argument64 求拍

李小含

好像字数太少了呃...
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        Asthe article suggests, collectors predict that the life-size sculptures will decreasein valued while the miniatures increase in values. To support their prediction,the collectors claim that ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodiesto depict life-size clay status while miniature statues were depicted withoutmolds. The claim is based on a recent discovery that molds of human heads andhands are found on kali while few ancient kalinese sculpting tools have beenfound. As discussed below, the prediction suffers from several critical flawsand therefore unconvinced.
        Firstof all, the collectors conclusion based on the discovery referred in thearticle is logically unsound. They provide no evidence to show that the moldsof human heads and hands were used by artists. Perhaps the molds werefunctioned as teaching tools. Even if the molds were tools of artists, thediscovery is far from enough to prove that the artists create without anysculpting tools or techniques. Perhaps tools and techniques were the mainreason for the precision since they were necessary in details.
        Secondly,whether the artists created sculptures only with molds is uncertain accordingthe first discussion above, the discovery of molds may not be the reason forthe few discoveries of sculpting tools. Perhaps the sculpting tools were madeof metal which can be easily corroded.
        Thirdly,even if the artists created scriptures only with molds, the collectors unfairlyrule out other reasons for miniature statues’ different styles. Perhaps theminiature statues were made for decoration, and kalinese were in favor of suchabstract and varied statues.
        Finally:even if the collectors’ conclusions and explanations are coincidently same withthe truth, their confidence in the value trends of the life-size sculptures andthe other is lack of reasonable analysis. Perhaps life-size sculptures will bemore valuable since more people will cherish realistic precision articlesinstead of abstract ones in the future.
        Inconclusion, to make the suggestion convinced, the collectors must provide moreevidences from authorities’ study to prove their conclusion. Furthermore, areliable survey is required to assure that articles with more techniques willobtain more favor of market.

李小含

附题
Collectors prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision. Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create these statues. This discovery explains why Kalinese miniature statues were abstract and entirely different in style: molds could be used only for life-size sculptures. It also explains why few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found. In light of this discovery, collectors predict that the life-size sculptures will decrease in value while the miniatures increase in value.

lukebrehm

1. sculptures will decrease in valued (value) while the miniatures increase in values (omit, IN VALUE).
2. suffers from several critical flaws and therefore >I am< unconvinced.
3. Secondly,whether the artists created sculptures only with molds is uncertain accordingthe first discussion above, the discovery of molds may not be the reason forthe few discoveries of sculpting tools. Perhaps the sculpting tools were madeof metal which can be easily corroded.  --If so, what were the molds made of that wouldn't corrode as easily as metal? Perhaps you should say they may have been made of something else because metal really isn't that easy to corrode. (just an idea)
4. sculptures and the other is lack(ing) of (omit, OF) reasonable analysis.
5. will cherish realistic >the< precision articles instead
6. to make the suggestion convinced (convincing),
7. the collectors must provide more evidences (evidence) from
8. will obtain more favor of (omit, OF) >on the< market.

Good job!

李小含

thank you so much