小女的第一篇AA，Topic93求狠批，求指点！

WhiteSuby

中间部分，语句的组织太罗嗦。 比如: the conclusion the speak drew.... 直接写the conclusion is unreasonable就可以了。

我写了下如果是我，怎么答这个文章，你可以分析下思考结构。

First, the argument claims that because applications for advertising spots on KMTV decreased last year, it should change its focus to farming issues. This statement is unsubstantiated in any shape or form. The argument conveniently assumes that the core cause of decreased applications is due to the contents of its programs. There are other possible factors that might have caused the decline in number of applications. For instance, what if the advertising fee at KMTV were overpriced comparing to other competitors? If this were the case, customers might turn away from KMTV and thus cause the decrease in the number of applications. This argument could have been more convincing if relevant facts were present.

Second, the argument states that because KOOP reported an increase in advertising applications as a result of its change of focus, KMTV should follow the same strategy. Again, this conclusion is seriously flawed. The argument fails to present some key factors causing KOOP’s success. For example, the increase in advertising applications at KOOP might be attributed to its unique demographic that KMTV does not have.  What if the majority of population in the neighbouring town is farmers? This possibility will logically explain the increase in KOOP’s applications. On the other hand, KMTV might have a completely different demographic that changing its focus to farming issues will not solve the problem.  As a result, this argument is unconvincing.

Last, perhaps the most important ingredient that the argument fails to mention is the state of economy as a whole.  Just because KOOP increased its advertising application due to its change of focus, it does not mean that KMTV will achieve the same results.  There is a possibility that the rudimentary eocnomical structure of the city where KMTV operates differs from that of the city where KOOP operates; this key difference might cause the number of applications for advertising spots. For instance, if the economy at the city where KMTV operates were in a recession, it is likely that businesses will lack the financial resources to pursue advertising in a TV program. The argument fails to provide a complete picture and hence, the conclusion is weak.

秋晨小仔

谢谢提醒~
我好好看看！

qupengzhukuai

请教一下，你报的什么班呢，呵呵

秋晨小仔

不好意思，一直都没看到您的回复！
我报的是新东方的GMAT精品住宿强化班，我已经上完了，每天除了上课就是上自习，确实很有提高！
建议去上之前把单词过一遍就OK了。