ISSUE 119 求拍

jameszhm

嗯 互动不错哈~~可以用不同的颜色来代表不同的人说不同的话 这样容易识别！~

普渡哥

排版好点就更好了。

李小含

楼主写的很好丫~就是想问下楼主多长时间写的，怕万一考试时候超时就亏了

雨不下

排版好点就更好了。

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/2/20 23:13:11)

在写字板上排版好好的，可是粘到论坛上排版就乱了

雨不下

楼主写的很好丫~就是想问下楼主多长时间写的，怕万一考试时候超时就亏了

-- by 会员 李小含 (2012/2/21 14:08:32)

2个小时。不知咋提速？请教

jameszhm

楼主写的很好丫~就是想问下楼主多长时间写的，怕万一考试时候超时就亏了

-- by 会员 李小含 (2012/2/21 14:08:32)

2个小时。不知咋提速？请教

-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/21 17:23:03)

可能刚开始的时候写慢点，后面的时间要注意加速~前面是打基础的

大剑Jade

From this point, some old buildings should give a way to the modern development.
应该是give way to
the essence of preservation of a historic buildings actually equate with the meaningfulness of development of modernization
这句话essence和meaningfulness等同，不知何解？
in addition to，
应该删掉to
还有很多的时候，语言显得很僵硬，变通的不好，就是感觉按照套路来的很多，模板的痕迹很重（无论是不是真的用的模板）。一些短语词组单词用的不规范，看起来很怪异，比如vanish and perish，我觉得用一个就好。
还有就是句子过长，如However, with a history of more than 700 years now they suffer from the urban renovation and economic development of China, most of them can not provide more spaces for more people to live compared to the modern tall buildings so that they slowly disappear from Beijing, at the same time, are replaced by tall buildings which can hold many people living in. From this point, some old buildings should give a way to the modern development.
从at the same time那断一下比较好。
总的来讲，LZ语言功底尚需磨练，不过上述我只是指出了不足，LZ当然还有很多好的方面，比如结构合理等，这里就不一而足了。

雨不下

From this point, some old buildings should give a way to the modern development.
应该是give way to
the essence of preservation of a historic buildings actually equate with the meaningfulness of development of modernization
这句话essence和meaningfulness等同，不知何解？
in addition to，
应该删掉to
还有很多的时候，语言显得很僵硬，变通的不好，就是感觉按照套路来的很多，模板的痕迹很重（无论是不是真的用的模板）。一些短语词组单词用的不规范，看起来很怪异，比如vanish and perish，我觉得用一个就好。
还有就是句子过长，如However, with a history of more than 700 years now they suffer from the urban renovation and economic development of China, most of them can not provide more spaces for more people to live compared to the modern tall buildings so that they slowly disappear from Beijing, at the same time, are replaced by tall buildings which can hold many people living in. From this point, some old buildings should give a way to the modern development.
从at the same time那断一下比较好。
总的来讲，LZ语言功底尚需磨练，不过上述我只是指出了不足，LZ当然还有很多好的方面，比如结构合理等，这里就不一而足了。

-- by 会员 大剑Jade (2012/2/21 23:38:47)

谢谢。vanish and perish是我看以前四级范文里用到的短语。我觉得挺好的就记下了。我没有用模版。我都没形成自己的模版。还有请教大牛：如何在短时间提高语言？

大剑Jade

From this point, some old buildings should give a way to the modern development.
应该是give way to
the essence of preservation of a historic buildings actually equate with the meaningfulness of development of modernization
这句话essence和meaningfulness等同，不知何解？
in addition to，
应该删掉to
还有很多的时候，语言显得很僵硬，变通的不好，就是感觉按照套路来的很多，模板的痕迹很重（无论是不是真的用的模板）。一些短语词组单词用的不规范，看起来很怪异，比如vanish and perish，我觉得用一个就好。
还有就是句子过长，如However, with a history of more than 700 years now they suffer from the urban renovation and economic development of China, most of them can not provide more spaces for more people to live compared to the modern tall buildings so that they slowly disappear from Beijing, at the same time, are replaced by tall buildings which can hold many people living in. From this point, some old buildings should give a way to the modern development.
从at the same time那断一下比较好。
总的来讲，LZ语言功底尚需磨练，不过上述我只是指出了不足，LZ当然还有很多好的方面，比如结构合理等，这里就不一而足了。

-- by 会员 大剑Jade (2012/2/21 23:38:47)

谢谢。vanish and perish是我看以前四级范文里用到的短语。我觉得挺好的就记下了。我没有用模版。我都没形成自己的模版。还有请教大牛：如何在短时间提高语言？

-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/21 23:53:11)

嗯4,6级那种东西还是少看的为好，与实际英语严重脱节。所谓语言，就是多看多写，平时可以看看纽约时报什么的，写的话尽量多样化的写，每次写都追求不同，这样才会对怎样才能写好更有体会。只要坚持这么做，提升语言指日可待。加油！

franciszmy

2个小时，时间太长啦，先精练几篇，然后就要大幅度提高速度了。写的再好，时间太长，考试的时候也发挥不好的。