. It can be seen that increasing efficiency didn't lead people to have more time to relax, but instead court more social problems concerning this rapid pace, with which people only are more stressed, have higher expectation for themselves and even sometimes are scrappy toward others. Furthermore, sometimes those who are obsessed with interests might use technology to invent something detrimental to people. This evidence is abounding in consumption field, where consumers are more likely to be deceived by some “scientific” rationale inside products. These problems mentioned above are due to people's ambition to more profits of course, but sometimes due to the relationship of exploitation between employers and employees. Therefore, high efficiency might exert adverse effects on people, which have less to do with more leisure time than they do with more stressed life.

Thus, granted that technology is advancing with the primary goal of increasing people's efficiency, actually it also brings some bad influence on people's life. In my opinion, technology is supposed to take more aspects of people's life into consideration, quality inparticular, to make people feel easier. For instance, more salutary approaches to disinfecting milk should be emphasized and hence safer milk could be supplied,or more strengthened building structure should be studied so that it can defend stronger earthquakes.

On balance, technology assuredly should lead to higher efficiency, yet it is not necessarily renders more leisure time to people, and even sometimes has adverse effect. Besides efficiency, more frequently technology in fact should concentrate on the quality of people'slife.

普渡哥

这篇写得很好，作者语法水平也很高。

greenfish7

这篇写得很好，作者语法水平也很高。

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/3/12 10:25:49)

谢谢普渡哥！辛苦你啦！！

竹林中人

很好，LZ多多练习，到一定时候我们再把作文区的一些写得相对好一点的作文做个整理集合，将会是很好的财富！

greenfish7

很好，LZ多多练习，到一定时候我们再把作文区的一些写得相对好一点的作文做个整理集合，将会是很好的财富！

-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/3/13 10:58:09)

嗯，好的！^^